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RD 3 Ch 45

Chapter 45

I stumbled out of the portal, only to be met by an old woman. Her hair was gray and her face so wrinkled that I nearly didn't recognize her. "Circe?" I said, my surprise overtaking any other urgency we had.

Circe shook her fist, her voice warbled. "It's been eighty-four years, Bran," she said, her voice weary from old age.

The room around us felt as though it was deep underground. Red light seeped in from a stairway.

I froze, wondering if Earth had already been terraformed.

Had we lost? Had I completely missed the first Demon War, had taking away the FPA members changed the future?

I glanced back at Circe, suddenly remembering the reason for my rush. "None of that matters. We have to hurry now. This vault has become incredibly unstable," I gestured back to the 20-sided device.

Fracturing space wasn’t something that I wanted to be around anyone if I could help it. Whatever the Vault was doing, it had enough power to override the System and I needed it clear of anyone before it blew.

Circe shook her head. "None of it matters? I've waited so long," she complained in a weary old voice.

There was something about the sound that bothered me and my attention shifted to take her in more fully.

"I've waited so long and you come and rush me," she shook her fist. Even if Circe had become old, the voice and the antics were very stereotypical. 

Looking at her closer, I noticed the faint seam of a mask on her face and small flecks of brighter blue hair amid the gray. The closer I looked, the more powdery her grey hair was. I realized two things at that moment.

One, Circe had a mischievous side that I hadn’t seen before.

And two, I didn't have time for games. 

Another person popped out of the vault behind me and in a panic, attacked Circe.

All signs of age suddenly disappeared from the woman as she threw her hand forward and blades of wind ripped them apart until there was nothing left. Circe scowled at them for ruining her disguise, the room was suddenly howling with wind.

That single thrust of wind had stripped all of the powder from her hair that flapped in the wind and the mask hung off her beautifully young face. 

She then reached for the vault, and I slapped several more talismans on it to keep anyone else from leaving. "Circe, we need to bring this vault somewhere where there aren't other people around. It's unstable and it's full of enough energy to do a lot of damage."

The last outcome I wanted was a fight to erupt around the portal as people spilled out and continued the fight from before. That would almost guarantee the collapse of this thing and result in who knew what level of destruction.

With one hand, Circe summoned wind magic to gather the vault into the air. With the other, she plucked me up by the back of my shirt. 

"Do you realize how much trouble you're in, Bran?" she scolded me, even as she used her magic to rip a hole in the ceiling and hurtle us out into the sky with the vault trailing behind us. 

I looked down, anxious for what I would find. But Vein City was just as I remembered it. We were on the outskirts, several miles from the fort. No demons attacking the world yet. 

I still wondered when she'd had the time to build this little bunker for the vault. Even with initiated helping, this type of facility took time.

"What did I do?" I asked. 

"What did you do?" She threw her hands in the air, exasperated. "It's August, Bran," she scolded me once again, as we hurtled through the air, flying over the forest, over the suburbs, and into the woodlands beyond. 

"Okay, so it was a couple more months than I expected," I said, frowning. Certainly, I'd been in that empty white room for some time, but that amount of time seemed a little longer than I expected. 

"No, Bran, it hasn't been a few months. It's been well over a year," she said. 

I stuttered, my brain catching up with what she was implying. "A y-year?”

“Bran, it's almost to the time when you said we had to be ready.” Circe told me.

“Wait, wait, wait. It's August. Oh, fuck. How long do we have?" My mind was whirling as it worked to catch back up. All of my plans were suddenly getting scrapped, remade, and scrapped again. There was so much I’d been planning to tackle after the Vault and before the first Demon War. I had to think about how I could get everything prepared as I had planned in the now shortened amount of time.

"Two weeks," Circe said. 

I stared at her, incredulous. "This is another joke of yours, isn't it?" I smiled, suddenly realizing her mischievousness went a little too far.

She chopped the top of my head with her full strength, which was considerable. If it wasn't for regeneration, I would probably have had a welt from that for weeks to come. 

"I am not joking," her face was dead serious. "You've missed two of the planned initiations for the Hero's Clan. Do you realize the chaos that is happening right now given that we haven't been able to awaken the bloodlines for over a year?!" Her red eyes seemed to catch on fire. "Bran Heros, I'm going to tell Zeus and Hercules you're out, and they are going to come here. They will most likely lock you in chains somewhere deep and dark in the Heros Clan so that you can never miss a bloodline awakening again. That is the lifeblood of our clan and it has gone missing." 

