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Added 2023-08-07 14:07:07 +0000 UTCFate/Bonds Beyond Humanity
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I must say, this chapter is amazing. Your Rias's development is in my opinion the best. Out of all the Rias characters others writers tried to portray, yours is without a doubt my favourite. I hope we can see her being more badass in both tactics and battle again
Andrew
2023-08-11 18:40:39 +0000 UTCGreat chapter! The Kuroka fight really showed off Rias’s developments and I especially like how you mentioned that her destruction bullets are her method to ensure damage on tougher opponents than her, most stories overlook her powers the further into the stories they get, so I’m glad you’re still developing them in a cool manner! Also Shirou and Rias’s dance was a nice way to end the chapter. On a separate note, I haven’t seen the negative reviews that other comments have mentioned, but I just want to mention to you that I’ve kept up with your story since chapter 5 came out way back when, and I’m both thankful and glad that you’ve continued the story in a great way! I always look forward to the next chapter release and have been for a long time now! I hope you don’t focus to hard on the rude comments and still enjoy writing your story!
Archer
2023-08-09 10:59:47 +0000 UTCWell, to be honest, a lot of my review was developed for when we were at the end of Kyoto. That's why I think several points that I mention will be resolved later. Honestly, I grew up with Fate's most sacred trio. I still remember seeing Deen's adaptation in a pirate way. And it's hard to find Shirou's material. Nasu has other projects and apart from the crumbs that FGO gives. I know that my boy will be back on August 13, but it may also be a ploy for them to buy the volume and the most I have to say is "hello and goodbye". I think that's why FF is consumed so that we can see other stories, outcomes and tragedies. And that's why your fic gave me moments of joy. You are the third person who actively dedicated himself to creating a world in which our protagonist can dwell. Thank you for taking the time to respond to my extensive criticism. I think the impulse was caused by Kuroka. To be honest, I still disagree with the situations of Rin, Ravel and Kuroka. You know, I think I know what that ends in and why do you want that result if you have Luvia and Yoruichi? Anyway, I think I'll take a break. A few months of spiritual retreat (work) and I will return at the end of the year. That doesn't mean that my support is subtracted. I don't mind paying 5 dollars a month for 5 years to be able to see Shirou and Lorelei face the Wallachia. Seeing Mazinger Z face Zeus or that Seek and Shirou along with Lord Camelot end up creating/invoking Galatea or Minamoto no Tamemo. The appearance of Tachie. In the end, Seek-chan must frolick on Shirou's lap. It's worth the wait. And don't be an idiot. Write with your heart and not out of obligation.
Lacró
2023-08-08 22:08:55 +0000 UTCThis a good chapter and I like what you did with the introduction of Mozart's Noble Phantasm and having a happy atmosphere. I also like what you did with Rias' and Sona's conversation, which in turn grows their character instead of being one dimension in the original novel in my personal opinion. Hopefully, you can take some breaks because honestly while I do appreciate you are continuing this story with 2 large updates every month I feel you deserve some rest and clear your mind. I have seen some negative reviews from both FF and here and having a break can really help you. I will continue to support you because I truly enjoy this crossover.
SleepyBoi
2023-08-08 16:08:10 +0000 UTCAlso if someone else wants to ask any questions feel free to send a message or something, don't know if anyone will but you are my bosses, as long as I don't need to give spoilers, like I had to in a ´revious message of this tread, I will happily talk with you. But no discord though, that could get in the way of my work both here and my other one. Until next time.
Ronaldo Souza
2023-08-08 08:19:03 +0000 UTCRegardless I do have a vacation at the end of the year and until them I shall keep working because I made a promise. I get if you don't like some plots, I get the pacing isn't perfect, to be fair in the last bit if we are going to nitpick then it is never going to be finished, but some of the critiscim that you gave can be settled given enough time.
