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well tell me what you think about the story telling
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actually that is suppose to be a treaty of non aggression. i will do my best to make that clearer. some of these panels definitely need text but i am glad that most the story is clear. thank you for your input
Hatton Slayden
2018-09-01 22:56:21 +0000 UTCAll flowed very well even with a lack of dialogue, though i did not understand if he pulled a scroll from his hat and tried to cast a spell that was interrupted, or if he tried to read something which angered the water god. Aside from that it flowed really well and personally i liked it when he went and summoned the people the shark had eaten to kill the sharks. (though i'm sorry for them because they were really cute while laughing). 😅
Simone Spinozzi
2018-09-01 21:40:49 +0000 UTCyes he is using a spell book and i will make sure to clean that up so it is clearer
Hatton Slayden
2018-08-31 10:24:34 +0000 UTCIt seemed pretty clear to me. At first, page 15 didn't seem clear. I couldn't tell he was pulling out and using a spell book. Apart from that one page, it flowed well for me. Probably nothing wrong with page 15, may just be me.
Just Gollor
2018-08-31 00:57:08 +0000 UTC
