Chapter 6 - Ties That Bind (Script 50% - SPOILERS)

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Amadose

Just re-read this and Nick should feel lucky at least he doesn't have to call Own and ask his permission to sleep with Judy.... yet.

jim

That's really lovely to hear! Thank you Sean! I'll post a fresher version tomorrow or so - been working on it over the weekend, think it's come along a whole lot.

Amadose

I was meaning nick was getting the beer still... but in place of Owen frightened and calling Nick it would be Judy "nick nick come in here quick" springing nick into jumping over the counter (maybe in a cage lol but another time) and when he gets to the door Owen slams his knot into her opening welcoming lips and that's when she passes out... so Judy is almost playing a prank on both of them while still "getting off" lol ... honeslty I'm enjoying it this way as well

A Mad Man with a Box

Honestly, the script seems super well thought out and deepens the cucking relationship further. I haven’t liked much cucking material in the past, but this comic is great. And I can’t wait to see more. Unfortunately I see some people may not like it, but it certainly gained my interest.

Sean

I rather like setting the scene with nick getting a beer. It sort of sets the mood, that this has been an afternoon of fun so far! But you're idea WOULD get us in the door faster - I'll think on it a bit.

Amadose

Another way to start is would be Judy calling out in Lust for Nick and he rushes in to see the knot pop in and her pass out and the Owen worry

A Mad Man with a Box

God yes, this sounds amazing! Finally Nick doing some Cleanup, I'm so ready for this! Thank you for your work :)

Yeah finding that right balance of 'MEAN' and 'respectful is tough beans. I'm making edits this weekend and seeing if I can't smooth things out =D Nick being playful just feels like something he'd do, regardless of the dynamics/play going on =D

Amadose

I was a little surprised by Nick getting to taunt Owen, but it is character building. Though further down the read, Owen laying down the no knotting and condom rule really squelched the original taunt. :D I think Owen is coming along great. It would be nice to see him a little more mean, maybe in the next installment now that these rules have been set.

Kyden

I think Nick's the one that's driving the ship! Owen's just rising to the bar! Poor cuck desperately desires things he shouldn't!

Amadose

Yeah - I'm really happy with the start so far! It feels fun and Nick's voice feels 'good'!

Amadose

Agreed, super fun and a good show to keep in character!

Fen

i think my fav part is the whole "you broke her" scene, nice to see nick having a little hustle with his alpha

ocaron

Can't help but feel like Owen is working poor ol Nick up to a point where he gives up sex altogether... or, at least sex with his wife >:3

Rhetoric Al Leigh

I'll take it

Mikey

100 fuckin percent dude, it's gut wrenching but in the best way

Mikey

Yes please! :D

Fen

Solid suggestions all around! If I can hit the mark with all of those notes - I think it would be a much improved script - Thank you Fen! Really glad it's working for you so far though!

Amadose

Genuinely curious what exactly made this off putting for you, if you liked the previous parts.

Fen

Thank you so much Mikey!!! Somebody mentioned aftercare, and I can't stop thinking about a silent page of the three of them post-coital in the kitchen eating ice cream and laughing =D It's intense. It's designed to sting. But it's still three nerds having fun together.

Amadose

Love ya, Mikey! But I think this one aok - these sorts of stories are gonna hit differently for everyone; and I appreciate hearing feedback when I asked for it (even if I don't really agree with it) =)

Amadose

Oh heck - I'm sorry it didn't connect to you! I sorrrrt of hear what you're saying - but you're picking up a lot of things I just wasn't trying to put down. I think Daniel really hits the nail on the head with his thoughtful comment on some of the behind-the-cuckold-thinking, and processes (thank you, Daniel!) Sorry to lose you - but 100% understand if this isn't the right sort of flavor you envisioned for the story. I enjoy this theme immensely and will keep going deeper.

Amadose

Oh it wasn't accidental! In my head - they've been working to make this happen for a while., and this time it's worked (he 'got hard' while he was in her).

Amadose

hahaah Genius.

Amadose

Heckin’ yes! Man, this has me on the edge of my seat! So many great lines, and I love how Owen checks back on Nick and gives him outs. Plus mentions of a safe word! Awesome! :D “I love you bud.” That line has me. I feel like that definitely deserves a bit more space in the comic, to make sure it comes across sincere. Maybe rather than “not cutting him out” you could have him confirm he enjoys having Nick right there with them. You know, not focusing on the possibly bad things, but rather encouraging him, making him feel part of it. In general, I feel like Owen could be a little more playful and encouraging in some parts... “Your kind heart and... your darker side too.” Maybe you could make it a bit visible when he’s in character and when not. You did that awesomely in the last chapter, first super dominant, cuddle time and back to dominant. While the dominant role should get stronger, meaner and more dominant going forth, keep the OOC as kind, understanding and loving as before and show it. Well that would be perfect for me anyway... Oh yes, about the messy ball licking and Judy reaction at the end: I love you! <3

Fen

This is a dick comment dude. Plus, if THIS ruined your day I think you have some life priorities to re-evaluate. You do understand part of this kink IS to humiliate the cuck and remind him of his place, right? What did you think you signed up for?