Ronaldo Souza
2023-08-08 08:17:34 +0000 UTCTo avoid saying anything else I get it if you want to stop reading and I agree that I need a break. Frankly life has been... hard the last few weeks and I do need some rest but the deal when I started Patron was that I would always post once per month, something that grew to twice because of the support that I am recieving. Understand this, I literally am only writting because you guys allow me. If I stop and just take the money I am not doing my part of the deal and unless I have a very good reason I refuse to stop. This story shall be complete or I will die first.
Ronaldo Souza
2023-08-08 08:14:22 +0000 UTCAlso Ravel has her own development going on as the Phenex Clan was much more humiliated and damaged after the game. She is dealing with her own struggle and a thirst for revenge against Rias that had her preparing for a rematch where she would 'recover what she lost'. That was it, she didn't beat Seek by cheating on anything either, it was fair and square. She doesn't have a peerage then how you ask? Easy, her brother isn't using his own at the moment and she managed to confince some of the Pieces to follow her for a while. It goes back to what I said way back when about Riser's peerage's designs, they deserve at least one more fight, at least some of them as Ravel didn't manage to convince everyone.... And now I am spoiling a future plot line...
Ronaldo Souza
2023-08-08 08:12:29 +0000 UTCThe Kuroka thing was complex because, as said in the chapter, she was a kid when it happened. It is supposed to sound odd, strange and even confusing because she wasn't thinking. Even when she shows up in the Underworld, and this is an interpretation that works on the original DxD even if I still consider it genrous there, was that she wasn't thinking. Kuroka's whole point is that she is desperate and thanks to Vali telling her about Koneko, he was paying attention to Issei's allies when he arrived to deal with Kokabiel, she knew exacly where her sister was. Then it was just a matter of showing up and hopping the love was still there as only Koneko would be able to detect Ki and find her.
Ronaldo Souza
2023-08-08 08:08:44 +0000 UTCAnother thing is that you pushed a little too hard on the Fate side, including Kotomine's introduction. Not gonna lie, as a caracter, I am struggling with him in particular because his evolution in Fate is so precise that it is hard to add him to the story. Also just because Rin works for Rias doesn't mean she owns her soul, it was mostly a joke... Kinda, depends of how it is interpretated but she isn't going to hell just because she works for Rias.
Ronaldo Souza
2023-08-08 08:00:06 +0000 UTCHowever I get that you disagree with other ideas, a lot of them, but come one, have a little faith. With how much you said I don't know where to start but I shall to be brief. First, maybe you should writte something because in a vacuo your ideas are great but you are not considering that there is a lot of set up you are seeing. For example, Act II is the second act of a Three Act play per say. Like you said nobody becomes a master in a month and Rias is still learning but that is just one form of her power, there will be another, perhaps two, as imagination is something ever evolving and complex. That isn't even touching on some equipment from Fate's side that can boost Destruction.
Ronaldo Souza
2023-08-08 07:57:50 +0000 UTCThe thing is, and that is what is happening on FF as well, is that wasn't Aprhodite's master plan, that was her introduction. It was mean? Yes but the thing is that as dark as what happened was it was still me fighitng to write something in character for a goddess with few to no morals to tame. Also yes, at the moment we are more on the DxD side of the map, I think I explained before that things would only change for good after Kyoto and a bit, basically Sairaorg's match is the 'last DxD' of the story per say. Honestly about the chaotic part I disagree since I had to show everyone a lot of stuff and organizing everything in just a few passing lines felt cheap.
