Jon Snow/Rhaenyra Targaryen/Visenya Targaryen/Rhaena Targaryen/Baela Targaryen - One Shot
Added 2024-11-22 14:23:56 +0000 UTCClick the Link Below to Read the One Shot.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ReQ-7D-qI2i-bc_AkqV_uQLmfojBLVmOlOCkByT7hYs/edit?usp=sharing
Comments
Don't worry about being harsh; every review is appreciated. As for the humor, I think I should have toned it down a bit, but since it's a one-shot, I thought I should add more humor to make it more enjoyable, but maybe you are right; maybe I overdid it.
Drinor
2024-11-22 18:52:10 +0000 UTCThat was very kinky ! Loved it and loved seeing Daeron kill Aemond, couldn’t have happened to a better person. The smut was great and the mother/daughter action… damn… However, if I may give one critique: it got a little annoying having some characters relentlessly quip and joke ALL the time. Clowns like that aren’t funny, they get annoying. Plus humour can be very hard to pull off because it varies for everyone so verbal quips can be hit or miss. At some point I just wanted Daeron and Baela to shut up. It also has the added inconvenience of dragging some things for way too long. The war meeting for example. Brought nothing to the plot and didn’t give any particular insight in the characters. Sorry if I was harsh but I had a hard time with some characters at times.
TheWateringWizard
2024-11-22 18:31:05 +0000 UTCDragons are flaming sky puppies.
Daeron Targaryen
2024-11-22 15:01:22 +0000 UTC
