Chapter 1532
Added 2020-09-25 05:05:09 +0000 UTCComments
Thanks for the eggs
Will, of the convictions forge.
2024-06-12 04:05:16 +0000 UTCIt is mentioned that he is related to Rex family but I belive his skin color is different, he is also hairless I believe
Umut Numanoglu
2020-09-28 10:47:21 +0000 UTCLady Iellaya’s didn’t even react. -> Lady Iellaya didn’t even react:
Umut Numanoglu
2020-09-28 10:45:59 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter! So this Neshamah Rex is related to his recruit Benjamin Rex, I guess. Was it mentioned, that he has blue skin?
Grammarmelade
2020-09-25 17:39:10 +0000 UTC"she’s better than using than I am" - she's better at using it than I am
EnigmaticOne
2020-09-25 12:20:03 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter
nethernight11
2020-09-25 08:51:41 +0000 UTC'room the soldiers' -> 'room for the soldiers'
Corwin Amber
2020-09-25 07:16:14 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter.
Joshua Little
2020-09-25 06:59:06 +0000 UTCThe real residences. If your goal is to write to a audience, you want to give clear language, simple language often. Instead of “the real residences” which is incorrect based on context how about “The local populace/population” instead ?.
Kevin Mendoza
2020-09-25 06:51:49 +0000 UTCNot sure this applies to your world but in the beginning you say that they "moved all soldiers under the rank of commander out of the way". There is usually a pretty sharp divide between soldiers and officers and I think commander sounds like an officers rank rather than a soldiers rank. Perhaps write "any military personnel" or maybe "anyone under the rank of commander"
Hampus Steinvall
2020-09-25 06:08:33 +0000 UTCThanks
Luke Scheffe
2020-09-25 05:49:37 +0000 UTCCorrections
PuDDleS4263
2020-09-25 05:05:24 +0000 UTC
