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Love Addict’s RPG Vol 2 Outline Part 2

Morning

Tessa

After work

HE3

HE3 p2

Notes - Got that done a lot faster than I expected. I wouldn’t take the Tessa chapter 100% at face value as is, it’s a mature, adult conversation and I expect the way it turns out to better reflect that.

After these chapters are up we’ll have a big scene on Saturday I’ve alluded to when Rebecca is over. Not sure what all four of them will do together yet (kind of limiting when at this point in the story Zoe only ever plays games) but there’ll be a twist that Zoe gets unbanned and she’ll try to leave to go stream but this kicks off Mia actually asserting herself. It’s gonna make Zoe look bad, even though I’m gonna try and portray it as Zoe being addicted. I can’t escape that but it needs to happen for her to grow.

After that he’ll probably drive Rebecca home, Mia will want to be alone for the rest of the night, and I have a funny idea in mind for that night. He might try to talk strategy with Bradley but Bradley will instead have a better idea and get Mia’s brothers to pick Oliver up to go out drinking. Juan and Julio will provide insight about Mia and Zoe’s relationship as well as giving him advice about being a playboy. It’ll be very comedic but they both get that their sister has weird tastes and that her happiness involves Zoe somehow so they’re supportive.

Sunday will be a fun, as of yet undecided scheme between Oliver and Bradley to force a bonding opportunity by making Zoe unable to stream. Like Bradley pretends to be an internet guy here to fix their modem or some shit, something along those lines. Still pretty up in the air, just laying out some ideas on where I plan to take things.


Comments

No problem! Don’t ever feel shy about feedback, I’m very receptive and enjoy talking about behind the scenes stuff in general. Also thank you for joining, it means a lot!

PunishedKom

Lol. It's all good. I like that there are pov changes, and am excited to see any future pov chapters. Just thought I would voice that it would be welcome. I'm a new fan, and wanted to see alittle more of the behind the scenes. Keep up the good work 👏

Daniel Tran

Yeah I intentionally throw in moments like that here and there but there’s yet to be a full pov chapter. Committing early on to saying I’d give that scene for Rebecca’s pov is something I can’t really do tho since presumably a lot of stuff will be going on at that moment and it’s likely going to be focusing on Rebecca’s perspective of the whole Zoe situation. Won’t really be the right mood for her to have too much development on her feelings there but I was planning on him getting info about her friendship with Mia and Zoe there and at least talking to her about her job so we get context on why she skips so much. Not ready for too much more than that but we’ll see how it goes! I do definitely want to have pov shift chapters, though. I’ve done them frequently in my other books. Just hasn’t been an opportunity yet aside from an attempted Zoe one I scrapped.

PunishedKom

Something I've noted is that that there are small moments where the story shifts prospectives like there a paragraph thrown here or there from the womens pov. I think the Rebecca car ride scene whould be a interesting shift if it was done entirely in her pov. If anything it would be a fun writing exercise and allow you to more easily expanded her character and show how the romantic development looks like on the womens side. It also allows us to get out of Oliver's head, and get a third person perspective on how the world and other characters view him.

Daniel Tran

Legitimately an interesting idea and would also provide an excuse to get her away from her phone lol might consider it

PunishedKom

Would it be completely unexpected for Bradley to have tamed a rat to chew on the hardwire connections to the building or suite?

Ginrak Delyl

Could be a good time to show some of Rebeccas problems then. Give Oliver a taste of what what could be to come. Could be an opportunity to have him fumble and lose some relationship points with mia after he tell her how it goes.

Maelstrom148

I mean yeah that's definitely going to happen I'm just saying I need to do it in a way that doesn't make people wonder why it didn't happen at that moment without it feeling contrived if you get what I mean lol

PunishedKom

No worries man I just figured the car ride home for them could be sweet bonding moment after the nights drama and let them decompress together. If the tempo isn't there then no worries but figured I'd throw my two cents in.

Maelstrom148

Realistically I could have Rebecca's registration on Saturday but it would kind of kill the pacing to add another thing to worry about on top of else going on right now. Don't want to bring it up and then immediately sideline it because getting Zoe to at least start leaving her room more becomes his most pressing objective. The only concern I have is I don't want to tease Rebecca too much more than she already has so I have to be careful about whatever happens on Saturday lol like I don't want it to get to a point where people are asking why hasn't it happened yet. Sorry ended up airing some of my thoughts out lol

PunishedKom

Kinda undermines the twist if she’s instantly banned again the day after. We’ll see, idk yet

PunishedKom

Local transformer blows only effecting their square block? Her mini fridge causes a small house fire?maybe the number 2 cam girl is losing to much money to Zoe and she bribes tech to reinstate the ban again

James Mayer

I actually considered both of those things you mentioned but Oliver would worry a ton of he caused a power outage or random people lost internet access lol power outage could be quite danger especially. He’ll probably just wear a mask or something do Zoe doesn’t recognize him after properly meeting him. But you’re right that cell connection has to be tackled too. It’s tricky but I’ll one up with something.

PunishedKom

Got a thought on the internet problem. Some companies are trying to go completely wireless. Meaning phone cable and internet all off of towers it might be easier to have Bradley crash into one of the towers that service the area because that might also bring down her cell connection as well. Or cause a power outage in the area because being his best bro Zoe might meet Bradley and then figure something out.

James Mayer

Also excited for a nice Tessa scene and all the shannagens to come. I'm curious to see when Rebecca becomes a valid love interest and how that reaction will go. Bradley and the brothers should be a great time too

Maelstrom148

I really am looking forward to everything here I can't wait to see the Tessa scene. Even more so inreally wanna see this hang out scene between the four of them before Zoe's temp ban gets lifted I feel it will be a quick cute look into the future. Then bro bonding I'm always here for that and to end it off Bradly shaninagans are always welcome.

AzureXIII

Excited for the Tessa scene

Valhazstromoz


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