HeartTheft Chapter 15
Added 2023-09-22 08:19:06 +0000 UTCIsidor rejoins the fold, and confession is good for the soul.
Or so I hear.
Comments/Critiques welcome, please!
Comments
thank you!
Rukis
2023-09-22 18:31:01 +0000 UTCI will offer a more indepth comment later, but for now, Legacy Dawn and Dusk showed up yesterday, and two more chapters of Heart Theft today. Some days are really good.
Tom Noyb
2023-09-22 15:23:54 +0000 UTCA couple of little things: '“Ascendance is promised to no one,” I said, by route', shouldn't that be 'by rote'? In 'the small stove used to heat the water out', that should probably be 'heat the water up'? 'I spoke with Redcoven’s Cloistered Physician after my long Confessional', would just 'Confession' fit better here? 'You have not even taken a full House Posting, yet… let alone trained for Inquisition work' seems like it would be better without the comma?
Sethvir
2023-09-22 11:11:05 +0000 UTC