Ronaldo Souza
2023-08-08 07:54:28 +0000 UTCYes, you read all this and allow me to give you some advice. Stop writing. Take a deep breath, rest for a few days and dedicate the rest of the month to organizing your notes. Reknit that web that was so perfectly woven at the beginning of the fic. Despite the fact that my interest was lost since Akeno. I'm still here and I'll continue to support the fic until we get to the Arch of Romania (You know why). "The first three lines are as important as the last ones"
Lacró
2023-08-08 06:24:05 +0000 UTCNow Kuroka. Damn, can't you be more of an idiot? All this "rescue mission" without any value. It's absurd. If Vali made a mess in Kuoh, I find it hard to believe that Altria allowed Kuroka and Bikou to go to what could be considered the 'Le Francport' meeting. Not to mention security. Who organized the event? They should fire him. They sneak into the main perimeter without being detected by a technicality in the bordering fields. Seriously, if the Demons have Yokais reincarnated, I find it hard to believe that they don't have someone capable of laying fields for their species. Kuroka even with such a weak argument as "hate, hate demons" and then says "I knew Sirzechs was kind" is it serious? She contradicts herself. Why don't I seek political asylum with the Yokais? Is Yoruichi an incompetent king who can't protect his people? How did you know that Koneko would go to the meeting? Wasn't it better to get it back in Fuyuki? Where there weren't so many nuclear warheads. I can even buy it for you if in previous chapters you showed Vali planning to provoke Ragnarok. But not even that. This whole plan is so DxDcanon that it seems like a joke. Before, everything you did made sense. And Kuroka's argument present here was useful if Ravel contracted it. That could explain how they defeated Seek (a genius at Sona level) and how he planned to defeat Gremory. To be honest, even if they discovered the trap, Rias couldn't go and complain because they would accuse her of being a coward. You had two options and you didn't use any. Was a closure necessary for Koneko? Yes. But it could have worked better. That's why I think you're tired and you're bringing this bad streak from Medusa. Your spirit still resurfaces in fights like those of Vali, Shirou and the girls or the new characters. But you keep the information very jealously and you fall in important times. These slips you had with Rin and Kuroka were followed and nothing supports them.
Lacró
2023-08-08 06:23:34 +0000 UTCNow Rias' power up is, much less, disappointing. All that of imagination and theories ends in simple guns. I say I am also in favor of the phrase "there is no strong man since gunpowder was invented" but, Rias went over by saying that he would not let himself be dictated in teaching and there you have her learning from him all-powerful Magus Killer. How boring. You can't become an expert in physical combat in 1 month. Not even with all the training in the world. The Stand was more fun in my opinion and left the door open for other figures to appear created from the energy of Rias (kanseitai-Susanoo). I say if there was the influence of Japan, so that resort to foreign brands. The worst thing is that Act III remains. And the pedantic attitude he maintains now almost becomes odious. The funny thing is that people like it. Even when it is out of the characterization of the character. You have no idea how many times I've seen it with Shirou.
Lacró
2023-08-08 06:22:35 +0000 UTCNow going back to the current line. What was your shit? Not having introduced Aprodita before. Yes, you did it with Rizevim and HeroF. You just had to put an introduction at the end of a chapter. Maybe in chapter 61. Of course, that had to be if you had planned chapter 63. Only that end as a reward for those who read the whole irrelevant half of the fight between the girls and the slaves of Lakmia. (I didn't even read it. Unnecessary and tedious. I'll buy it for you if you wanted to use that scheme for the "devil's luck". But it wasn't the case because then Rias says he can't take advantage of that.) Your second shit was to justify yourself with words how Karma and Destiny are. Both concepts that you have not introduced. And you had opportunities. Throughout this chapter and at the same time give value to Setsuna. Again for example in the chapter of Akeno's 3 fights (bored of reading) at the end Setsuna came out talking to Oogway about fate and its red thread (this as a reward for those who read the whole fight). And instead of putting Issei and Draig talking frivolously about dragons and fights. Put Draig telling him about other carriers and the curse of the SG. Come on, Autor-San, you must treat your readers well. Cause and Effect. Hell, that comment caused 4 chapters of bland filling. Chapter 64 was not necessary. In fact, the only one who contributed anything was 65. And the new chapter falls back into that tedious and redundant rhythm. If you wanted to introduce that shadow through Mozart and the fact that now many relics with history could become NP if the appropriate conditions are met. All that fit perfectly in '65 (I just had to cut off a little of the frivolous talk of Luvia and Reines and the redundant talk of Diodora) and the fight between Rias and Kuroka only adds stuffing.
