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Twix, Page 1

Comic still doesn't have a title, not quite the final version for the page, might need to tweak some dialogue, but wanted to share it so far. Zoqi belongs to the artist Wyntersun, and he's just gonna be an intro/outro helper for Twix and Lia, but if people want to see more of him, I might do an end page of sketches with him and the others. Enjoy the start, I hope!

Twix, Page 1

Comments

makes sense, thanks!

FluffKevlar

Pfft. Modesty is over rated. IMHO people shouldn't be so strung up about such trivial things. Me thinks Twix is just jealous. Zoqi teasing him too much in that outfit and he ain't found the courage to make a move, yet. XD

Silvador

So be helpful and point it out. People can't read your mind. Fluff, you missed an r in through; you have "sleep though it"

Silvador

Yup yup enjoying the start! And Twix is still such a cutie

Conduitry

Looks great so far, Fluff! The "yanno" and "issit" kind of stuck out to me though. I know they flow well in conversation, but when they actually get written out like that, it seems a bit awkward compared to the rest of the dialogue. Just my two cents as an English Tutor :-)

Ehtwoo

Ah, Public Dress of Affection. Gotta love it.

Sean Palumbo

I know those feels Twix. Modesty is hard to find. .w.;

Donovan Lainey

Dat mistype tho

Kelanich Santovedis


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