Vol 1 Final Outline
Added 2024-01-27 02:38:07 +0000 UTCPlease let me know what you think, lots of stuf
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The street fighting stuff will probably be recurring, I’ll detail more of it in the actual thing. I don’t actually think it’s something that exists because of Oliver’s powers though lol. More like this world actually has tons of weird shit beyond Oliver and he’s going to be slowly exposed to it now that he’s engaging with life. I was going to write it off as the app just being a thing instituted by rich people and that the fights are being recorded for their entertainment and it’d be shrugged off by Oliver thinking yeah that sounds fucked up and dystopian enough to be true. If anything it might exist to find people with abilities like Oliver but I don’t want to commit to that, just saying it’s an idea I have. Oliver will impact the world in some pretty significant ways, though. We’re mostly just seeing small scale things this early on but the truth is that he’s a full on reality warper so as his stats rise the situations will kind of have to become increasingly ridiculous, as will future heroines if the series does well enough to make it past the current roster. Not going to say much about the potential street fighter heroine because she really is just a minor idea right now and I was just throwing it out there there One Piece style to elaborate 200 chapters down the line if I so choose. He does need a strength oriented heroine though, that’s not up for debate lol. I need to get a design made before I can really plan anything concrete out beyond this though. Originally I was thinking people in the street fighting communist would keep mentioning some sort of queen and that Oliver would get a quest telling him to get strong enough to earn the queen’s attention and the quest just gives him incredibly bad vibes and he’d be like yeah no, but I decided against it because I don’t want to hint anything too much about her when I don’t have concrete plans/a design for her yet. Maybe if anyone was intrigued by her enough to help I can have a design made sometime soonish, we’ll see. I adlibbed the Stacy and Rebecca stuff but I think it goes a long way toward showing more that she is yet again a lot nicer than Oliver might’ve thought. If Rebecca does ever consent to a makeover it would not be permanent like Oliver’s lol. Her distinct look is too big of a part of her character and I like it too much to want to change it.
PunishedKom
2024-01-27 22:30:41 +0000 UTCIt’s not easy and I’m full of way more doubts than I mentioned lol. Part of me was alread
PunishedKom
2024-01-27 21:28:21 +0000 UTCYea gotta agree with everyone else here great work on wrapping it up. I appreciate you set the bar high on this one and just let the story flow. I love a long book and appreciate a slow burn.
Maelstrom148
2024-01-27 19:37:26 +0000 UTCThis outline looks great. My favorite part is everything about the street fighting app yet again you have made something that could be an entirely interesting own spin off. I also really enjoy the hinting at the future dynamic of the harem including Stacy probably playing dress up with Rebecca. I can't wait to see some if the stuff Stacy puts her in, I hope that she can find a way to blend Rebecca's unique style with her makeover. I also am into the homeless/vagabond warrior but I think she would be better to appear as a lucky bastard trigger like either Oliver is trying to gain some extra money using the app to buy something for one of the heroines. My other thought would be after Oliver finally tells Mia about his powers maybe they're talking about how he affects the world around him and the fighting app comes up as it was probably created by his sandbox ability so him and Mia go exploring more of the app just to see how his abilities truly affect the world and he takes her to some fights until lucky bastard triggers. It can even be comedic with Mia talking about are you sure you didn't accidentally pick lucky pervert instead.
AzureXIII
2024-01-27 14:29:24 +0000 UTC