I gave her my best smile. "You wouldn't do that, would you, Circe?" There was a nervous chuckle from me, unsure whether or not she was being serious. 

"Oh no! That's going to happen, Bran," Circe said, "and there is nothing I or Persephone can do about it. Do you realize how furious they are? You've up and vanished after making that deal with them. I told them you went inside some sort of demonic capsule to deal with demons, and you've been gone for over a year," she emphasized once again. 

"Do people think I'm dead?" I asked. 

She waved a talisman in front of my face, slapping me with it. "If it wasn't for this, they would have. You're lucky the Nesters are fucking industrious and have kept up on your little fortress without you." She pointed off into the distance behind us, and I realized why I was slightly confused about the location. It seems the fortress had grown beyond our original scope, towering walls of cement hid equally dominant buildings and a second ring of walls behind the first. 

"Okay, well, I can tell you the full story later," I blinked, looking back at Circe. "Short story of it, we went inside, we went through several trials, things got a little weird, and then the whole vault started coming apart. I could have sworn we were only in there for two months max, but there was a period of time where we were trapped in an empty white room, unable to move and time got a little hard to judge," I shrugged. "I don't know Circe. There's a powerful demon general that's still trapped inside. He split his soul into several segments to try and escape. I need to kill him. But also, this vault is going to collapse, and I don't know what the result will be. As for everything else, Circe, I swear to god, I will make it up to everybody as we go." 

"I'm sorry Bran," Circe said, "but it's not up to you anymore whether or not you make it up. You will be forced to make it up." She crossed her arms. "Not to mention, I moved all the way here to Vein City to help you and your people establish a base of operations to go after instances, then you up and vanish," she waved her hands exaggeratedly. 

"Circe, maybe we could just put the vault down here," I suggested. We had already left the city far behind, and I was worried her continued rampage was distracting her from the goal of getting the vault somewhere stable to discharge everybody inside. 

There were people I cared about inside. I would find a way to get them out before they were in danger. I didn’t care what it cost me later.

Circe threw her hand up in the air as we shot downwards. "Fine, whatever Bran, and here I thought you were going to be more helpful." 

"I am, Circe. This doesn't end with the 9 hell gates coming to earth. As soon as that's over there's the war for supremacy, and I," I tapped the side of my temple, "can help the Heros Clan get ahead. Perhaps that's worth something to Zeus and Hercules." 

She scoffed. "Until you disappear again." 

We landed amid the woods, and I peeled a talisman off the vault. Immediately, the clearing flooded with people.

There was a sudden screaming and yelling as a mass exodus from the vault ensued. Everyone was pushing others aside, scrambling to get out.

Gloria emerged with a cloak of fire around her and a bloodied shoulder. Simone raced out a second after her, immediately spotting Gloria and trying to tend to her wounds. Nyx was missing much of her hair. It was growing back slowly, the serpents reforming as the sea-foam green hair recovered. Those that had just started were smaller and steadily growing.

Antonio came out, saw my women, and guarded them like a good guard dog. It was tempting to go pat his head.

As everyone flooded out, Circe snapped her fingers and a giant wall of wind ripped up the trees around us, creating an impasse. Circe stared at all of the members of the Free Player Alliance, who were scrambling.

When Merlin came out, the two women from myth shared a glance before hostile sparks jumped between them. It was an almost physical sensation of heat coming from where their glares met.

"That's not good," Simone muttered out of the side of her mouth, coming to me after helping Gloria. "It looks like they know each other." 

Gloria smirked. "It looks like they hate each other. Hmm, I wonder if that means you can only get one of them. Too bad. Poor Bran doesn't get a dozen more." 

"My vote's on Merlin," Nyx said, and I gave her a strange look.

“We aren’t picking anyone.” I sighed, these women.

"What? I know it's probably super distant, but you are related to Circe." She shrugged.

I groaned. "I don't think it's anywhere near a level of relation we have to be concerned about. Besides, technically, you're Heros Clan too," I pointed at Nyx. 

"I checked the records," Nyx waved her hand dismissively. "We're barely related, besides having the same name." 

Really? I rolled my eyes. It was the same situation with Circe. But apparently, Nyx had a thing and I didn’t think logic was going to solve it.

The whole time, Simone just bounced her eyebrows. 

