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[WIP] A Teen Titan's Toilet Troubles - Page 18

Next page of the Teen Titan comic, hope you'll like it!

[WIP] A Teen Titan's Toilet Troubles - Page 18

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"You need... to be changed immediately!" Pffft as if XD

Feartheoldblood

Thanks!

Thanks for the cue Shadow, I'll integrate that instead!

Thanks Roberto! I think this one shouldn't take much more than 4/5 pages to end!

Thanks, happy you like the page Ricardo!

aww star dont let wittle Raven get diaper rash

Aura_bullet

Here is a link with some examples explained https://thestarfirearchives.tumblr.com/post/154347605863/starfires-speech-patterns Hope it helps, feel free to make the decision yourself.

Shadowpaladin

I've watched a lot of teen titans m, from how i remember it i think she'd say "Babies do not do the talking back." She often uses the word the when it is unnecessary.

Shadowpaladin

Seeing this page reminded me how glad I am that you're back! I had forgotten about this comic but can't wait to see more now!

Awesome Page Soap! Looks like everyone else caught the spelling mistakes so you're all good now!

Ricardo de Cervantes

Cute!! Also I like where Starfire is headed :)

DimZebra

It helps, thanks a lot evilengine!

Thanks! I'm still making so much basic mistakes!

if I had to suggest speech edits, panel 1: "I'd rather be dead" does work, but you could maybe use "I wish I was dead." Also "You ate all your compote" not "eat" (unless that's Starfire's usual speech pattern?) In the last panel: "Babies do not talk back" rather than "does not" (again, unless Starfire normally talks that way. Hope this helps, very good work ^_^

"You ate all" not "you eat"

Poor Raven has a rash

Sparkles73

Thanks a lot for the corrections, Hyro, happy you like it!

Love it! Couple dialogue edits though. "It's starting to" in panel 3. And "babies do not do" in panel 6.


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