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Succubus Quest Ch. 8

It was still dark when Vivian opened her eyes. She wrestled herself out of bed, fighting the urge to rest a little longer.. She was exhausted from the day before, but exhaustion was an old friend from late nights in Kyoto and Prague.

Hunger was a less familiar sensation, one that was gnawing at her belly with each fumbling movement she made to dress. In her past life Vivian had barely been able to feed at all, and none of mother’s trials, rituals, or experiments had improved the situa...

Succubus Quest Ch. 7

“... basically a closed barter economy,” Jerry explained, gesturing with his hands as he spoke. He’d been talking for a solid half hour, mostly about how much money he was going to make once he ‘got things going’ in Kampi Village. “There are the outlying farms on the plains to the north, the hunters who kill things in the forest, that sort of thing. I think some of the villagers gather and potion stuff from there too - I really need to ask Mia about that stuff, but once you get he...

Succubus Quest poll

Hi everyone! I'm working on the next several chapters of Succubus quest at the moment and I was hoping for some feedback. Comments and/or discord discussion are more than welcome too. 

As a baseline, I should mention what I personally don't like (and thus won't write) in an energy-drain scene: 

I'm not a fan of when the victim is in pain, or when the succubus is really vicious or cruel about the victim's death; teasing, mean or otherwise is on the table if they're gettin...

A Virtual Temptress Ch. 20

Dan’s path wove through the bustling streets of Nath Valen. He wasn’t looking at the burbling fountains or listening to the raucous call of merchant’s from Flensing Street, nor did he notice the luxurious scent of brightvale blossoms, just in bloom at the end of summer, gracing the white stone flower beds with lazy elegance.

What he was focused on - with increasing worry as he approached the Inquisition compound - was that attending class had been a mistake. It wasn’t as though ...

The Queen's Service - Ch. 1 & 2

This is a short story I've been working on the past week: which I'll be releasing in four chapters. Sexy scenes don't start till Ch. 2, so I've bundled the first two together. I have 3 and 4 storyboarded out, though I'm not sure if I'll write them next or if I want to work on something else inbetween.

Chapter 1: Jailbreak

It was dark out, somewhere before midnight, the moon a sliver of pale yellow radiance. Warm, humid air was occasionally interrupted by a ple...

The Pale Tree

This is a short horror story that I narrated. Not my regular thing, but it was an enjoyable short project that I did for myself. With that in mind, any criticism is welcome. I've posted a few questions if you're up for answering specifics, but about the story, voice, or sound in general would be useful.

1. Did the tone of voice suit the story? What do you think would be an improvement to how it was read, and how the voice could better work with the text?
2. How was the pacing for th...

Succubus Quest, Ch. 6

I hope you guys have been enjoying the story so far! If you have any feedback about what you've enjoyed or what you're hoping to see, I'd love to hear from you in the comments, DMs, or on Discord. I've been really having fun writing Vivian's adventures.

First things first, Vivian thought to herself. Assess the situation. It had been a while since she’d been assigned any field work in her past life, and truth be told she’d never been great at it....

Succubus Quest Ch. 5

The stone cell was cold, rough, and slightly damp, but at least it was clean. Vivian leaned against the wall, eyeing her captor through the bars. He inclined his head slightly then leaned back, resting his feet on a nearby table and crossing his legs one over the other. Maybe it would have felt better, Vivian considered, if he had been nastier. More of a proper jailor. Instead he was calm, collected, and smug. It was infuriating.

Still scowling, Vivian flipped open her character sheet. ...

Succubus Quest Ch. 4

The sign had said Kampi Village, but as Vivian approached, it looked more like a fortress. The road had led her to a chest-height stone wall backed with palisade, grim spikes of wood that towered beneath the thin moonlight. The entrance was flanked by a pair of lanterns, like twin anglers drawing her in with their lure.

The gate was open and unguarded, but Vivian still hesitated. It felt off. Wrong, somehow, in a way she couldn’t quite place. She crept forward, boots scuffing softly a...

Succubus Quest Ch. 3

Vivian hadn’t really been sure what to expect. Despite her name, Granny was a massive, gnarled, monster, and the scraping sound of her dragging the dead bandit (unconscious? Did it really matter?) had aggressively punctuated Vivian’s fear.

