A Semblance of Emotion 054
Added 2025-11-13 02:51:50 +0000 UTCDinner time with the Schnee family. How well will Jaune perform?
Comments
Agreed on the tad bit high amount of descriptive language, sometimes less is more. Otherwise I enjoyed this and look forward to more!
Knight Revan
2025-11-14 21:11:35 +0000 UTCHonest criticism: have you thought about reducing the amount of descriptions like describing the taste of food or the layout of a hotel (casino ..etc.) Adds little value to the overall narrative and story progression and it takes up quite a bit of the chapter.
udk spi
2025-11-13 23:50:44 +0000 UTCI really enjoyed Whitley in this chapter. Due to his upbringing, he only know one way of life. So to see him confused but intrigued with Jaune's life is neat.
Eggroll 08
2025-11-13 16:26:25 +0000 UTCUgh I hate Jacques so much I hope he falls off a cliff and gets eaten by Grimm that or Weiss arrests him like in the show. He is why Weiss's family is so toxic and needs to go. Everything was going so well until he showed up to ruin it as he does most things. I digress, wonderful chapter of Jaune meeting Weiss's family and him sticking up for Weiss was an incredible moment as not even Jaune was going to take that lying down.
Cody
2025-11-13 09:40:10 +0000 UTC
