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Changelog (122-126)

Significant changes this time. Now that 143 just released here and 126 released publically, it's time to do our 5 chapter review.

Ch 122 - Mostly flavor text, but I did add in a reference to Sakura thinking about a clone based explosive tag contingency plan. That should make things less sudden later.

CH 123 - Changed the flavor text around Ino's thing to be a little more strenuous, changed some flavor text and dialogue to feel a little more natural.

Ch 124 - Fixed up Karin's section a little bit to make it seem just a little less unpalatably pathetic. Made the Naruto and Sakura conversation a little better with a little more characteristic flair.

Ch 125 - Changed the Kabuto portion because a lot of context was changed earlier, like she had a Naruto clone report him earlier and a lot of her thoughts on him were given earlier so a huge swath of text was able to be removed here. I added more flavor text to the fight, changed a few details, explained her stat system a little more and how much she's grown, and lastly I went and drastically changed the way the flavor text was for Jiraiya. Originally I'd kind of zoned through it and just focused on how clever Sakura is. Now it shows an understanding of what she's doing, judgement, and the tone that this is kinda gross is intentionally there to draw attention to the fact that she's doing something she's uncomfortable with for the sake of her plans and safety. It's possible by taking it more seriously I actually made the section more controversial, but ultimately I thought it was better and respected Sakura and Jiraiya a little more.

CH 126: Added a lot of context to the Jiraiya offscreen scene, almost enough I feel like some of it should have been on screen but it'd drag away from what's important here. An entire big scene about them discussing tomorrow has been added, along with reasons Sakura doesn't just run. If you were disappointed in the original version for a lack of team communication, it's worth a reread. Some flavor was added, like Sakura hugging Ino close instead of just holding her hand. I would say CH 126 might be one of the most impactful edits I've ever done.


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