But the tunnel had spilled out into a charmingly decorated cavern. The smooth stone walls were adorned with paintings and tapestries, embroidered cushions and knicknacks. Strategically placed candles suffused the room with warm orange light. It wa...

A Virtual Temptress, Ch. 19

Chapter 19

Dan was lounging in the oversized bed, trying to muster the energy to get up. The place Lexi had been lying was still warm, her scent drifting pleasantly around him. It wasn’t laziness, he told himself. Any man would struggle against so devious a trap.

With a great surge of willpower, he managed to roll to the edge of the bed and sit up, yawning as he flicked Blaize Firewild’s character screen open. His brows furrowed as he scrolled through various screens and menus...

A Virtual Temptress, Ch. 18

This is a rough draft and unedited, but we are long overdue for this chapter so I thought I'd share it right away! I'll make another upload with attachments once I've had time to tidy up.

Edit: I've replaced the chapter with the final draft and added files for those who prefer that. No major revisions were made, just some rephrasings and general tidying up.

Chapter 18

Dan woke to the rough staccato of raindrops on his roof and the cobbles outside. Slender fingers of light r...

Succubus Quest Ch. 2

Vivian spun quickly, wobbled on her heels, and barely kept her balance. There was a scruffy man in worn clothes pushing his way toward her through the undergrowth, a red bandana obscuring the lower half of his face. He carried a long, jagged knife in his right hand.

It took her a moment to process what he had said - something about the roads not being safe. He has to be a bandit, she thought. Right? Who else says shit like that? The rusty knife and aggressive posture l...

Succubus Quest Ch. 1

Thank you all so much for your patience while I've been getting myself together! This is a newish story I'm working on that I plan to run for a while, and I'm trying to be a little less stressed out about making everything neat and perfect (which has traditionally been a struggle for me). Basically, I'm trying to sacrifice a little bit of "everything is perfectly clean and edited and planned out" in exchange for feeling less stressed about all of those things.

Those of you in Discord m...

Update for April 2022

First off, I wanted to thank all of you for your patience. I've been kind of going through it between work, job hunting, and some personal stuff, which has left me less time and (more importantly) less energy to work on writing. I'm a little bit out of sorts and taking some time to reset and figure out what I want to write, rather than what I feel obligated to write. It's possible I'll work on something this weekend, but whether that happens or not I'll be pausing subscription fees for this m...

Internal Affair, draft 1.5

I made some edits to the story: lengthened the seduction scene, tweaked some grammar and cleaned up a few typos. Thank you to everyone who offered feedback for improvements!

Short Story - Internal Affair

I'm trying to branch out a bit and write more short stories, starting with this one. Feedback is always super helpful, especially if you think something could be improved on. Please note that the tone of this is darker than most of my works has been. It contains gun violence, but no death.

Also, I'm not 100% sold on the title. If you think of a suggestion, I'd love to hear it on the Discord.

“They said an hour.”

“So?”

“So it’s been an ...

A Virtual Temptress Ch. 17

The sky was wildfire. Clouds lazed overhead, reflecting off the waves below and painting them russet and gold. Water lapped against the battered hull of a derelict ship as gulls squawked from its shattered masts. The place smelled of salt and sand and open sky, a shimmering expanse fading to horizon.

Straylight Cove was Dan’s favorite area in Saga Online, and not just because of the landscape. It was usually deserted, one of the few places you could just relax away from crowds of adve...

Discord CYOA - The Island

I finished writing a Choose Your Own Adventure story on my Discord server and I wanted to share with people who don't frequent the server. Part 1 and 2 are attached as html files. There is some nsfw content, but it's more focused on being a fantasy adventure story than erotica. If you want to fast-forward to the sex scenes, start with part 2.

I had a lot of fun writing writing it and I'll definitely start another CYOA at some point in the future. Feedback about the story or the format ...

A Virtual Temptress, Ch. 16

After much delay, the completed Ch. 16 has arrived. Thank you all for your patience while I've been sorting out personal stuff!

Staff, check. Professor's robes, check. The back of Dan’s hand still stung from yesterday’s tattoo, but the mark itself was invisible. He’d only been allowed the simplest runemark, Ms. Brightwind had explained. It would last 90 days (89 now) and transport him from the circle at City Commons to the school’s outer grounds.