Mikey

just fucking incredible dude. I can't tell you enough how much I love how you portray this lifestyle. You still manage to write something insanely hot but also leave a tiny little reminder that this is still just for play. It's extreme play yeah, but it's still just play. Wonderful job!!!

Mikey

I love the meaner side of Owen! I hope he sticks by the rules, or at least if Owen encourages Judy to be a bit meaner.

Oh no! I totally disagree that there is no character anymore. This just opened another door and unearthed many more colors to the relationship. Speaking as a cuckold, this is EXACTLY what you’re looking for in a bull. Yes, Owen is being mean, but only after Nick requests it. Owen is playing the roll very well by immediately acting on the request and seeming like that’s what he was going to do anyway, and don’t get me wrong, this is ticking Owens boxes too, but that’s why this type of relationship can work so well! He’s pushing the line juuuust past what Nick may have been ready for. What’s most exciting from a cuck standpoint, is to feel that danger zone. But if you notice, Owen sneakily gives Nick the option to not go through with that last request. So far Nick is still technically in control, but the thrill of the cuck fetish is the sense of loosing control, and the thrill of the bull is gaining control. But yes, often ‘cuck’ and ‘pathetic’ go hand in hand. Nick isn’t ‘useless’ in real life, just in this charade taking place in the bedroom, and if that’s not for you it’s not for you! I hope to see the line get crossed further in the future and things to get more dangerous, it’s fiction after all, gimme the drama! But I can tell you this is verrry well executed and true to life, or at least the ultimate cuck dream.

Danielfox

Absolutely love it!!!

CYPRI3N

this... is way less good as I thought it would be? maybe because it is just the script, but I think Nick crossed the line and became pathetic? I think there is a great difference between letting your wife have some fun and get horny by her and becomming a boytoy for some stranger from the internet... and Own crossed a line too, he managed to get even more unsympathic... I thought something good happened when Judy called for Nick, but she just wanted him to see that she and Owen crossed another line, I think that's just mean. there is no character left to like anymore. I mean the more I think about it, the more it turns me down... this maybe ruined my whole day. I don't know if I am able to like this anymore... I'm out, I really liked the art and the story was thrilling, but at this point I just want my money back and forget what happened.

Akataja

Finally Owen has his knot completely in Judy. I just wish it wasn't accidental, that Judy would have wanted it to. I hope it is not the last time and that Judy has now got a taste for it. That Judy now always wants to have his knot completely in her during sex with Owen. And it would be funny if Judy mentioned that Nick never let her cum super-duper-hard like Owen. That would be further proof that Nick is only a minor part of this relationship.

Gambit

"don't worry i'll fill you in, or fill you up"

ocaron

Yeah I was worried people would call me on that! I figured it was a soft-self-choice then, and now it's an order - so it hits different? I also figure - they've shared and made safe words wayyyy before this scene. Safewords and the likes never felt like it would make for a good comic, so I never focused on it. I just assume it's been done off-camera. I've designs on 'pregnancy' stuff but that's way into the future ;D

Amadose

Oh Hmmm. That's something to think on. I'm not sure how I could incorporate something more competitive and back-and-forth. But I'll brew on it. There's still plenty of reworking to be done I think, before I land on the 'right' voice. Really glad you liked it =D

Amadose

Oh yeah, I imagine it would be a real change for her too!

Amadose

Yeah I need to chop it down a whole lot! Hopefully it won't be TOO long when Im done with it. 0_0

Amadose

"You're not allowed to cum in your wife -ever again-." Funny, I thought he already decided he wasn't gonna do that on his own. XD. I'm really into this amped-up relationship for this next chapter. I definitely think Owen could be a bit meaner, Maybe have them agree on a safe word at the beginning and from there on out Owen straight-up refuses to let Nick have any fun with his wife? Either way this is gonna be super hot, especially Nick cleaning up the cum remains of his wife and her bull. That's like max level cuckery right there. Shame it was established in the first chapter that Nick and Judy couldn't get pregnant naturally. Imagine the look on Nick's face if Owen were to tell him that he was gonna knock up his wife and that he had to raise his kits.

KinotheFox

Before reading: An Epic? Seems a bit much. After reading: Yeah okay, that’s fair. Quick thoughts: im super excited for the escalation. I like that Owen shows concern over Judy, and Nick initiates the next steps. I like the banter, back and forth between them. I like Owen really leaning into the Bull role with vigor. These little character moments are loved so more of that is always a win to me. Personally speaking, I prefer more competition in a general sense. I like push back and challenge, especially because the winner earns the rewards and the loser earns the consequence but that might not be a cuck friendly addition at the moment and not going to lie, flustered subby Nick is choice. Just a personal preference for dom sub dynamics. Im all twitterpated about this, you’ve hooked me again. 👏👏✨

Rickochet

OH that's harsh. To take away the tie, and to not let him cum in her at the same time. poor guys going to be pussy free in no time. I wonder what Judy will think about Nick being that removed. If she will have any second thoughts about it. Or miss the tie with Nick. - Beyond the orgasm but the bonding.

jim

So this is really good, although I wonder if it will need a 20 page comic lol. I for one would be willing to wait as it seems like there was a nice balance between check-in and domination, although I'm sure that could get improved. Set's the stage nicely for the caging comic coming up I must say.

