Not going to lie, I could have posted this yesterday and washed my hands of it, but...
It just wasn't up to snuff.
I had to do some rewrites because I just wasn't happy with how the latter part of the chapter turned out. I'll admit to being very very glad I did so. The rewrite turned out much better than what I'd slammed out in an attempt to make the self-imposed deadline I'd set.
In any event, I spent most of the day hanging with friends and playing some MtG, but I had enough energy to finish the rewrite tonight. Here's the result.
I'm still planning to have one more update out before the end of the month. Look forward to Industrious: Engineering Marvels before then.
Until then, though... rock on, stay awesome, and thanks again for all the support. I literally couldn't do this without all of you.