"What is the Heros Clan doing here?" Vincent said, stepping out as a figure of authority. 

"The Free Player Alliance," Circe crossed her arms and peeled her baleful glare away from Merlin. "Who do you think has been keeping your vault safe all of this time?" She snapped. The woman was not currently one for patience. 

Vincent took a single threatening step forward before a fist of wind caught him on the chin and sent him sprawling on the ground.

Sometimes it was easy to forget with her lithe frame, but Circe was one of the most powerful people present. Even those from the top of the Free Player Alliance gave Merlin quite the respect. And Circe and her were similar on total stats. 

"Regardless, we need to get out," a man snapped and my soul gaze was roving over everyone present even as people and possessed finished spilling out of the vault. 

"Demon," I said, pointing straight at the man who had spoken.

Circe's eyes flashed and a small tornado of wind spun up around him, locking him in place.

I stepped up, thrusting my sword into the tornado, before pinning him to the ground. Sanguine Locking kept him from going anywhere. 

"What, are you just going to point at random people, call them demons and kill them?" one of the FPA said. 

"He is a demon," I insisted. "Just use your inspect, and you'll see his name is already beginning to change." I pointed at him. This particular demon didn't have any ability to disguise himself. It was likely why the possessions were all meant to take place at the end of the vault's trials, rather than in the midst. 

"He's right," Da Vinci said.

I rolled my eyes. Of course, I was. But I avoided rubbing that fact in and setting off more issues.

"We have to save those who have been possessed," someone said quickly, only for me to scowl. 

"It's too late. If they're possessed, their soul is gone. The best thing we can do is kill the demons." The one that had been pinned by me suddenly had my sword blossom through his neck. Before I tore him in half with my blood sword. 

Everyone started spinning around, inspecting others. More than a few began fighting amongst themselves. Merlin tapped her staff against the ground, freezing several of the stronger demons that had appeared. 

"What about those monsters?" someone asked, turning back towards the vault.

It appeared that all of the humans and the possessed had spilled out. The clearing was now filled with about 200 people, those who had survived all of the trials or been possessed.

I looked around. They were right. The monsters that demons had possessed and sent after us weren't here. I had a feeling until we saw the end of the dracoon, they still had more cards in their hands. 

At that thought, the vault began to crackle. One of the space cracks we'd seen inside ripped from the side of the 20-sided object covered in inscriptions.

People jumped out of the way as a second and a third shattered the clearing. The space fractures only went a short distance before the world around them seemed to press in, slowing and dissolving them. It seemed that the System of the world was actively suppressing the false realm.

"Bran, what's going on?" Circe asked.

As we stepped back, the Mul Branova rushed to my side.

“Your guess is as good as mine.” I told her. "I have no idea what happens to a space that has laws built into it, so profoundly that it can mitigate even the system," I said, watching as the vault continued to come apart. Pieces of it began to sink inwards, and cracks appeared on its surface, unmoving. 

Everyone in the clearing seemed to watch, fascinated, as parts of the vault imploded, and others sent spatial cracks rippling around it. Suddenly, it was as if the cascade had reached a tipping point, and the remainder of the vault sucked inward, to a small point in the center. It consumed all of the matter and energy, as if a small black hole was being born on the surface of the earth. 

Now, I wasn't a physicist, but I knew enough to know that was not good.

The hole began to swallow up leaves on the breeze, and loose dirt that had been stirred up with everyone's passing. The suction continued, as loose soil beneath it swirled, being drawn into the small black hole, and leaves from further away were pulled off the ground, and drawn into the event horizon.

“There has to be a solution.” Vincent shouted, turning to everyone present. “We can’t let that continue to grow.”

I had to agree with him. There was always an answer, with inscription. I pulled out talisman paper, unsure what I would need, but I had been able to stabilize the space inside the destructing vaults. This time, I was going to have to make a larger formation around the black hole. Perhaps I could stabilize it as well. 

There seemed to be a pressure here on earth that also worked to stabilize the spatial cracks. Maybe if I gave it enough assistance, it would all stop, or at least I could only hope. Beginning to slap down talisman after talisman, I worked my way around the black hole. 

Da Vinci saw my work, and shook his head, "You'll need things underneath that black hole as well.”

“If I want to make it perfect," I shrugged, "perfection isn't exactly a luxury we have right now." 

I spilled blood on the ground using my sword to connect the talismans and make a larger formation as quickly as I could.

