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DW's rewrite is finally finished, and I present to you: The Breaker's Tale! Chapters 1 to 10!

What is The Breaker's Tale? It's tossing a very old and jaded Harry Potter from a broken world into the body of a freshly dead Jon Snow in a mixed setting of book and show. Does it make sense? Probably not. Did I enjoy writing and rewriting it? Hell yes.

It's been nearly two years since I started the rewrite. I promised to do it as a side project, and I actually finished it as I said I would! I am well aware that DW is a very flawed and cracky story, but it was the story that got me into writing, and I like it a lot regardless of everything. It has a special place in my heart.

Even though I knew the name I had originally chosen was quite cringeworthy, I struggled to think of something better at the time. I didn't even know how to write; I had never written before I started, and I had no idea whether I could write something coherent or even see it through to the end.

Anyway, it's finished. The first chapters still feel weak, no matter how much I rewrite them, but they are somewhat better than before. It's not a simple rewrite either, I redid many scenes from scratch, expanded to add more PoVs, added a clearer timeline, cleaned up a few plot points and added new ones instead. Some chapters are outright new. The story is essentially the same, but the way it is told should make for a far more enjoyable experience.

That being said, this has been a far greater endeavour than I first thought, and I'm definitely not going to rewrite things from scratch ever again. This is the first and the last time.

Anyway, I'll post chapters in bulk of ten every week or two(as I go through them for one final edit)

For those who have not read it, it's a Gary-Stu story with a serious spin. The HP elements are very subtle. It also mixes the ASOIAF and GOT timelines, in a hodgepodge that should not have worked but somehow did. In hindsight, I'm very surprised the og story came out half as interesting or as popular as it did.

Without further ado, here are the chapters:

Chapter 1-Prologue
Chapter 2-Convergence of Fates
Chapter 3-Ours is the Old Way
Chapter 4-A Long Road
Chapter 5-Conversations
Chapter 6-Of Doubts and Wilfire
Chapter 7-The Bastard Letter
Chapter 8-Tickling the Sleeping Dragon
Chapter 9-The Ghost of Winterfell
Chapter 10-Deadly Games

Comments

It's working now

Kurotanbo

Chapters 8-10 don't seem to work

Kurotanbo

Honestly respect for that. Arguably the actual heir to the throne and far underutilized by nearly every author, even though she is so important

Alex Aiello

Yes.

Gladiusx

Of all the women in verse and you go with shireen

Andrew Steven

I’m enjoying this rewrite of the Dragonwolf. The prose is good, the story telling clear and concise.

stevem1

The Dragonwolf…I remember seeing this, trying to read the original first chapter, and not being able to get past it. It almost happened again here lmao. It got better real quick though. Looking forward to the next batch of chapters.

pangoid

For a second, I thought that this was something else than DW, lol. But as I read, I was like "wtf, I've read this before", and so I had, lol. Edit: I enjoyed it too, but I already re-read it recently, so another re-read will have to wait a while, lol.

Eric Lachance

batches by 10 per week (might skip a week if I'm busy irl)

Gladiusx

Will this be released in batches, or one by one?

Corlys

Love it so far

Austin

Don't be ashamed of anything about that story. Name and all. That was your first attempt at writing? Then thats incredible. I thoroughly enjoyed that story. Flaws and all. I thought your writing style was great. Ramsey Bolton's "Come and See" letter was nicely done. The battle against the walkers and Shireen flying in at the 11th hour was riveting. It had supsense and drama. And you did an excellent job conveying the human elements of fear, struggle, despair, and then hope. Also I thought your epilog were clever with the different points of view. So yea, the name could be better, but have you read fan fiction? The name could have been a lot worse too.

Bryan C Harper

Hey i have read from discord test read feedback. . Is this final version have any major changes from the discord version apart from editorial ones ???

the batman

I haven't changed the pairing, if that's what you're asking. It's still the same story in its core, just written better.

Gladiusx

Is the FL still Shireen?

Tronic42

The Dragonwolf... I'm almost ashamed to spell it now. It's my first fic.

Gladiusx

And have I missed out on something

Yanni

What is DW ?

Yanni


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