Early drafts

Here are some first drafts of a few texts we ran lately, with the finalized version following to compare.

First Draft:

Robin: Remind me again why you want me on the Teen Titans? You hate teams, you're only a Justice Leaguer part time.

Batman: Yes but the Teen Titans are different, they help teach you stealth.

R: Their base is a giant T.

B: You learn valuable social skills.

R: Coming from a man who runs on sadness.

B: You learn to be a leader.

R: I am in charge of pizza night.

B: Now you're getting it.

Final Version:

B: Where's the Teen Titans base?

R: It's the giant T-shaped building in the middle of the river.

B: Not your decoy base. Your actual base.

R: ... that's the actual base.

B: What??? You actually stay there? It's a giant target!

R: We’re hiding in plain sight. No one suspects it! We've literally never been attacked.

B: All right, that’s pretty impressive. I guess it’s safe then.

R: Oh not at all! This building could topple at any moment, it is way too top heavy. Our worst enemy is a light breeze.

First draft:

Superman: Lex Luthor is trying to block the sun. This could be very bad, I'm powered by the sun.

Batman: The whole world is powered by the sun, Clark, you're not special.

Superman: I'm kind of special.

Batman: Grass literally does what you do, it just doesn't brag about it.

Superman: Well then maybe you should ask grass to save the world next time! 

Batman: Grass is busy making us oxygen to breathe. It saves the world everyday. And it doesn't ask us to call it Supergrass when it does.

Final version:

Superman: Darkseid is attempting to blow up the sun. We have to stop him! The sun is where I get my powers.

B: ... And is what keeps the Earth alive.

S: Because it powers me.

B: Because it powers everything. Do you not understand what the sun does?

S: The sun gives me the strength to keep people alive. Who else could do that?

B: Trees. 

S: Never heard of him. What planet is he from?

B: What is happening in Kansas schools!?!?

First draft:

Captain America: We have to go back and fight. Are you with me?

Falcon: No Steve, just let it go.

CA: I can’t walk away from injustice Sam and I thought you couldn’t either. If there was a disappointed emoji I’d use it here.

F: I wouldn’t call it “injustice” that Denny’s denied you a senior’s discount.

CA: Captain America doesn’t pay full price for waffles!

F: Inspiration Steve, really.

Final version:

Cap: We have to go back and fight this injustice!

Falcon: Just leave it.

C: It's unamerican. It's a travesty. It's criminal! They shall not tread on our dreams!

F: Inspiring, really. But you're on your own.

C: Who are they to deny my senior's discount because I look young!?

F: It's a Denny's man. Let it go!