Comments

The series all seem to start out really good and dwindle to the end. Just my take

Looneytunes

Those occur every 6 months, he had planned on using the Cyclops dungeon twice more before the Rapture when he reset it, so that kind of fits the timeskip, but blows all the set up for that.

Iain Grubb

“You can ask me for anything you like, except time” ― Napoléon Bonaparte There are few things as precious as time. All of it is now gone, Bran has failed in so many levels with this adventure… Ignoring all the plot failings such as dealing with the Heavenly Mountain Sect, Building up the Heros Clan, or getting the other clans also onboard and able to deal with what is coming, or even prepping the Nester’s this has been nothing but a CATACLYSMIC failure on Brans part. The whole point of “Returner” storylines is for them to set things up so history doesn’t repeat itself. Bran probably made a localized difference but other than that it is going to be minimal, so many wasted opportunities to actually prepare the so called defenders of humanity for what is to come squandered. If the intent that this book is to be seen as Bran UTTERLY failing and all his plans falling apart via the Demon King, sure. This is an absolute, unmitigated, catastrophe for his stated goals. If the goal has been to save as much as humanity as possible during the First Demon War, Bran has failed by every metric possible, he unified the Heros clan yes, but then abandoned them immediately after. Something like 2/3s the worlds population will die during the Rapture, and Bran has spent most of that time available hunting for a couple thousand stats, probably less total then his bloodline. All traded for any chance of getting the only people who would have the chance of standing against what is coming for less stats then he got for awakening his blood line. What is the trade off for a stat to innocent babe in their swaddling eaten by a demon? 5 stats to child? At LEAST a billion+ extra are going to die from this waste of time, so he better have gotten close to 200 million stats. Lets be absurdly generous and say he got 10,00 stats, we are looking at 100k humans per stat. That is a piss poor ROI. What’s more he has FAILED his allies by every conceivable metric, with little to no remorse, him and the blood leech are two kindred souls it seems.n The idea that he will eliminate the cockroach is an empty one, would have been far easier to steal the orb, buy some cargo space on a Space X rocket (there is a website for that) and launch the damn thing into the sun, no his Hubris chose to challenge it and he failed. Again if this gets played off as the monumental failure as it the Demon King pulling one over and teabagging Bran with all his might, that would be salvageable in the end. Time will tell. Ceres with her weird gag of aging is not only stupid (even 500 years she wouldn’t have aged) but out of character. Really should not have been included, especially in the face of what a shitshow is emerging. Also the idea that anyone, least of all Nyx would prefer the cold bitch Merlin over Cerces is absurd. She has been standoffish where it has mattered (mostly because of Brans need to keep secrets) but Cerces has proven herself time and again while Merlin would sit out fights when demons are in play. Fuck her.

Direwolf1618

I'm sorry, it's becoming clear to me that Bruce doesn't pay attention to his fans. I've said nothing for a few chapters, looking to see if things turn around. All I see are canned chapters, poor characterizations, all knowing enemies that have the capability to literally control time and space and more plot holes than I can shake a stick at. This arc should have been handled in a few chapters. Then, they should have gotten out and dealt with the demons that are already in the world, building up the Heros clan and prepping for the end of the world. There could easily have been just as much action. Hell, you could have made it so that Bran's actions caused many of the demons trapped inside to escape and cause problems. I would have enjoyed treading something along those lines. Unintended consequences and all that. Instead, what I see is ill-timed comedy, the abandonment of responsibilities by people who would never do that and curves so extreme they literally make no sense...oh yes, and plot holes! Plot holes! Plot holes!. Slow down if you have to slow down, as some here have mentioned. Do whatever you have to, but write something better before you ruin another series like DD.

Brian

Not only that, but Circe tells him he missed 2 clan initiations, the timeline does not fit

Mick

If its August then he has missed the rapture, which was supposed to be August 1

Iain Grubb

I think he has someone reading this, way too busy to respond in real time, and I think that's part of the problem, too many irons in the fire and his writing is suffering from it. See4n it happen with several authors, they start out with fantastic ideas and awesome writing, get maybe a little too popular and try to squeeze more out of it. It is understandable , new father and wants to make it for his kids and family. Have seen several great authors burn out from trying to manage too much.

