Steering Committee - Critique & Suggestion
Added 2021-07-02 21:09:01 +0000 UTCHello, Steering Committee! I'm making this post to ask for general feedback, constructive critique, and suggestions for things you'd like to see in a very general, forum-like way. I'm doing this to see what kind of feedback may lead to directions I go in for the future, things I practice with, or just things I depict in sketches and drawings. Popular, competing suggestions may lead to polls in the future.
If you see comments you agree with from other patrons, please favorite them, so I can mentally score them for support.
As a guide, comments that are helpful are:
- Things and subjects I write/draw that you don't necessarily like, or wish I depicted less.
- Things I don't depict enough of, or I depict quite a bit, and you just want to see more of it.
- Types of drawings you wish I did more of (comic style images vs. detailed drawings vs. sketch collections)
- Weaknesses in my writing and drawing you'd like to see me focus on specifically in future sketches and works.
- Types of characters you'd like to see more of (not necessarily species).
Any subject is cool. You can ask me to draw more of specific characters, but that doesn't quite help as much as contextual subjects, fetishes, stories, or just style, which can apply to a broader range. Often, the characters I'm drawing depend on upcoming project ideas, more than just idle whim.
And as you can expect, it doesn't help to ask me to render things that are against Patreon's content policies.
You won't offend me. I'm not looking for an echo chamber. This is meant to be a general discussion about your own preferences and wishes. Thank you for your participation!
Comments
Hi, Jay. I'm way super late to the party, but I I pre-gamed way too hard and only just woke up a few minutes ago. There's still a few shots left in the bottle. No, no, it's fine. I don't know what's floating around in it. Yeah, I know vodka is supposed to be clear. Look, alcohol sterilizes everything, OK? It's fine, don't be a pussy. Where are you going? I'll get straight to it, then. Your watersports artwork is the thing that got you my sub, particularly the wetting stuff. It's simply some of the best artwork of the fetish out there, and not just furry art, either. Just, in general, it kicks ass. Makes all that art by those talented Japanese artists who basically invented the fetish look like hacks. Amongst a couple of omorashi groups I have lurked in over the years, that one page comic of Lynne wetting her shorts while moaning and sliding down the door gets passed around all the time, and it always gets very high praise. A common type of comment is, "I don't even like furry shit, but holy fuck <3" I know it's a bit more of a niche group/ mutually shared deviancy than the broader furry community, but everyone in our cellar appreciates it greatly when we get tossed a bone. The other wetting one-offs of Lynne (and a couple others) have been quite nice, as well. I also enjoy the other watersports art you have put out, but I am definitely more drawn to the wetting. You know, because I'm a horrible pervert. Sue me. So here's a couple of suggestions. Possibly... maybe... absolutely inarguably 100% not good enough to do verbatim, but perhaps they could be a jumping-off point: 1) Follow up to Offline (besides Online) with Sissy taking charge and getting weird in an attempt to bring Marley back over to the desert of the real with everyone else. Maybe she calls his ISP and orders something that fucks up his internet connection for a length of time, or else just goes over to his house and just cuts the cable/ fiber in such a way that it's going to take days to get fixed and uses the opportunity to try and out-freak his pornographic head canon. And, because I'm predictable and have a one-track mind, she could be more forward about the W/S. Maybe making him hold this time. It always seemed to me like that was the part she liked the most, though perhaps that's just because she was drunk. But the way that she just immediately jumped his bone afterward made it seem like maybe she liked it more than she let on? Though, TBF, I think the whole comic was pretty much all about her liking it a lot more than she was willing to let on and I'm just looking at it through a very selective lens. This concept might work for a lot of the stuff from Offline. Do it like a role reversal, and have it be similar to how he starts out not as interested, but then starts coming around in the end like she did. Then still end it with him fucking right back off to jerking off to internet porn at the end and just end it on a copy-paste of the last panel from Offline XD. 2) More Lynne. Just, more Lynne peeing on everything (mostly herself). I think that there are quite a few people who would love to see an expanded version of the shorts-wetting comic. Maybe turn it into an origin story about her discovering her interest in W/S and wetting? Maybe it starts out accidental, or as a result of a prank or revenge by her brother or Charles, or whatever. 