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Do you want an extra vote this week?

Since Petri would love to know your opinion, every user who leaves a review about what they think of TOP BUNK, will get an extra vote for the next story voting.

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Thanks! Remember that you can use an extra vote in this Monday's voting. You can use it in a text story OR in an art story, in addition to your usual votes.

Loved it! All of it! Like several others have mentioned, a few minor spell checks/name swapping nothing too major! Riveting story!

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Thanks! I will re-read the story to fix those errors, and ask Petri about adding an epilogue. Remember that you can use an extra vote in this Monday's voting. You can use it in a text story OR in an art story, in addition to your usual votes.

Great story overall. There are a few places where you have their names mixed up - writing "Julie" instead of "Connie" and vice versa. This is also the kind of story that could use a short epilogue, which would bring some closure to an otherwise hanging ending. For example, a short scene where they both move out at the end of the semester and into their shared apartment for the next school year.


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