Mick

A question for those in this Patreon- Does Bruce actually read these comments or are we just talking to each other? I mention this because one of the other authors I follow (Marvin Knight) actually responds in near real time. And he even did a major rework of his last book in response to our comments! As regards the quality of Bruce’s writing lately, I’ll echo others’ disappointment with the direction of RD3. Similarly DD is a lost cause. AO has some redeeming qualities. But Bruce has gone from my favorite author in this genre to maybe top 10.

Mistweaver

There are a few constistancy issues: Chapter 14 mentions they were all trained with Soul Arts before going in, but that seems to have been forgotten by the time trial four starts. (Gloria and Simone knew them regardless from their initiation/awakening).

Iain Grubb

Totally agree, take it slow and give yourself time to reset, people would be much happier waiting for a gem. Not many authors rush to do updates everyday anymore, cutting back to avoid burnout.

Iain Grubb

Sure all of the last completed DD book was them stuck in a dungeon raid area. Spoilers from here for that. They spend the practically the entire book with a teacher and a rich prick who actively wants them dead and let them live no no apparent reason. Then to cover that up with snu snu fuckery. Not to mention we don't know how they improved. The entire book not 1 stat sheet. Bruce even admitted that he didn't do a stat sheet from burn out of stats from RD2. While crimson does nothing to help them at all which goes majorly againt her stated goals and gets pissed at the end of the book because she didn't know certain things. She even says she went by where they were trapped and didn't even bother doing any investigation. Yeah I know Bruce doesn't want her to carry them but that goes several steps beyond don't help noobs. Besides they are in the 40's for levels. Making them prqctilly on par with humanity's strongest. And this entire trapped in the box on RD3 to skip all the necessary things to help the world actually get set up for the issues coming is just skipped for what should have been 10ish chapters of sidequest. Instead of what we got then we just skip all possible prep work. All that he changed is very minor on a global scale all he really did was save the least powerful clan, that he didn't even care about, from destruction. While 1 he'll gate is secure he could have went and gotten at least 4 others and positioned them in such a way to reduce humanities losses while still helping them get stronger. Not to mention the one outside his own city that he said fuck it to. Those 2 series were my favorite since saving supervillians. And with Ards oath... the MC is just to full of jokes and the political bs could have been done so much better. Hell Ard has the potential to be the biggest force of good in their area and he never even gets 1 magical class at the academy. He gets random small training from some people but has no foundation at all. They just mire him in political bs to keep him from gaining any knowledge to actually practice magic and learn the foundations for it. Soo yeah his book 1s tend to start great book 2s tend to be iffy and then we have this crap in book 3s and beyond. Basically this was the chapter (feather) that broke the camel's back

Matthew Frasier

This whole book has severely damaged my impression of Bran's character. He went from being justifiably arrogant to unreasonablely complacent and short sighted. The continuity issues with the Mul Branova are frustrating and only exacerbate Bran's hubris and lack of planning if allowed to stand in the book release. Bran's actions towards the FPA run counter to his goals and the thoughts the reader is permitted to see. So much of the vault storyline seems like it was arbitrarily forced to see a specific result rather than a more organic or realistic progression.

Steve

Well, that takes a lot of the fun out of this story for me. I mean, sure, there's still interesting things going on, but it just sucks that the mcs potential got ruined like this. Also, I hope when the other Hero clan leaders show up he threatens to take away all the youngsters bloodlines away instead of awakening them if they try to control him.

hawkshe .

Anything constructive before leaving? I don't see where this chapter was the one to make you decide to leave. Care to give your feedback?

Corac

And with this I'm leaving his patreon. His last 3 books have not been done well at all. RD is all but ruined. DD went way off the boat and I don't care for the others.

Matthew Frasier

Hercules and Zeus are completely justified in wanted to tie Bran down after this. He just essentially did exactly what the leech would have done and ditched the clan after getting what he wanted. This book…😪

Noir

It feels like the time skip could have been done better. But I'm not author with multiple book series under my belt so I'll just say this. The time skip felt like a punishment more than a necessity to move to story. I rarely recommend a rewrite but in this case I do. I'm left with whiplash regarding that amount of time being skipped. It feels like I've been cheated out of the story. He spent more time in that fucking box than he did preparing for the rapture... uhg.