3) Femdom wetting/ bladder torture/ forced wetting. I like this role reversal, and content with it is exceedingly rare. I think it would play well with a character set that usually has a male being domineering toward a woman, and this is her getting her "revenge". Bonus points if it involves humiliation in public or in front of someone they wouldn't want witnessing (semi-private humiliation?), and extra double bonus points if she is abusing erections to both prolong the suffering and to cause him to lose control at the worst possible moment. Poking, slapping, pressing bladders also welcome. There is very, very little of this kind of content in any media which is a damn shame because there's a lot to be explored, there. 4) More straightforward MILF seduction stories. I know Sissy and Marley is kind of a twist on this old set-up, but the good old fashioned hot older lady seducing the young guy story is popular because it's hot and every teenage boy dreamed it would happen to them. Don't even need anyone to piss on each other in this one, just more hot moms violating their neighbor's trust by nailing their college-aged sons back on summer break ... and then pissing on them. Shit, what's wrong with me? 5) Charles and Marley get into an argument about whether Lynne or Sissy will get kinkier in bed (Or, perhaps, framed as "I can get women to do more for me due to my irresistible masculine charisma and sexual presence" despite the fact that both of them just happened to luck out find kinky and willing women, not that they themselves are unique sexual beasts capable of charming any woman into cooperating with their fantasies) and have a contest that quickly escalates out of eithers' control. 6) Milly? Milly. After-thought: Are you familiar with Omorashi.org? They have a paid content portal that might be a good way for you to expand your reach into that community while also opening up a revenue stream. I don't know what their terms are like, but it seems very much a community run show over there so I can't imagine that they're especially rough. I also know that your W/S art is polarizing and a bit of a contentious issue among your fans. Putting piss content up on a site like that might be a way for you to be able to draw the piss kink you want to while keeping it segregated from your main feed. I would still post it to Patreon, but maybe just as a link and description with a warning, so that your fans who aren't into it can avoid it but your subscribed fans aren't getting left out. It would also allow some people who aren't interested in a monthly subscription to just buy the niche content they're after, however I think that if you did it right you could probably use omo.org to direct people TO your Patreon. It's better than free advertising, because you could actually make a buck off of it. In general, though, from what I've seen, your W/S work (especially wetting, of course) is very appreciated over there. Even if you aren't interested in dealing with another store and payment headaches (understandable), I do think that throwing up an artist thread in the art forum would be a good way to spread some goodwill and spread your art and your name to an audience that might like your art when they see it, but might not know who you are. From chats on their discord, that kinda seems to be the case. That Lynne shorts comic gets re-posted every few weeks, and then the channel blows up with a bunch of people asking who made it. Introduce yourself, brah-ssiere. Might get a couple subs tossing nickels atcha, who knows. Just a thought that occurred to me while I was writing this p̶o̶s̶t̶ novella. ... Sorry for the novella.
NefPer
2021-09-01 06:21:09 +0000 UTCCheating on a partner you intend to be with but realizing that perhaps you aren’t as fulfilled being with them as you thought so those feelings may lead one character or the to other being unfaithful
Rose Head
2021-07-11 20:05:59 +0000 UTCThanks! Probably won't ever do a gay comic, since I'm really not into that. But thanks for the feedback. :3
Jay Naylor
2021-07-06 13:07:45 +0000 UTCHi Jay, I am a bit nervous doing this so I will keep it short. I think your new character Pepper is a great addition. I also really loved Penny’s Problem, my favourite comic so far! I do wish we could see more of penny and maybe a gay comic as I don’t remember the last time we had one :(. I would really like a gay comic please! I also really enjoy Brook. I think your character design is great, I do wish that we had another comic similar to twice as hot, that comic had a lot of attractive situations for the character which made it extremely pleasant to read monthly. Overall though, your work and especially art design is outstanding and is always enjoyable to read! Hope this helps :).
Lyla
2021-07-05 23:28:20 +0000 UTCHi Jay, Thanks for your artwork. I appreciate your efforts. After some contemplation here are my thoughts. 1) I really appreciate Your newer characters, Billie Barker, Enola, Sophia, Pepper, Francesca, Francisco, Madelen et al. 2) Billie's debut was perfect. Her actions spoke louder than words. Just enough talk to get what She wanted from a captivated Penny and more! The older, MILF type characters keep my interest as I am no longer a young pup and anticipating some unexpected erotic encounter or perhaps a singular nude sketch showering or something similar would be cool. (3 Sometime a while back, I downloaded an image containing a character set of your characters with a color line chart linking them and their relationships to each other. If this was your work, do you think that you have added enough additional characters to update the existing one or create another? 4) Thanks for your time! I look forward to your future works. 5) More Coffee! Grin.
