Quick little poll for The Spread Chp 4
Added 2024-04-28 13:39:13 +0000 UTCHey all, not a super big one, but just wanted to check what are all of your thoughts on this. I'm finishing up the script for The Spread chp 4 and we have ran into a bit of a page limit issue. As much as I want to do like a 30-40 page thing, it ain't too sustainable haha.
There were some feedback of the corruption / transformation thing being too quick and barely there, some people wanted it to be longer and more detailed. So yeap yeap, we're gonna have to choose!
Should I:
Reduce some pages of sex scenes to showcase the corruption more?
Speed up the speed of infection to get to the sex scene?
Or add another chapter to accommodate both?
I thought I couldn't show what I meant by the corruption cause it's NSFW, but looking closer, I can apparently lol, cause it's not showing any NSFW parts. This is what I mean by the corruption process that some people think it's too short and should be longer:
Comments
Ah ok I see
Pierrick Buffet
2024-04-30 13:04:18 +0000 UTCAh, the scenes isn't about explaining the infection, it more about seeing them resist, trying to fight it etc.
Doggo
2024-04-29 12:28:39 +0000 UTCwhat could be done is that, for example, in the next chapter, corruption takes 1 square to trigger, 1 where the person resists, 1 where the guy explains that she will not be able to escape it by explaining to her why (example: corruption awakens and increases tenfold the primary animal instincts around him like a lion who has several lioness) and then the girl gives in. This solves the need for explanation, makes the process understandable. the reader images more easily what is happening in the process and the whole thing does not overwhelm too much for the next chapters. I hope the message was understood (sorry for my level of English) and that this can help
Pierrick Buffet
2024-04-29 10:51:11 +0000 UTCTo be honest I never felt like the corruption process needed to take up much time at all as by its very nature it would need to happen extremely quickly for the MC to be successfully able to achieve his goals without the afflicted being able to react effectively. I always felt like the near instantaneousness of the process was the MC's greatest advantage. Having the process take up so few frames made it "feel and show" how fast the process occurred without really having to "tell" or explain to the reader it was. My suggestion is that instead of showing more of the corruption process perhaps you add in a panel where for a split second we are seeing from the afflicted's perspective, them looking at the MC but now the edges of their sight being tainted in a red color that is slowly filling in to show the progress of the corruption as their eyes always change to a reddish color after they have been turned. This could be an effective way of showing the afflicted's own panic about what was happening without using up too much space. Not sure if I am making sense. Well, regardless I am definitely looking forward to the next chapter.
Welltall44
2024-04-28 19:21:16 +0000 UTCThe corruption could be a process incorporated into a S-scene. Like they’re in between turning/resisting/getting corrupted during the act.
Luca A.
2024-04-28 13:42:25 +0000 UTC