Aldrin

Bruce, I understand that writing is very difficult and time consuming, but the Vault arc felt more rushed than normal, and didn't fit the rest of this series as well as I think it should have. If you need to take more time writing to avoid problems like these, or just for your health and well-being, I'd always rather wait longer for new chapters and books that don't strain your health and are better quality, than get something worse, faster. Now, I don't know how your financial model and margins work, so maybe slowing down would present a risk for you I don't know about, but I'll stay subscribed to this Patreon and will keep buying every ebook and audiobook even if you slow down to MWF chapter releases or less, and/or take a few weeks off after this book and all future books to relax and clear your head. I'm confident that the vast majority of your fans would also understand and would rather wait longer for better books and a healthier Bruce, rather than rushed books and you burning out. You're one of my top 3 favorite authors, and my favorite in this style, and I don't want to see you burn out and quite writing like several other authors I've enjoyed. Don't let the haters in the comments get you down, and take care of yourself first.

Nicholas Kratzer

While I agree that the Vault arc has several big flaws that should be addressed in the edit, I am optimistic for the time skip. I haven't read any other books in the "returner" subgenre before (didn't even know it was a subgenre), but I think it would have gotten a bit boring watching Bran wield the Heros Clan's resources to lock down several more demon gates and do lots of other highly effective prep for the demon war. With this time jump, now we get to see the demon war in near fully impact, and get to watch Bran fight to save Earth under far more intense and interesting circumstances. I have enough confidence in Bruce's writing skills that I'm looking forward to the fast approaching demon war. As for the Vault arc itself, the biggest issue I have is how unprepared Bran seemed to be for all of it, and how much danger he put his wives and followers in because of it. Bran is usually extremely well prepared and informed when he has prep time for a task. Even when there are surprises, Bran usually handles them with far more control than this arc. I can accept Bran not knowing about the possibility of time dilation, since the book made it clear that it is absurdly expensive for the demons to do, and it only happened because the Demon Lord has realized that Bran could be a major problem to his plans. So the Demon Lord sacrificed this Vault to prevent Bran from stealing more demon gates and otherwise preparing for the war. Before Bran entered the Vault, he was acting as if he'd thoroughly examined multiple other Vaults in his past life, and had probably entered at least one active Vault knowing it was full of demons and killed them all. That's the impression I had going in, based on how confident Bran was, and how prepared he usually is. At the very least, Bran should have already known that the Vault follows it's own set of rules separate from the system, as there's no reason why all the Vaults wouldn't be like that too. Instead, Bran lost nearly all control of the situation as soon as he entered the Vault, and his wives nearly died on multiple occasions because of it. It all feels extremely out of character for Bran, and broke my expectations in a bad way. Now, it wasn't all terrible, I did enjoy the Vault arc, but it's the definite low point in the story so far, and I think it can be fixed in the pre-publishing edit. There's two, fairly small changes I would make to the book to address my biggest issues: 1) Show Bran teaching Soul Devouring Arts to all his ladies and all the Mul Branova, as well as at least basic soul combat training. I don't believe for a second that Bran would be willing to bring his wives, which he is usually quite overprotective of, into the Vault that he knows is full of demons that want to possess everyone, without having them all know to protect themselves from demon possession without his assistance. Bran had the time to do this, at least with his wives, and could have been training the Mul Branova in Soul Arts instead of inscribing the walls of the fort. Plus, I'm sure he could have delayed Vincent a bit more if he needed more time to train his people. Bran took way to big of a risk on his people being possessed, especially since he didn't know the Mul Branova could summon his soul into theirs for support. (Side note, why the fuck didn't the Mul Branova tell him they could do that? It screams "for plot reasons", rather than actually making any sense. His driver would have plenty of chances to tell him.) 2) Have a scene of Bran telling his ladies what to expect in the Vault, and have it be decently accurate. Not one to one what the trials will be, but cover the kinds of trials to expect, like the first trial serving to sort the weak from the strong, the second being more of a free for all hunt for treasure, and the final being the 1v1 possession trial, with the possibility of bonus side trials, like what happened to Nyx. Bran should also mention that the Vault will follow different rules than the normal System, but he can't know exactly how it will be different. And Bran should absolutely mention that any treasure they find, especially consumables, are almost definitely trapped to make them easier to possess. Sure, you can argue that this would spoil a lot of the Vault arc, but that's literally Bran's gimmick from being a Returner. This kind of foreknowledge spoilers is what I've come to expect from him. Hell, instead of having an explicit scene for it, you could at least change how Bran and crew react to the Vault to show it's within expectations from off camera conversations they had preparing for the Vault. Anything to make Bran seem actually prepared to enter the Vault, and not just improvising and taking an insane risk.