Antarctican
2021-07-04 15:56:42 +0000 UTCMore wolves doing wolf things
Hairy maclary
2021-07-04 14:33:53 +0000 UTCJust as an idea: maybe a story with a bit of a space Themen. Like one or more of your characters are playing in a game and fantasying over some "fun" they could have there. Or something like that. As I said just an idea your work, the art in generell and Storys you tell are already amazing! ^^ This could just be an idea vor your characters from your "offline" and "online" Storys ^^
KaoruUzu
2021-07-04 08:27:23 +0000 UTCImho more male chastity is needed. I bet Kaori & a certain poodle would agree. Maybe Sparky returns someday? Love your tough female characters. Keep it up!<3
Untalented Assassin
2021-07-04 00:34:53 +0000 UTCI like how the personality and kinks of each your character is definied. For me it doesn‘t matter if I am into these kinks or not. With no conflict there comes not storie and these need‘s to come with a variety of fetishs. And what I would like to see more is human male on furry female (I don‘t know were the patreon policies stand by now. so if it is forbidden just ignore my comment😅)
Kellerkind1931
2021-07-03 18:56:23 +0000 UTCI personally enjoy the depth you go into sexualities and your characters, how you take the time to dive into what makes them tick essentially. I don’t necessarily think you’ll ever stop doing things like this, but it’s definitely a stellar attribute to your comics. I understand that detail and more depth into your characters would require a fair bit of writing on your end, and would eat up page space. Maybe, possibly, in the beginning of your comics you could add an introduction? Some textual based pages that give that detail you can’t really add normally. I just enjoy your writing and would really like this immersive feel. (I also blabber and talk a lot and don’t really know if all this makes sense. I can clarify if there is any confusion on anything)
Exodus
2021-07-03 16:14:08 +0000 UTCHermaphrodites I don't do because they're not very realistic. I know some people are born intersexed, but that's not the same thing, and isn't fully functional the way it's intended when furries want to be hermaphrodites.
Jay Naylor
2021-07-03 13:05:14 +0000 UTCWithin dating culture? Elaborate?
Jay Naylor
2021-07-03 13:01:38 +0000 UTCAlso I will say cheating within dating culture is something that you might want to explore just as an interesting avenue
Rose Head
2021-07-03 12:51:41 +0000 UTCI do miss the era of cotton wine the days of massive hung wolves snapping up healthy young human women inducing them to mate with cottonwine and cuckolding their husbands and partners. I don’t remember ever not liking one of those sorts of scenarios. It’s also fertile ground for new characters but in the end do what you like! Enemy was 🔥 but you don’t necessarily have to dive back into that right away if you’ve got other inspirations you want to get outgoing draw what you want I’ll support
Rose Head
2021-07-03 12:32:19 +0000 UTCPersonally I don't like the watersports content, but I can't claim that you are forcing it on me. Love the impregnation stuff, would love more of it + the pregnancy period that follows. Would also like to see more of the twins, but alas.
legojohn
2021-07-03 08:43:01 +0000 UTCI would like to see some of Fisks’ conquests after he left the military to work for the “company”. Before he became the family man. Like when he met some of the other operators that he may have gotten close with at times. Like maybe a heated discussion with a partner who almost blew a mission, and them arguing about it, turning into an interesting night…. So they both blew off some steam…..
David Shiffer
2021-07-03 07:07:19 +0000 UTCI dislike bondage and degradation. Would like to see some, I dunno, passionate kissing scenes between romantically entangled characters. I also like Audrey and Mary a lot. Would have been nice to get one final scene in Penny's Problem with her finally getting that penis she wanted!
Xystophoroi
2021-07-03 05:35:10 +0000 UTCYep, crossdressing of any genders please
Xystophoroi
2021-07-03 05:33:18 +0000 UTCBig bondage fan. But I'd like to see people digging on things, not being slaves or humiliated kind of things? Just digging being hit/hitting tying etc etc. Happy fun bondage.
NotHereReally
2021-07-03 05:22:44 +0000 UTCMy favorite character is samantha, after her last comic where she participated I was left wanting more, she has the fetish of getting pregnant no? Why not a short story with a male (not a stallion) with whom she shares this fetish and finally finds someone to be with, that most of the comic is pregnant (7 or 8 months gestation) and she ends up having that puppy or two. But I agree with the comrades, you can draw what you want, be selfish sometimes! Just a suggestion. You are one of the best! ✨ Cheers Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator (free version)
Andry SilverFang
2021-07-03 02:16:42 +0000 UTCI like the longer comic format the last two comics have taken. I'd love more impregnation/risk and pregnancy, more Cottonwine/Lupkinville anthro work, and group sex - specifically DP's. I'd like to see more characters like Claire who are full bodied and take charge - maybe a bit chubby? I love Lynee for her carefree attitude and body hair and sweat. I've also always wanted a return to Mistress Theresa to see where things went with her. I like the character stat sheets you've been doing, could that be a regular thing?
