Demon lord chapter 2 P1-3
Added 2021-01-28 08:52:12 +0000 UTCSorry for late post this week but here is update for our demon lord comic.
I've change the text color to be a bit darker. It's should be easier to read.
If you find any mistake or have a suggestion feel free to post it in the comment.
Comments
he changed in a sexy evil nurse dämon
Stormfries
2021-01-29 18:39:30 +0000 UTCYeah, definite improvement on the text colors. Good call making them more vivid to match the rest of the art. Also, the cracks around Gilda's mouth came out looking really nice. They are such a great tease for her true nature. Any reason you dropped the "crack" that was in the sketch though? Did seem like a great place for that sound effect in a jagged font. Several very minor text issues, A: Three months later, it finally occurs to me that page 2 should probably start, "You have been asleep for...", B: there's a dangling quotation mark in the last dialog on page 2, and C: no space after the comma in "...Aria,don't..." in the first dialog on page 3 and ¿two spaces? in "...Goddess's next..." down at the bottom, but now I really am nitpicking.
Asani
2021-01-29 07:33:52 +0000 UTCStunning work! I look forward to more in due course :)
Arbiter
2021-01-28 12:44:40 +0000 UTCWow, love how her mouth shatters apart when she opens it. Nice little detail to Gilda.
StarGazer
2021-01-28 09:19:40 +0000 UTCThank you! I've fixed it.
ibenz009
2021-01-28 09:08:06 +0000 UTCSeems like it, it’s fun to imagine what she and Aria’s new forms are capable of. Also the look of giddy delight on Gilda’s face in the following panel is quite inviting😄.
MagicCobra911
2021-01-28 09:03:27 +0000 UTCAwesome! Only mistake I was able to find was that on page 2, the second panel has the same sentence twice ('we really did a number on this place')
Roxanne Giling
2021-01-28 08:59:15 +0000 UTCInterestingly enough I didn’t know that the place Hero fought the Demon Lord originally was a castle, i thought of it as a tower. Did Hero, Gilbert and Aria destroy The Demon Lord’s previous servants (past demonically transformed humans) prior to splicing her and inadvertently unleashing the lineage curse?
MagicCobra911
2021-01-28 08:58:16 +0000 UTCI have a feeling Gilda has the ability to repair herself as a golem since she can open her mouth further breaking her cheeks for wider month then able to repair the damage like there is never a scratch in the first place would like to see a scene where she is destroyed into pieces during combat only to be repaired again which looks cool and make her look powerful after what the new demon lord did to her
Arxynos
2021-01-28 08:57:56 +0000 UTCI love this story I love Gilda
Mitchell Pedler
2021-01-28 08:57:14 +0000 UTCThose cracks around the mouth were a brilliant touch ^.^
Rökkr Ragnarok
2021-01-28 08:54:14 +0000 UTC