Lacró
2023-08-08 06:22:06 +0000 UTCHowever, he chose to rape Rin and really a decision that contributed little or nothing to the plot. At the end of this arc we return to Fuyuki and I very much doubt that those in charge of taking care of the city will warn Rias (I doubt that you will make Rin go to bed with each guy present there so that they keep silent). So this will probably be swept under the carpet. After Ragnarok, Odin will pass by Fuyuki and you are going to tell me that The Father of Everything. Can't an older God feel the influence of a Greek goddess? I mean, Aprodita is not that he was in Fuyuki, but kidnapping through the Mirror Dimension. And finally, among so many Yokais including headers such as Yoruichi or Oogway, no one feels the stage of Aprodita in the Rhine. But Shirou has to come to ask for his crest to find out through the visions that Rin was raped. Do you really want to sell me this? It's hilarious. Shirou is literally going to find out and what is he going to do? Get angry and run to Olympus to knock on the door? Not because you will have to deal with HeroF. Then it will be something like: sorry Rin, it looks like you were raped and I'm very upset, but, thank you for your crest. Now I'm going to fight co nGil and then have sex with Setsuna but, I promise you that once we get back to Fuyuki I'm going to get more angry. (Wow Rin, it seems that the RG of Rias against Zairaorg involves Akeno's life. But once everything is over, I will get to work to make my frown fall on Olympus). Not to mention that the decision of the tragedy will be reduced to a half-time between arcs that will last 10 chapters where the ORC fights against the possessed Rhine. I very much doubt that you will make a Touma vs Othinus. And in the end, Sirzechs will appear to give Shirou a fragment of Rule Breaker that he stole from Zekram. What is coming now will be forced dialogues between Rin and Medusa. No one will notice the sudden change of Rhine. At most the most damage Aphrodita will be done will be to get into a threesome with Rias and Shirou and Encourage Akeno on the next step with Shirou. But I doubt that you will open up to other more adulterous things for the sake of your followers. Having said all this. What is the value of bringing Aphrodita? If you wanted a blow for Medusa to return to the Greeks of your own free will, you already had DBR and everything that the ORC faced.
Lacró
2023-08-08 06:21:28 +0000 UTCThat would be the ideal future. But do you wonder where Setsuna is? Personally, I don't think that character will work here. And that's it, because he barely participates in the story. He has not done anything relevant other than throwing a tantrum because they did not include her in a sword hunt. I don't hate her, but that a whole arc of thick caliber as it is Kyoto focuses on her is how to pamper her. Rin has more relationship with the heroes than she does. I understand that due to the Setsuna policies she can't follow the ORC, but, for the same reason, she can wait a little longer, until after DBR.