Dale Evans
2021-07-03 01:44:14 +0000 UTCThe longer stories are definitely a plus, the stories make the fun better. I would personally like to see more bunnies, otters, mice. The latest comic Penny which you are just wrapping up is nice, would like to see Penny on the bottom taking instead of giving. I am not sure what your stance on herms is, I can respect arguments for or against but its something I've thought about in your artstyle(submissive herms especially). If you end up going with an equine story, I wonder what or who Lance Cannon has been up to lately.
Foladan
2021-07-03 01:27:13 +0000 UTCHi Jay, first off, I love the direction you've been going in with your recent comics, longer more in depth stories. I think the trade off of fewer finished works over the course of a year for longer stories is a good one, in my opinion. As a bi male I would be love to see more male/male comics; however, I know that may not have as large of an audience as your other works. I've always loved your taboo stories like infidelity and making their partner watch as they're with someone else. Perhaps even the continuation of older story lines. Love all you're doing! Looking forward to what you have in store for us moving forward!
Conner
2021-07-03 01:06:29 +0000 UTCI didn't mean... you know what? yeah
Beleynn
2021-07-03 01:05:52 +0000 UTCAthletic equines peeing on humans. Got it.
Jay Naylor
2021-07-03 00:19:02 +0000 UTCI'd love to see: - More characters with a build like Zoe or Red (or just more Zoe & Red) - Watersports - Seconded more anthro x human and variety of species - More equine characters, both female and male
Beleynn
2021-07-03 00:07:52 +0000 UTCSecond more antho x human work. Would love to see a greater variety of species, with more stuff along the lines of Mistress Theressa's Guide to Carnal Exotica. Also like size differences between characters. I thought the large size difference in the short Kaori Meets Bruce comic was super hot. Both larger male x smaller female and larger female x smaller male are good with me.
Shyster
2021-07-02 23:21:24 +0000 UTCI know you have stated that you are not all that interested in dp, but I do wish you would depict more of it. It is too big of a threesome/gangbang trope to ignore.
Stephen Nedland
2021-07-02 22:45:20 +0000 UTCGeez I'm such a big fan that it's hard to pick something... I think your stories are great, your art is fantastic, and where I don't have a favorite or preferred kink I enjoy reading and learning from your comics about them. I do feel that most of your stories have sort of a bitter end like there is no happy ending but maybe that's just life or how you like to write. I love your work. I personally would like to see more from the world of "Enemy", but a big part of that might be because I favor wolves and dogs (canines) over others. So maybe if I had to request something it would be more wolves.
Lord Kaio
2021-07-02 22:44:58 +0000 UTCI would like to see more crossdressing. But I have liked everything you done so far so just keep doing your thing and I think everyone will be happy.
Thisguy94
2021-07-02 21:45:37 +0000 UTCI'm always selfish, and I'm not going to let you tell me to draw something I don't already want to. I'm just interested in your feedback.
Jay Naylor
2021-07-02 21:37:26 +0000 UTCPersonally, I've never been a fan of watersports, but I know that it's a kink you enjoy and that means I'm just going to have to deal with it. Luckily, you format your comics in such a way that if watersports makes an appearance, it's confined to a single page, and that page does not contain any important story elements to the comic, thus when we download the comic, we are free to just cut the watersports page out. I appreciate that.
Goth Skunk
2021-07-02 21:33:50 +0000 UTCJay, please don't make yourself our slave. I just want you to draw the things you enjoy. I don't want you to burn out. It's good to take suggestions, but don't be afraid to be a little selfish sometimes. But, if I could make a suggestion for a future project (if you're willing), it would be nice to see Charles getting knocked up again in his own short comic by an ex/new boyfriend or something. I loved him in "Switches"!
CHEEZMA
2021-07-02 21:25:23 +0000 UTCI love your short shorts from several years ago. Anything with infidelity and pregnancy/pregnancy scares. But I haven't been disappointed with anything recently. I feel like I am getting my moneys worth with your work
T-rex 1973
2021-07-02 21:22:55 +0000 UTCPersonally and I know you’ve discussed how you don’t wanna tread into territory that may run afoul of Patreon I really love your anthroXhuman work. You manage to make it so tantalizing and I wish in whatever capacity you could dive back into that whether it’s Lumpkinville or Cottonwine. I also notice you focus particular on a lot of female characters which I do love most of them but it’s rare when a character like Aron or someone stars in a comic I feel like. Not too too much but at times I feel like I see more comics staring your female characters to your male characters and I sure wouldn’t mind seeing more of them too even if it’s someone you haven’t messed around with in a bit and I know it’s because some like Fisk, Tommy and Robert are happily married but just a thought on my end
pokediginut
2021-07-02 21:13:38 +0000 UTC
