Voting 3.2 - The Draft, Order Inverted
Added 2021-07-13 12:43:26 +0000 UTCThanks to skinnyrandompatron for suggesting a rewrite where the story opens with The Draft, making the name clearer. If you read yesterday's post, this one is much the same, but with the backend first and then the jump back to how they got here. It also puts the girls descriptions first. I think it works better. I also fixed the bit where it's now Nina who calls Hughie a Nerd's Nerd to connect with her being picked for DnD related purposes.
The vote will still be for The Draft. But maybe this version works better for you.
Thank you all for your support.
Comments
That's what I understood. It's also why I like having two stories on the go at any given time. More likely to get everyone contributing under the umbrella. Squick just means turn-off. It's a word like cringe referring to the retreating muscle response of not liking what your seeing, or so I've come to understand. I hear it a lot when talking about tags with other writers. Are people using the tags to find what they want to read or are they using them to block out what they don't? Sort of thing. I use the term just to refer to sexual barriers of entry.
Neal Johnstone
2021-07-17 09:06:23 +0000 UTCYeah although the quality is at the level of your other works this is certainly a concept/theme that does not appeal to me. So I’m not saying it’s bad just unappealing to me personally. Different than saying it’s a poorly done /bad story. Basically “I love my steak but there ain’t no way I’m going to like liver no matter how great the chef is or how well prepared it is”. Not everything an author writes is going to appeal to me and that’s alright. If it wins the vote and that’s what the majority of your audience wants I’m not going to crap on it. Simply I’ll read your other work and enjoy that. Ps: I have no idea what squicks means nor have I ever heard that word before. Also neither has my auto correct. It tried to change the word to squirms. Must be a Canadian thing lol.
Nick Cartwright
2021-07-17 03:09:06 +0000 UTCTrading and ditching (I really want to get rid of Jessica but I want Anthony to pay me to take her so he doesn't get suspicious and ends up walking away from this deal) would definitely come into play. If it's not for you, there are others to vote on. I don't want it to turn into a vote vs squicks but more of a vote for stories. This is the only one with more than one harem master. Or a lesbian harem master.
Neal Johnstone
2021-07-16 08:20:22 +0000 UTCDon’t really like the concept of multiple protagonists and purely lesbian harems. Also, if it comes into play as the blurb suggests, not a fan of trading/sharing harem girls.
Nick Cartwright
2021-07-16 03:09:14 +0000 UTC