Lacró
2023-08-08 06:20:47 +0000 UTCLet's go to Kyoto, the Great Arch. Expected by many. Rin between which they tried to forge the sword and the confrontation with Rias. He would have nightmares similar to the cycle of dreams that happened in F/SN (either about Archer, ME or Shirou's son) would reinforce his desire to prevent Shirou from ending up the same. Here you could introduce his lineage (I see that you are putting a lot of emphasis on that) maybe the first half of the arc is from that. This would also give Shirou and Yoruichi time to have time alone to strengthen their relationship. And for Shirou to discover everything that the Shinto Pantheon has. I mean, Azazel said that the Shinto gods collected everything that belongs to the history of Japan. So it means that they protected the techniques and probably the lineage of the blacksmithing schools that Japan had throughout its history. Among them Muramasa. Although you could even introduce Masamune and have this duel as in that legend. Even introduce an OC waifu here. He also supported my theory that Asuna is Shirou's sister. He can even introduce the Seireitei and Amaterasu (the goddess who will be an enemy in the future) and the Tamamos Good. Shirou meets his family. We also see why his parents were in Fuyuki and the Muramasa family would offer him to rejoin the main chain, recovering his last name to try to achieve the dream of his ancestor, the "kusanagi". Shirou would refuse in the first instance. HeroF attacks Kyoto and well, in front of the monsters that are Balmug, Longinus and Gil they couldn't do anything. They take over Yasaka and Nijou Castle (Tokugawa). Shirou, Cao Cao and Angelo would have something similar to the "Banquet of Kings" they had in F/Z. They would expose their points about the natural world and its inhabitants. Looking before starting the massacre for a peaceful way to end everything. They wouldn't find a way and would decide to go to the blows. A much more developed Shirou would decide to take the mantle as commander, choosing to bear the deaths of those who give their lives to Kyoto under his command. Including the members of the ORC. Here you could enter the layer that Muramasa/Saber uses. Choosing to bear all the blame and determined to give everything for those he loves. Emiya approaches an apathetic Rin. Shirou would ask for your help to face GOB (here you have a real reason for Rin to give his crest to Shirou. She is the main heroine and looking to give her the tools for Shirou to survive, she will do it. On the other hand, if the bow is not focused on her but on Setsuna, it will be very bland that Emiya comes to ask for the crest and that she sits down and says 'Yes'.). Rin would question the value that Shirou gives to himself and because he wants to risk everything of himself for an external cause. She worried about how she will end up because of her selfishness and being harassed by Shirou's visions future, she would in principle refuse to give her the opportunity to fight. Choosing the Yokais to take care of the problem. But, knowing his Servant and that even though she denies him help, he will go to fight. She decides to give him the crest. Very similar to UBW. The confrontation arrives and good. It's obvious, isn't it? The ORC has no chance against the HeroF. Balmug is enough to sweep everyone out of a shock. Georg being the talent he is would defeat Rin and show interest in her, wanting to claim her as a wife. The faction of Heroes is about to win and Shirou engaged in his battle against Gil decides to take a shot that would cost him his life. Desperate and with his last will. Melt your RM to forge a sword that causes a diagonal cut to the castle. His sister in the middle of this completing the ritual. Alluding to the words he said at that dinner. Where he said that killing his loved ones would also kill him. Finally making the decision to sacrifice 1 for the lives of thousands. Illya is saved thanks to Sella. Shirou is impaled by multiple NP's but Gil saves him furiously from giving him the victory. The cavalry arrives and the heroes save the day. Shirou wakes up but regrets the action he committed when trying to kill his sister. Iris and Kiritsugo are there trying to calm him down, but, they wouldn't get it and Shirou, afraid of taking something else from them, would decide to leave the surname Emiya and take his other surname. Kiritsugo would accept that I screw up by so savagely introducing Illya to the world of the Magus and after an emotional talk Shirou decides to forgive himself and seek the power to save them all. Shirou would stay alone for a moment watching the stars and in that he feels that someone is sitting on his back. Rin asks her why he chose to save her. Shirou proceeds to tell him his admiration from Homurahara and that he did not feel comfortable taking away his hope of living with Sakura. In the end, Shirou and Rin end up confessing and copulating.
