Amadose

Added a Time-Transition to P21 & 22

Added 2023-07-31 02:36:21 +0000 UTC

It was bugging me a bit that page 21 LEAPED into page 22 without the fade-out I'd planned for. In my head there was a nice pause that would serve as a transition point. But I guess... I didn't really draw it!?!

Spent the day talking with folk and drawing up ice cream sandwich wrappers, to act as a bonus slow-down page. But I wasn't happy with how it was looking...

Version 1

... was just too empty and the wrapper was not very well thought out or designed.

So I tried version 2...

...which I dig, but I find leaping into such big text, jarring. It's not slowing things down but instead throwing me and the reading flow off! You can see what I mean with the pages back to back like so:

Just... abrupt!

In the end I sort of just expanded the 'some time passed' motif, to include the cookie I'd spent all friggin day drawing, and jazzed up the language a bit. The final two edited versions are in the header! I hope you all like it? It still doesn't feel ideal to me. That big cube eats up space that I enjoyed on the panel. But it does help the moment land and the transition come across.

Any lessons learned?

Maybe... work on my fade-in-and-outs. I need to learn how to end a scene!

Here are the two pages side by side! If you hate it lmk ha - I might yet flip-flop some more on it. I figure when I post it public is when it's set-in-stone.