XaiJu
AuthorShawnWilson
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Hey all

I've got about 2-3 more days till back home and on my PC.

My laptop and the wifi here isn't doing great. Google doc's is struggling.

I did a bunch of updates and hired someone to help me with updating changes on Patreon and RR.

I reached out to see what folder they're using as I have 3 different folders I work from and we may be dragging some stuff from the wrong ones. Sorry - I tried to have everything setup before I left for vacation.

A few things story wise:

Loopbreaker - I see the comments and will consider going back and updating some of them a bit more.

A few things ((spoilers at the bottom of the entire message - so don't go to bottom if you don't want to read it.)) I've got a plan and a reason for the slow skill ups. It's revealed in the story (spoiler mentions so again... don't read it if you don't want to). I obviously have failed my original plan on showing loops and some of the grinding / relationship side of things. If it's not working for enough of you then I'll need to obviously do some major updating and fixing to clean that up. I don't mind rinsing chapters or simply changing things.

I think i got my #'s fixed as I realized I had made some mistakes at one point and forgot to update my excel sheet which meant errors later. Hopefully i've got them all fleshed out.


UL1 - I'll go back and read the comments. Internet isn't great and i'm struggling to be able to modify things as much as I had hoped. I've basically been writing in wordpad on my laptop and copy/pasting into google docs as thats easier.

Otherwise... i think that's it for now. I've not taken a vacation in a long time where it's messed up my internet. So i hadn't planned on this.

Ok... spoiler stuff. Actually i'll make a post this way you don't have to comment / see stuff if you go to the bottom of this and the comments and see it there.

Comments

I think its well written, it's just that ten straight chapters of essentially the same thing begins to feel like we're not headed anywhere. I don't know how to articulate it, but these last chapters, the grind feels different than it did in the beginning during book one. It feels... distant and boggy, if that makes sense. Not bad at ALL—I love the story—just doesnt feel rewarding. I can imagine some people were not so nice about their opinions, so just lnow you're doing a great job and its good that you see the good part of the feedback rather than people just being asshats.

FeelingsandFoibles

I have some of that later... part if it is showing how much death takes place, but I didn't wana over do it. Finding the middle ground I felt works is such a difficult thing.

Shawn Wilson

Personally I like the way you fleshed out the acknowledgment of loops without getting crazy detailed or breaking the immersion with something like “10 deaths later” italicized.

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