Lacró
2023-08-08 06:20:16 +0000 UTCTime later between arches and the clash that Shirou would have with reality (the RG of Diodora and the attack on the underworld). Rin would ask him in his ignorance to try with the plans that his family has, to forge the mystical code of the Kaleidoscope. Something tells me that probably if Rin didn't offer that shot to Rias at the beginning of the fic it's because he doesn't know that his family owns it. But back to the subject they would try to forge it and you could have several lines of play here. They open a portal and end up seeing Archer (this lends itself to fan service or exploring the concept of hero. Another alternative is to look into the future through another dimension and find a dystopian future where everything went to hell and everyone died and you introduce us to a son of Shirou (space to introduce another woman to the Harem) knowing Shirou would try to save him. But it would be impossible. And a strong blow for our protagonist. The third option would be with the Shirou of Mind of Steel. Anyone you chose would fix the relationship between Tohsaka and Emiya, similar to UBW. And Rin would have another goal to try to go actively once his soul is recovered, go to see the Kaleidoscope in London and become his disciple in the hope that Shirou's life does not end miserably. We arrived at the beginning of Kyoto and Rin decides that it is time to train to Rias. In a confrontation where they had to bet something of equal value. Rin would go against his principles and everything he had fought by betting on Sakura's soul and imaginary numbers. Rias without knowing about IN would not know what to bet, but Rin being Tsundere would choose the Soul of Shirou. Rias would refuse and well the plan of the mystical code would enter the scene at the end. Rin bet the Soul of Sakura and the plane of the mystical code. Rias would bet on Shirou's Soul and his position as Fuyuki's second owner. Obviously Rias (because of the pedantic attitude he is having in the current chapters if it seems that he would commit such stupidity) would not risk everything he loves and would think it's a joke. In order not to make the long story Rin wins (I mean, Tohsaka is talented and unlike her OOC Illya who seems to know and do everything, even surpassing Miguel with some robes). Putting herself as an equal in front of Rias. This means that Rin would not be another "Lover". And Rin would earn the chance to be Fuyuki's Second Owner. Sona, when going to the underworld to work fully on his dream, he would leave his position to Rin in confidence and with pride. It would no longer be a reward for consolation, but a show of confidence.
Lacró
2023-08-08 06:19:28 +0000 UTCIf I'm honest with you, I thought that when I talked about "a little adventure in Fuyuki," he meant that we would see Fate's most sacred Trio on stage. The bases were there and you had a clue to play with that. Even the opportunity for Altria and Shirou to have interactions in a solitary way. (Rias evacuates Shirou to earth and leaves him in charge of Tohsaka while they deal with all the shit of Lakmia (a demon of high rank and pure blood, family of one of the pillars and a title of renown, murdered in his own house.) The tools for Sirzechs' detractors to try to put their noses there and try to find out the reason for the death of one of their own. Xenovia stayed after what must have been a reprimand for Liz about leaving her teacher abandoned (you could have her ask Grayfia to teach her how to be a maiden. What gave relevance to the first title that Shirou gave him. Meanwhile Shirou in Fuyuki (you could make him have his first interactions with Sakura by taking care of him (in the same way that happens when Emiya hurts his shoulder. Of course, without the shadow of the Matou on her.). And having Shirou have a personal conflict about his weapons and the coming war to the Oppenheimer would have been interesting. Over time and because we are going to Diodora's RG. Our redhead will realize the harsh reality. But to see Shirou facing this conflict in a solitary way without anyone supporting him. Very similar to when his little meeting with "Los officeicinistas" happened. We could also approach Muramasa's problem and his obsession that made it look like his swords were cursed. Immersed in his desperation he would decide to go to the Orc and there he meets Altria (observing Calibur) he could ask him if he was thinking of drawing the sword and they could have a little conversation as if they were acquaintances (Avalon). He would ask her what she does in Fuyuki and she could say that Vali sent her to find out that she was looking for the Faction of Heroes in Fuyuki. But you can tell me: how is it that the HeroF and Altria are in Fuyuki. Being sincere between Georg's SG and the incompetence of security in basically every area. No one would complain. In the end, knowing Shirou, he would offer to help her. And curious about the attraction that is mentioned in the chapter of the fight against Vali. I would accept. Not knowing where to start, Shirou