Looking for Feedback on Book 2 Update
Added 2023-09-07 05:52:47 +0000 UTCSo far I've been reorganizing how Book 2 is written and I need feedback to determine it's viability.
The main complaint i aimed to target was the overemphasis of politics, and the 'shift' away from what seemed to be a criminal black market angle.
I also aim to personalize the threat by the industrialist, by making Harrison much more prominent. He was in the sense, the final boss of the Versia arc, but he did not get enough screentime to build him like how Sebastian was introduced.
Here is the google doc folder: please add comments inside. New book2 chapters will be uploaded both in the folder and on patreon.
A discussion channel has been opened on Discord as well.
https://drive.google.com/drive/u/0/folders/1u-TDecHEIOkkrrzzB2O2ruW9gZUIV0dK
Comments
I thought so too, but I think there is a way to ease it in by starting from the ground up before jumping straight into governmental stuff. The same event sequence would be roughly kept, but the way it is presented should allow for easier consumption. Politics still remain a niche topic of LitRPGs and progression fantasy books in general, so I aim to write to market in that sense.
M.GDriver
2023-09-07 08:02:26 +0000 UTCI did not think it was overly political.
Scion
2023-09-07 06:38:12 +0000 UTC