Nicholas Kratzer

So much wasted story. You let rush and burn out win on the blunder bruce. So much time skipping.

William Wilson

Yeah, let's skip all the interesting plotlines that have been setup with Circe, the other clans, etc. to jump to the rapture so we can see Bran fight demons for the 5725th time. How awesome. /s

ArbabSB

Oh, perfect. Hope those fucking fruits were worth it Bran. I'll add my voice to the chorus that's dissapointed at the very long timeskip bringing us to the demon war. I was hoping to see more interactions with Circe, building up the Odyssey branch in North America, some drama with the other clans, that sort of thing. Instead those plotlines were abandoned to focus on some frankly not very interesting trials. And now we get more of Bran fighting demons which IMO is much less interesting than those other plotlines I was hoping for.

ArbabSB

His condescending thoughts towards Antonio are also OTT in my opinion. I reported all the soul shenanigans via Bruce’s official channel (the app on his Discord), as have others. So hopefully they’ll get fixed. So much of this book just needs redoing in my mind

Iron Akela

Yup! Couldn’t agree more!

Iron Akela

Add Chapter 14, all the girls going in knew soul arts, then several chapters of the crypt where they didn't and had their hands held for the process. I like that the MulBranovas could call on him for help but meh leading them into the vault and 30 chapters in they suddenly have no defences for it is extremely out of character for Bran who was trying to level people safely. Arrogance towards Da Vinci is a bit over the top too.

Iain Grubb

Eh I get there needed a bit of a time skip but this is a bit much, and didn't really give the other characters time to level up, the gains from the vault were pitiful except for the tainted fruit they are barely going to have time to utilise before theres more demon issues. If its already August then the Rapture is overdue as it was supposed to start August 1. ...and what was the point of bring Odyssey branch and Circe to the US just to babysit an empty fortress? Circe's got a point 1-1.5 years in the vault is waaay too much of a skip. I would have loved to have seen more interactions with Circe, and that first meeting between Circe and Thorin. Its such a shame because the first two books flowed so well. Was an opportunity to wipe out the Heavenly Mountain Sect here before the rapture to minimise how many people get fed into it and possessed, this seems like it would be a higher priority for Bran if he wants to prepare humanity as much as possible. Its almost like we have Ard rushing in with no plan and pure arrogance instead of Bran who carefully plans out every move for this book. Bran never had a supreriority complex over Inscription, he almost bemoaned his lack of fire control ruining his alchemy in Book 1 and he showed nothing but respect for smithing in Book 2, yet he slaps down the Mulbranova girl for wanting to learn smithing, and is so arrogant to DaVinci and condescending to Antonio, good puppy. DaVinci the great inventor, who came up with soo many things before his time, its almost like he was a returner himself, submarines, tanks, the diving suit, gliders, parachutes, an army bridge, anatomical sketches that doctors still use today... and he is treated like a fool. Not sure why there was a third trial even mentioned, as there was no POV from the one person that was left to complete it, everyone skipped straight to the 4th trial in the crypt.

Iain Grubb

Well I guess I’ll be reporting a couple of errors via Bruce’s Discord bot for book errors. Maybe if we all do that we might get a decent book 3. Cos it seems like the Sentar Curse of Book 3 has struck again. First the obvious issue - the Rapture takes place on 1st August 2023. It’s stated in book 2. So it’s mid July. I’ll be reporting that explicit error. As for the rest… well books 1 and 2 had 56 chapters, so we can expect maybe 10 more in this book. The chances of those 10 chapters saving this god awful abomination are slim in my mind. I get Bruce wanted to move the timeline along, I get that. And obviously it’s his choice if he wants to take away the thing which made RD as a series special, and totally piss all over the returner subgenre. I don’t get why he’d do either of those things, but it’s his choice. Those calling the vault a side quest are right though. Sure there was demons in there which could be killed for fun and profit, but they didn’t have to be. He could have just destroyed the vault - that would have prevented the cockroach general from ever getting out, or the dracoon. But this isn’t the only way to time skip. Hell book 1 was 4 months, and that could easily have been more. And at the beginning of this book there’s a mysterious additional 3 months supposedly taken in the clan islands. So it’s not like this book couldn’t end with the rapture without such an uninspiring storyline as the vault. I thought the instance in book 1 was bad… this was just… worse. Especially with the errors making Bran look like the third coming of Zach. Part of me thinks Bran should have accounted for this eventually, but I get the impression time dilation (certainly to this degree) isn’t something he’s has to deal with before. After all, even with all the clans resources they’ve not been able to mess with time. Just so much wasted potential. Circe moved to America, which was a waste of a whole host of storylines. The Borsson guy coming and speaking to Circe - we haven’t even touched on that at all, and doubt we will until after the rapture. The first demon war was supposed to be years right. How many books will that be? The Heros initiations isn’t a big storyline but it’s something to use to pass the time. I mean, why the hell did we meet the Borsson rep if this is what’s going to happen. As things stand, RD3 isn’t worth the electronics it’s comprised of. And as it was the final book in Bruce’s rotation that interested me, I’m really not sure what to do. And don’t get me started on the lack of urgency in this chapter. Sure Bran and Circe have to travel, but… just feels off.