decides to go to Rin. If he calls Rias, it is most likely that the cavalry will arrive in Fuyuki. They're going to look for her but she's not at home (! Oh¡). Surprise, surprise. She is training in the church with Kirei. That's right, this was the perfect time to introduce it. In the Kirei canon he discovers himself through Emiya (F/SN) or Gil (F/Z) but how theoretically neither of the two events occurred. You could make his dialogues and Kirei by philosophically questioning Shirou's position regarding creatures outside of Christianity. And, as his integrations advance, Kirei would discover his truth and try to relive the tragedy he caused with Cleria Belial and the priest (if you could connect the dots here and put Shirou in a similar situation. But none of this happened because the magical builders are a bunch of useless people who can't build an apartment block and restore 20 square meters of wood. Seriously, they restore 40 hectares of infrastructure on a Sunday. But in a month they can't do something basic. Even Chinese construction teams make you a hospital in 7 days. Well, they leave the Church and Shirou would question Rin what he does by training in such a staunch way. She wouldn't say anything. At that moment they are interrupted by the HeroF. Heracles, Connla and other members appear. Fuyuki's trio against the heroes. Rin would have the opportunity to be a Master and control Archer and Sable. The heroes withdraw and our trio discovers that they are looking for the real grail. We have interactions here and there. Shirou confesses to them that he possesses the grail. And the final fight breaks out. In the end they manage to scare them away and well (here you could make Shirou be impaled by Gae Bolg). And perfectly the HeroF can try to do that. Illya literally told them that Shirou probably has the grail in the chapter after the confrontation with Vali. And behind her back, Cao Cao would send a small team to look for him. This way we save what will be in the future, a tedious and boring encounter between the ORC and Connla. Altria would make two new friends. She would retire. (Without any sex). Man, they're barely getting to know each other. And Rin would confess to Shirou that thanks to a revelation from Kotomine she plans to face Rias in combat and recover her soul. She wouldn't want to be tied up and in a dual way she would look for another kind of freedom. Contrasting with the freedom of Rias. Shirou, despite being Gremory's Lover, would agree to help her. Finishing, Shirou asks Rin to send him to the underworld and our knight in shining armor arrives just in time for The Meeting of Young Demons. You could even have your piano scene without having to force the encounter between Koneko and Kuroka.
Lacró
2023-08-08 06:18:55 +0000 UTCHello brother. How are you? Hell, I was reading the FF reviews and I can say, we really got a shitty storm. If you allow me to express myself freely, I will try to be as concise as possible. This chapter and the end of this arc leaves me with an empty and bitter taste. When I started in this fic, we had a pretty good and calm rhythm, but, since the end of the Shirou and Medusa arc. I can't help but feel that the fic is on a side. You don't classify the bows, however, that's notorious. The problem with this is that between arches it tends to overextend topics. We have an arc of 6 chapters and 7 additional chapters that do nothing but leave bread crumbs. At first, the mental burden of reading these chapters between arches was not so noticeable. The introduction to the Lakmia arch left much to be desired. I fully understand that these chapters are the basis for future arcs, but I can't help but notice that they are chaos. At the beginning of his fic, everything seemed to make sense. The characters who were going to enter the main stage were presented off-stage. But 'bang' Aprodita arrives without any warning. Interestingly, days before the launch of the chapter before the Rhine chapter. In the reviews I remember a guy rant about why the Verso/Fate didn't work with DxD and that this fic has more DxD than Fate. When you introduced a villain or antagonist. He did it in advance. See the case of Rizevim and Makiri or the Faction of Heroes. But Aprodita comes out of nowhere and does what she wants. You justify these actions with Karma and Destiny. I think he wrote that chapter because his ego was touched. I'm sorry if I sound like an idiot. The truth is that that chapter ended with 4 chapters that are not going anywhere. Only the beginning of the Dance is saved.
Lacró
2023-08-08 06:18:08 +0000 UTCThis fight scene was much better than the last one, it quick, but had the back and forth to still make it interesting. While mixing in character development. Almost every word in this chapter was needed without anything feeling like filler or padding. Good Job!
Brian Ziomkowski
2023-08-07 18:10:06 +0000 UTCLove the chapter and can't wait for more! I do hope that rias deals with the exhaustion somehow because that would be a issue.
Grant Walker
2023-08-07 15:11:14 +0000 UTC
