Pinocchio, Ch30, Pg8
Added 2020-02-07 19:00:03 +0000 UTCThis is that peer pressure stuff I've heard about.
Comments
this part of the chapter in the book is kind of a lame back-and-forth of Pinocchio repeating questions Lampwick has already answered. There's a lot of fat to cut just from dialogue alone.
KC Green
2020-02-09 20:33:52 +0000 UTCI love how in these last couple pages you take this pretty boring scene (if you just read the words, especially because we already KNOW he's going to cave) and make it fun and dynamic.
Sarusa
2020-02-07 20:44:52 +0000 UTC
