Predators of Denali - Page 8 sketch
Added 2017-10-28 12:00:00 +0000 UTCPage 8's first-draft dialogue and sketchwork!
This page mainly deals about Tala and Bailey meeting, and their contrasting attitudes, or at least the start of it. Page 9 will have a bit more of a focus/intro on Bailey/Bae'li. I know one thing I need to add in the first or second panels here is Tala with a "who are you?" statement; these characters have not met before and Tala just thinks she is a random slutty bear interfering with important stuff that's weighing on her. That's my goal anyway. I always prefer feedback early on! Enjoy!
Comments
Should be a bit clearer when I do the bubbles, that are lacking in the sketch.
FluffKevlar
2017-10-29 01:08:53 +0000 UTCCan you have a character at some point refer to Bae'li as their 'Bae'? Haha-
Evangellos
2017-10-28 21:22:32 +0000 UTCI see your first comment at the top, are you not seeing it on your end?
Bionet
2017-10-28 19:04:40 +0000 UTCHey, just wanted to say that this looks great. I do agree in which Tala should ask "who are you?" In which they haven't met before and it doesn't sound like her to judge someone like that, but still this is awesome. Not sure why my last comment got deleted.
Antoine Davis
2017-10-28 18:25:11 +0000 UTCHaha, Tala looks so cute when she's annoyed! Bailey speaks pretty much exactly how I'd have expected given everything we've seen of her, which is great!
Bionet
2017-10-28 16:22:55 +0000 UTCI found it a bit confusing in the speech parts at the end, having trouble telling who is talking
Habilon
2017-10-28 16:13:27 +0000 UTCLoving the atmosphere between these two so far. :D Really loving "Bailey's" casual attitude to -everything- going on. :D
Silvador
2017-10-28 13:32:01 +0000 UTCHey, so far this looks great. But like you said Tala should ask "Who are you?" since this is the first time they met. But still this looks great, if you have any questions for me just ask.
Antoine Davis
2017-10-28 12:49:24 +0000 UTC