“P...

A Virtual Temptress Ch. 16, Part 1/2

Thank you all so much for your patience with my absence. Thankfully I'm back into writing again, trying to focus on Dan and Lexi while I make notes for another story idea I've been thinking about. Here's part one of the next chapter, and I hope to have the rest out shortly!




Staff, check. Professor's robes, check. The back of Dan’s hand still stung a little from yesterday’s tattoo, but the mark itself was invisible. He’d only been allowed the simplest runemark, Ms. Bri...

A Virtual Temptress Ch. 15 (1/1)

Of two things, Watch Sergeant Donovan was certain: he had been ensorcelled, and someone was following him.

The days were a blur since that afternoon at the Inquisition compound. His routine was little changed – patrols and paperwork, punctuated by the occasional raid on a slaver den or arrest of a disorderly adventurer. But each shift he struggled through a constant flux of arousal, far worse than his days as a hormonal teen. His eyes were drawn uncontrollably to attractive women, lin...

The Familiar (part 1)

Caleb Thorne, The Redstaff, Archmage of the Consortium, Elf-Friend, and Defender of the Realm sat at a long table surrounded by the most powerful and influential mages in the world as they argued with one another. Cal wasn’t sure what the argument was about. He hadn’t been paying attention.

Something about the next contract to take, maybe? Highmage Vasek was complaining about lack of funding for the Alchemy department while Counselor Braunson made snide comments about the department...

A Virtual Temptress Ch. 14 (1/1)

Sergeant Donovan whistled an upbeat tune as he walked toward the Inquisition’s compound, watching the banners shimmering above the white stone walls. He was in a grand mood. For a while that cult business had hung over the boys in Inquisition like a funeral shroud. Now, though, everything seemed to be clearing up. Donovan didn’t know any details, of course. They were above his pay grade, and he was just fine with it staying that way.

Up the stairs, through the colonnade. The sergean...

A Virtual Temptress Ch. 12 & 13 (complete)

These are the complete versions of both Chapters 12 and 13 in PDF.

A Virtual Temptress Ch. 13 (part 3/3)

Dan stepped through the archway, trailing his fingers reverently along the inscribed stonework. He inhaled, tasting sweat, metal polish, and incense. The barracks. He was the first to breach its walls, plunder its secrets. But of course, he wasn’t really here for secrets. Of those, Dan had more than he could handle.

The foyer was broad and open, its decorations spartan. Two dining tables with six chairs apiece; a small kitchen, neatly kept, sat off to the side; cold storage, courtes...

A Virtual Temptress Ch. 13 (part 2)

“Heyyy!”

William watched as she skipped toward him, breasts bouncing hypnotically as they strained against the tight cotton dress. Blonde hair in ribboned ringlets flowed out from under her red hood. Her eyes were shadowed and sultry, eager and bright, sinful and innocent. She waved at him, red lips parting into a smile.

“No,” William muttered. “No, no, no. Not here. Not like this.” He could feel his body heat rising, blood flowing downward. Ungentlemanly thoughts ...

Succubus Adventures - Subscriber CYOA

The new Choose Your Own Adventure story is up in Discord! If you'd like to participate, you can join the server with this link:

https://discord.gg/CPySxxPzCm

Only people marked as subscribers will be able to access the story, so any Discord users should let me know their username if they haven't already done so.

I have attached the opening of the story for anyone who'd like to preview it.

A Virtual Temptress Ch. 13 (part 1)

The last rays of the setting sun reflected the stained glass from a nearby cathedral, scattering its kaleidoscopic light across the street. Mottled red clouds drifted overhead, promising clear skies at least for tonight. The last raven squawked its farewell to the day’s end, settling itself in for the night as passersby thinned to the occasional fleeting traveler.

Half-hidden behind a hedge as he eyed the Templar’s barracks, Dan heard none of this. He was busy arguing with a demon.<...

A Study in Purple (final version)

This is the edited version of the story, all in one place.

If you liked this (or didn't), please let me know - it's my first time publishing a non-succubus story, so I'd love to have feedback on what people liked about it and what they'd like to see more of.