Locker Room Glitch (Textless)
Added 2025-09-10 20:50:30 +0000 UTCStill practicing making comics. And while I’m working on speech bubbles and SFX, I decided to share what I’ve got so far =)
Comments
Ahaha, great idea! =D I’ve got a slightly different one for this comic) once the text is ready, it’ll become clearer.
GreenTG
2025-09-11 08:38:54 +0000 UTCThanks!!! =D About the frame: do you mean in the locker room or already outside?
GreenTG
2025-09-11 08:37:06 +0000 UTCLove the pov shot adds a alot to the tf making it loads of fun. I was just hoping to see a bit more reality change frames with the pov. ALSO I FUCKING LOVE THAT LAST FRAME AHBSJS SO GOOD.
Shadowassaian12
2025-09-10 22:46:32 +0000 UTCThis is just my opinion, but the order could be. Ordered Sequence of the Scene: 1. The boy at the door. A young man arrives running, in a hurry to get to his locker. Without looking properly at the sign, he pushes open the changing room door. 2. The boy is opening his locker. He approaches a locker, enters the combination, and turns the dial with the confidence of someone who has done this hundreds of times. 3. The boy is surprised by what's inside. Instead of finding his jacket and books, he sees a pink gym bag, a small towel, and some ballet flats. He frowns, completely bewildered. "This isn't my locker?" he mutters. 4. Distraction by the voices. Suddenly, he is distracted by the sound of cheerful, breathy voices approaching. A group of girls, visibly tired but in good spirits after a gym session, enters the changing room laughing and talking. 5. The physical surprise. Hearing them, the boy instinctively turns towards the door and... stops dead in his tracks. He feels an unusual weight on his chest that sways with the movement. He runs his hand through his hair and finds long, soft hair where he once had short hair. 6. The final discovery. With his heart racing from a growing and terrible suspicion, he looks down at his own body. His eyes widen like saucers as he sees he is no longer wearing his jeans and hoodie, but rather tight black leggings and a white gym sweatshirt that, to his horror, prominently bulges over the bust. 7. The reflection. He stumbles towards a mirror on the wall. The image it returns is undeniable: the face is his, but softer, and the body is that of an athletic girl. It's her. He is her. 8. The Notice. Right at that moment of absolute shock, her gaze shifts to a laminated, official notice posted next to the mirror. The camera closes in on the text, which reads: "IMPORTANT NOTICE FOR MEMBERS: For your safety and to avoid situations of force majeure, we kindly ask that you use ONLY the facilities assigned to your registered biological sex. The company is not responsible for transformations or consequences resulting from access to restricted areas. Thank you for your cooperation." 9. The Escape. Panicked and with no other option, she frantically changes into the contents of the gym bag, desperate to cover up and escape. She then hugs the bag tightly to her chest and awkwardly shuffles past the chatting girls, her face flushed with embarrassment. 10. The Final Scene. We see her exit the gym doors onto the street. The transformation is complete and jarring. She is now dressed in a delicate blue skirt, a blouse that strains noticeably over her full bust, and a pair of elegant black high heels. A string of pearl earrings dangles from her ears, and a small clutch bag is hooked over her arm. She walks with immense difficulty, her body language screaming of unfamiliarity. Each step is a precarious wobble on the black heels, her ankles threatening to buckle. She constantly tugs at the blouse, uncomfortable with its tight fit and the distracting sway of her new chest. The scene holds on her struggling to navigate the simple curb of the sidewalk, a portrait of utter awkwardness, before she turns a corner and disappears from view. MAYBE THE END.... (for now)
AnMyzra
2025-09-10 22:29:07 +0000 UTCNah, I meant it more from the storytelling logic side. Anyway, let’s leave it to my judgment, haha. By the way, I finished a small addition =D
GreenTG
2025-09-10 21:36:08 +0000 UTCDifferent tastes, but I love the hair POV and the looking down the front POV. I'm a sucker for things like that.
Davina
2025-09-10 21:23:33 +0000 UTCHonestly, I’m not really sure about the POV. Maybe it should be placed differently — it feels like the flow of the story gets a bit lost. It’s supposed to come after the shot of the girls… Though maybe the bubbles and SFX will fix everything…
GreenTG
2025-09-10 20:50:40 +0000 UTC
