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Added 2023-02-03 22:10:35 +0000 UTCErick glanced toward the guildhouse-like struct
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I think you should just write another story, if you're really jonesing for that "create a unique system" experience, cuz this all seems... unimportant to me. Not that I think the system is bad, or that I don't understand the significance of the invention of other Scripts within the story, but I'd like to read about the MC interacting with the established world and characters using the already established magic system. This is a fake reality with very low stakes due to saves and automatic reincarnation, with very minor (material?) rewards, without the vast majority of his magic and skills, in an illusionary history lesson, by himself. It's just skippable, and that's not really ideal, to me. If instead of however many chapters we get devoted to this dungeon, we got "Eric checked out Atunir's dungeon and really liked her "Script V2"", it doesn't seem like much would change. Unless immediately after this you're gonna do a 90 year time skip, and have Eric hang out on Atunir's new planet. And if you were gonna do that, that new planet would have stakes and other people around to make the exposition and internal theory crafting more bearable. This comment quickly morphed into being more whiny than I intended.
Gardor
2023-02-14 05:57:50 +0000 UTCLove this chapter. Seeing Eric have fun and being a noob again is great.
Jake Martin
2023-02-05 16:43:23 +0000 UTC
