V.07 Beta release
Added 2017-08-28 12:03:11 +0000 UTCHere's the Beta for v.07. This time around there were few bugs, but if you still find one please list it down! Thanks for your patience and I hope you enjoy the multiple variations on the story :)
Comments
I wanna see Dave pop a boner on the beach ;)
Leif Blom
2017-08-30 12:26:32 +0000 UTCThe only thing I can say is that I'll try to keep making the best game I can in the best way I can!
Eva Kiss
2017-08-29 17:47:53 +0000 UTCFound some more typos. Nipples is misspelled here: "Our niples brushing together slightly..." Should be "won't": "Ok, that's it. You're done. You wont get sunburned now, that's for sure."
Breadloaf
2017-08-29 16:15:59 +0000 UTCLoved the shower scene with Eva. Hope that line develops into a threesome with Dave. Ashley peeping on Jack at the beach was hot too, especially for virtuous Ashley. In fact, all round this was a great and sexy update. Doug and Ashley's hookup and especially her wtf!? at Doug's offer/plea - so good. I'm so impressed with your ability to provide such quality content in so many different storylines, all in one update. The grammar is way better too, you must be getting it proof read and corrected before release, which is all the more impressive. Hands down the best VN on Patreon I've seen.
Subliminal
2017-08-29 01:19:49 +0000 UTCNice idea the one about the natural boobs. Regarding Eva skills... I'm not that sure Dave is her first rodeo, yeah she said that much and Ash knows her since forever, but still...
Cabot
2017-08-28 20:57:36 +0000 UTCWhile you can’t name the saves individually (as far as I know) you CAN name each of the pages with the 6 save slots. That way you can have a page (or more) easily identified for each of the routes you are interested in playing: Good Ash with Eva enemy, Good Ash with Eva friendly, Bad Ash in open relationship, Bad Ash but No Wilson, and so on… Just sayin in case someone dind’t know.
Cabot
2017-08-28 20:49:32 +0000 UTCGreat update! I love the way the subtle ways the characters progress. I've lost track of which of my saves are which though!
Sharper
2017-08-28 20:35:23 +0000 UTCI wrote most of what I thought when it was an alpha, and what I said at that point is still true. I think that the Instagram subplot is awesome - it serves as a vehicle for Ashley to get more naughty and show off an exhibitionistic side, which I like. It's also a great way for Ashley to get in contact with the adult entertainment (both the legal and illegal), such as modeling, stripping, pornography and escorting. Nice. Maybe the nude selfie is leaked and attracts the interest of a porn agency? The stage is already set for the escorting job, after all. There's been much focus on the bad girl routes together with body modifications, so I thought that I should mention something more vanilla. Right now Ashley has some doubts about the size of her breasts, with no real option for the natural boob lovers to immediately discard those doubts. An easy way to solve this would be to let Ashley shop for some different sized bras. Let's make an example where she buys two different sized bras and tries them, which gives the player three options: "I'm fine as I am", "Maybe I should enhance them a bit..." and "Bigger is better!" where the last two options keeps her thoughts about breast enhancement, and the "I'm fine as I am" choice kills those doubts forever. Would make it a bit more real when you play an Ashley who wants to be as natural as possible. Maybe it's something you've already figured out, but it's hinted towards Dave being Eva's first boyfriend, just as Eric is Ashley's first. So where does Eva's deepthroat skills come from, being evident by her being able to swallow Jack's impressive length completely? It's obvious that she has had some practice with big objects. Maybe Dave is a grower and not a shower... Great work as usual! Just like the rest of the universe I thought that the scenes were really hot and well drawn. I might have said it before, but it would be really hot if you drew some sex flush (reddening of the skin on her chest, stomach and so on) when Ashley is really enjoying herself. All visual cues are nice, and it would be a natural expansion of her flushed cheeks when she is feeling kinky :). Edit: I also wrote a small suggestion in the community section.
Breadloaf
2017-08-28 20:15:06 +0000 UTCGreat update Eva, very hot scenes and love the way the different paths and versions of Ash are developing. Only thing I was hoping for that was missing was a little Ash/Jess getting more intimate but you made up for it in the other scene. :p Keep up the good work!
DecafHigh
2017-08-28 19:39:44 +0000 UTCSo here's all typos I could find, except those three PMs I sent (since I didn't really know where to report them). I'll write some descriptive praise in another post! I would write like this instead: "I wondered how Eric would be doing..." I wondered how would Eric be doing... "it's" instead of "It's" Well, It's been hard, honestly... "It" instead of "Is": What? Is has to be me? "intensified" instead of "insensified": "Her moans instensified as my fingers stimulated her pussy more intensly. She was about to cum, I could feel it." Send me a hot picture: "I want to whip the willie, send me hot picture." This is just a personal preference, but I would probably replace "sweet" with something else, since it makes me think about peppermint gum. But maybe that's because I'm currently chewing on Wrigley's Extra Cool Breeze Sugarfree Gum®. "The feeling of her lips, her smell, the warmth of her body and sweet breath..." "unbelievable" instead of "unvelievable": "His unvelievable physique, his strength, his awesome cock..." "But" instead of "but": It was a new sensation, something strange... but also exciting, as Nat had said. If Ashley bought the Bad Boy, then the wrong name for the dildo appears during the deepthroat attempt: I grabbed the Average Joe and brought it to my lips. "Herculean" instead of "herculean": I watched Jack as he removed his clothes, baring his herculean physique. I would add a comma. Like this, "So you say, ha ha." instead of: "So you say ha ha." "his" instead of "hus": "I continued to run my hands over his torso, feeling the hard outline of hus muscles." Dived is technically correct. However, "dove" is more common in American English, where "dived" is used outside the USA and Canada. If the game is set in a nondescript America then you could consider using dove. "I dived under the waves and swam for a good 30 minutes." Your spacebar was misplaced here (including quotation marks so you see what I mean): " I might have changed my mind about you."
Breadloaf
2017-08-28 18:29:56 +0000 UTCI already said it for the alpha, but great job EK, especially since done during your chaingang/warzone stint. Now that you're almost free at last, and after you can catch some well-deserved R&R, what do you plan to do with the extra writing time? More frequent updates, longer and more complex releases, or a little bit of both? Thanks for the good job.
Novamarauder
2017-08-28 17:59:40 +0000 UTCYeah, the masturbation menu bug is a little stubborn annoyance. By looking at the code, the Dave's and Doug's options seem to be written differently from all the other ones, but I do not know how to rewrite it to correct the bug. Anyway, I suggest either to remove the bug or if this proves too troublesome to adjust the list so no option at all disappears once clicked and everything may be re-watched until the players ends the scene by clicking on the last option. Either solution is viable, it is the disparity between options that is annoying. My Ash is not meant to have Dave and Doug at the top of her masturbation fantasies or fuckbuddies list.
Novamarauder
2017-08-28 17:57:12 +0000 UTCA small bug already pointed out but still present: Dave and Doug’s options don’t disappear after selected in the masturbation menu. And a graphical glitch this time I remembered how to reproduce: if going to the beach with Natasha and looking for her and Jack at the snack bar, after returning Ash’s body sprite will be at the center of the screen while her face will be at the left. The issue of not being able to sextext Eric after doing it with Arthur or Wilson I guess is working as intended. I’ll say it again: a very good update in my opinion, I would have liked that teased new short scene (at the beachwc maybe? Wink*wink) but great update anyway, the waiting for the next one gonna be hard, lol.
Cabot
2017-08-28 17:09:53 +0000 UTCVery nice update, loved all the beach variations.
Leif Blom
2017-08-28 15:05:30 +0000 UTC
