Heather relationship poll on royalroad

Hmmm... Personally i think it is your story and you should write it as you like it. Its impossible to make everyone happy. As long as it does not become a focus, and change the story genre i think it will be fine. As i wrote in the poll here, I think it was a bit sudden. But i liked how it turned out in the following chapters. Now for the constructive criticism part. I think it is all about managing expectations. When changing the personal dynamics of the characters, there was too little foreshadowing form them personally (My opinion). It might seem a bit sudden for some readers. If it was later in the story you could add that, or you could add some internal dialogue about one of them starting to notice a change in the earlier ones. Back to normal comment mode: In the end I think its up to you to write the story you want. Dont change it because a comment or if ppl think so. Do what you think is right. If anyone mentions something and you think its right its another thing. Its not wrong to take ideas or criticism as long as it feels right to you. Just dont let others decide the story for you. You do you. :-) Edit: A few typos

I am personally happy with how it is, you are going at a great pace and using it to push growth in the characters. Alot of readers might fear you doing it for what other authors typically go with. On a side note, if you wanted an easier option, you can always just change some wording here and there to make it seem Heather said "We are Dating now!". The pre cursor to a full on boyfriend/girlfriend relationship.

Daniel Drake

Thank you for replying. I never wanted the "relationship" to become a big thing and have a focus in the story. In a lot of ways I want to use it to mature Frank a little and open his eyes that he could have a very different experience with women here. I also wanted it to be a strong example of Heather accepting the world and maturing enough to notice Frank and see how good he has been to her. It was a good way to showcase her growth and confidence in taking charge of drawing out his feelings. Which a lot of royalroad readers think is kinda strange. They don't think she should have approached it so confidently, or openly.

I was against it when you posted it here, but its not affecting the story in a negative way, just keep it as is.