Feedback thread! *spoiler alert*

You seems in love with his mom aren't you lol Now I will make a request thread first because last month we didn't have one.

What is your next work? Will story with his mom?

Great work RanneRo, it was a nice little NTR story. Not to much depth, but that's not always a bad thing. And your art has improved nicely. The only thing that I didn't like was that there wasn't more of it. I really would like to know what happened afterwards, even if it was just an epilogue. How does Seita go on after that? How does he face Yuuki? And how will he take the scorn from those two knowing that they've done his sister and that he saw and masturbated to it, seeing them look down on him? Especially when they have pictures and all the guys in school know about those guys banging his slutty sister and are laughing at him from afar. I'd especially like to know if she ever realises he knows and if she discovers how he felt about her, and what she does about it. To be fair I prefer NTR where the protag and the heroine had mutual feelings for each other, even if they were not in a relationship yet, and were all set to date and get married one day, living happily ever after, before the NTR guy entered the picture and showed her how much happier she could be with his penis. Seeing how the guy reacts to that and how it turns out in the end, whether their love has been ruined or if they somehow overcome it and get together in the end. Or if it seems like they have, but it a lie and she's still sleeping with the other guy behind the protag's back. That's the kind of situation I like to see. Knowing what they all do and having closure is a big part of it for me.

DiabolicalGenius

well I feel my art can't compete with many Jap artist, sure my lineart is smooth and clean but it still lacks of many thing I can't figure it out yet. Btw thanks for your words, now I'm not sure what im gonna do next, I still have some commissions to do.

it's my fetish too but it's too complicated for an amateur like me, I feel uneasy with it :(

Well, first of all: "I know my art and my writing aren't good..." are you kidding me? I think your art is great compared to most other artist in this genre, and in this fetish (netorare) youre rly one of the best authors (beside hana hook). Some sentences are a bit clumsy, but its normal when your native language isnt english. The story... mh i think its a common plot to have a female protagonist whos addictive to cocks, but its nothing special (no offense). I still prefer an "i just do it to prevent my little brother from being bullied"-setting or something like your first doujin where they play a game and the sister is the price, but its just my personal taste. After all: this doujin is rly one of the best out there. I hope you keep going! ;)

As far as the back story goes, I personally prefer the tg setting from your very first one. Honestly I'd have never found you if it wasn't for that. But, well, that's just my fetish, so take it with a grain of salt :P

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