SFS - Chapter 4
Added 2026-03-14 04:05:49 +0000 UTCComments
It’s in the first paragraph right after the scene transition/page break of chapter 2. It’s not super clear, though, so I’ll go back and put it in its own paragraph.
Lost Rain
2026-03-14 23:21:53 +0000 UTC"I hesitated for a moment and then slunk back toward the mountain to wrap into the village. I had a couple weeks of intelligence at most. Most of that time was in and out while at the treatment clinic too, so it couldn’t even really be counted. My instincts were good, but there was another element that I overlooked" This doesn't fit/make sense. Where did the thought "in and out while at the treatment clinic" come from? Seem out of context
Hoffman
2026-03-14 23:14:56 +0000 UTCIt has promise, but I need heavy spoilers to be able to judge anything when there are only four chapters. There's just so many ways it could go. The first four chapters of Outrun are great when put in context of what happens in the context of the major plot arc (and were great on re-read), but I didn't really get into that series until I had seen much more of the world. I trust you as an author, but I can't really add much from just this.
Paul
2026-03-14 20:18:42 +0000 UTC