Iron Akela

Y'all crying about the time skip even though we knew it was coming and it's a great counter to brans knowing everything plus it's the mofo rapture time for war and loot

Val the mysterious Jedi

Even with everything going Bran's way he only ever had time to lock this anchor down and knock off a general or two. But getting the FPA onboard sooner would have been like, the last thing he'd be able to do.

NovaZero

I have to bring to mind a few things. -Borrson. He was there ready to confront Bran and make a mess. He's going to wait a whole year and nothing happens? Really? -The amount of dialogue and exposition here killed all urgency from the previous chapter. I want you to wait next time you go to pee and think to yourself "I can totally talk weather and do the dishes before this pee comes out, right? Oh and let's think about those two women and oh yeah I have to explain that the car I jumped out of has an engine block on fire and it might explode but I don't know but I'm investigating current year and clan politics and-" see what I mean? It goes a bit beyond the ridiculousness of comics and text boxes. -I love me some PoV chapters if you're looking to break things up a little. I really like the idea of the Demon Lord getting one over him strategically. But execution is a bit lackluster so it kinda gives you that cottonmouth, you know?

NovaZero

He only had 1 year and a half left pre-vault due to how much time wasted with the clan and the wait for perse's bullshit. So with much time wasting and combined with time skips, it's about that.

NovaZero

TFTC

Sailesh Kumar Kumar

And now they're out, they have two weeks to rapture day, the Heros clan wants to lock and chain Bran away because of their stupid tradition. They've become so reliant on the leech and now Bran to awaken bloodlines, when surely there are other methods for it. I genuinely hope that when Zeus, Hercules and Persephone try to imprison him that he strips them of their bloodlines, but it's hard for the S+ grades, and Bran can only temporarily suppress those... But yeah, I do agree with Ash... That side quest ended up watching a whole chunk of time without needing to. I can u derstand maybe having a year go by and Bran being late to the Hero's initiation... But nearly 2 years? Unless of course were planning for the Rapture and things to kick off and using this book to skip some time?

Jamie R

Yeah not a fan of skipping a full year especially in a returned story and honestly I hope Bran just kicks Hercules and Zeus around but he won't because apparently he doesn't remember he has other skills to use and apparently we are not done with clan drama

CesarC.

It is what it is, at least he didn't miss the rapture

Martin Gamboa

Unless it's more drama from his clan wanting to lock him away at the clan islands.

Ash Goetz

Now that their out of what amounts to a side quest now it's more drama from the clan Bran should tell them to screw off. First of this book was great but for me this demon seed pod just seem to take away from the story.

Ash Goetz

That I think was kinda required to make the war even a challenge. If Bran actually had the full two years to prepare counters for everything he knew was coming it'd make the beginning of the war almost inconsequential except for exceptions he couldn't get to or wasn't aware of. Now being under this time crunch will make the story a bit more interesting for him.

MrCynical

The lesson is that the enemy always gets a vote. Painful but potentially better now than later.

Stephen

Kinda killed the best part of a returner type book. Especially after just listening to book two and then reading this. Not as excited for what comes next.

Posiden 300

Not liking it even a little bit that it is 2 Weeks before the Rapture... The Timeskip is just exordanary, it just does not fit. I know you will most likley have already written quet a bit ahead but can we chache this Please?

Julian Lachner

Yeah that seems a bit rushed

Alex

Nah I don’t like that he was trapped there forever. Like damn all his plans got ruined.

MillionLittleE


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