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AbnormalvAverage a.k.a. J.D. Mullenary Sr.
AbnormalvAverage a.k.a. J.D. Mullenary Sr.

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Don't do this too often

But, I'm a little nervous about this last chapter. 


I think the GodEater system is needed for my finale, and to make Symphony work with my future plans. But, maybe it's too soon? 

Basically, I'm feeling uncomfortable because I'm not sure if I did this chapter right, and I'm curious about what you guys think. You know the story just as well as me, did this feel off, and if so, why? 

Comments

As long as you explain everything in the next chapter, the issue with it being too soon can be fixed.

Wanderer

it's likely that I'll split the chapter

Joshua David Mullenary

Good notes.

Joshua David Mullenary

I think that killing a god, even a lesser one, needs more build-up than a couple of paragraphs. I hardly paid attention to the gods that were not in an active conversation with Walker and to execute him so quickly is a little rushed. We never had a chance to start to hate him before he was dead

Jeremy Young

No need to gather evidence the system already records everything.

Jeremy Young

Might need to put him in prison first to gather evidence

Baron of Awesome

Might be funny if they did a phoenix write style court case and the rule an execution.

Baron of Awesome


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