Retromancer

Oh! Ok! I can swap it out to be 'Judy's implied ...' Really glad that line worked for you! I wanted to bring it full round with a 'I'm mean, but I care about you bud'

Amadose

Love all of this so much Daniel - thank you!!!! I'll add the notes in and see if I can find more space haha 0_o

Amadose

Aftercare would be a great QnA question - as it doesn't fit perfectly into the chapters

Amadose

Maybe one day down the road!

Amadose

=D =D =D

Amadose

I'll note it down Andry! Owen should leave more on the table for Nick. I should try to make it clearer that it's all play =) Thank you!

Amadose

"I love you bud. I'll never cut you out." That line is the fucking best, I want Owen to keep toying with Nick, and having him participating in different ways, I love that very much. Maybe don't mention the QnA, it takes a bit of the immersion away XD, have it be a more organic thing between them.

Diego P

Also a big fan of bull loudly moaning. Very, this is my cake, and I will enjoy it all to myself. 😉

Danielfox

This was my EXACT reaction. Totally had butterflies reading through.

Danielfox

!!SEMI SPOIL!! Oh. My. Gahhhwd. I couldn’t, resist. Had to read. And I’m happy I did. I can’t wait to see every step of this chapter being made. I literally huffed at Owens line about ‘fucking Nick up’… but… I genuinely got butterflies… like real butterflies (which I can’t say I remember ever happening to me from just reading smut before) when Nick confirmed that he WANTED Owen to fuck him up… Chefs. Fucking. Kiss. The dialogue is so so good already. I really feel like I’m following these characters irl and my suspension of disbelief has me gasping at some of these lines. I would DEFINITELY not pull back. I was on the edge of my seat and shocked, but not in a too-far kinda way. I think this raises the appropriate level of stakes and keeps the reader (at least from a cuck pov) on a tight leash and wanting more. Stomach dropped at Owen’s request, and my mind was frantically debating whether he would go through with it or not. I know you were saying you felt this was a bit of a long chapter, but I would love to see this moment drawn out a bit longer. Some more struggle in Nick. Maybe to even admit to another male, his bull, if he was willing to go into bi territory and stoop to that level of degradation, even though deep inside he wants it. He asked it, but definitely wasn’t expecting Owen to already bring his deeper fantasies out from secret-hornybrain-land. Damn I love it. Sorry, I have finished fan-girling. Can’t wait to see this mold. ❤️❤️❤️

Danielfox

Oh my god, I'm living for Owen being meaner, woof. Mean Owen is doing things to me <3 (Also, to speak to AndryWildeHopps's worries about Owen being too mean, I was actually hoping to ask about aftercare in the next QnA when it finally opens! Kink is sexy, but responsible aftercare is sexier!)

Rufus The Rat

Also maybe as like a side story we get to see Nick dealing with his lust after being cucked, by going to the bunny place and having super crazy orgys

I also fucking agree with @amadmanwithabox

I love this script I hope we get to see more bi stuff and a little bit more mixed fantasy’s, like keep the cuck stuff for sure but also add maybe public, toilet (golden shower?) or other super degrading scenarios

By the way, does Owen usually moan loudly during sex? I find that a very nice touch to get to a level of sexual ambiance..... "real"

Andry SilverFang

The story alone has me outta breath hah, it's SO good, everything leading up to this "private" moment between Owen and Nick, Nick's stomach twistingly hot acceptance of these new terms, I'll be counting the seconds between every new post :3

Thank you so much -Mad Man-! Yeah finding the right 'attitude' for Nick is maybe the hardest part? At least the part I'll chisel on the most. I wanted this convo to be less about Judy this time around, and more focused on Nick and Owen's dynamic.

Amadose

Oh. My. God. Yes. This is amazing.

June Opossum

It seems to me that Owen shouldn't be so bad, his sexual appetite shouldn't cloud him! He has to remember that it's just a game! And that sometimes, the bull is the one who gets tired, that even on the contrary, give Nick a chance to be able to be with Judy sometimes, something like.... "I am a generous god." And that when Nick is with Judy, she feels just as full as when she's with Owen, so that it shows that she still loves him! Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator (free version)

Andry SilverFang

I believe Ocaron (another Patreon backer) came up with a... year ago? I've been looking forward to using it for so longggg =D

Amadose

Loving this... very few stories have this deep of a interacting between the Bull and cuck... of course Nick would be shy at first.. but I feel he would happly open up and be "if Judy is happy im happy vib"

A Mad Man with a Box

Hooked at the title XD

Tigerchris