'Lonely Hearts Club' (Waiter Version)
Added 2023-02-14 13:30:01 +0000 UTC
[Alternate Text: An image of a soft pink, paper heart strung on a string with a tear starting to rip through its center. The background is black, which makes the title: 'Lonely Hearts Club' in a pink and dusty rose colored font stand out. The font itself is retro.]
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The Fernweh Diner sign casts an unsettling reddish glow over the mostly empty parking lot. Its discharge tubes are well-made antiques, allowing the neon light to shine a vibrant crimson before weakening to soft pinks and muted reds as the excited emissions strobe through the tubing. The words look more alive the longer you take to study how they pulse.
The red and white color scheme is fitting for Valentine's Day, but it only seems disturbing at night.
Your latest nightmare was full of red…
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Comments
Oh, but what if Mal tempts Evie towards the dark? 👀 But, so much /yes/ to all of what you typed, EJ! 💞 It's awesome that you liked this writing of theirs, especially the: 'let us know you' comment since you're right. Mal cultivates their mystery to remain an enigma, though there is more to it... Why do they keep us out? >.> There is so much more planned with them in Book Two. <3
Aelsa Trevelyan
2023-02-19 15:22:57 +0000 UTC"A brittle sort of hope? An unsaid fear?" god GOD, Mal is a favourite okay. LET US KNOW YOU. I love the dip before the kiss -- and honestly, i'm a sucker for a storyline where morally suspect characters can be tempted towards the light.... here's hoping we can manage that with him? >:3 <333
ejunkiette
2023-02-18 17:02:51 +0000 UTCMal truly is living in your head rent free then, which is lovely to hear! 'Methodical' is an interesting word choice that you can see echoed within some of the language in this writing, such as the use of 'calculated' and that extended observation scene. Mal's interactions with the MC are meant to hit differently, not only in how they speak/act, but also how I structure the writing so there is a subtle creepiness or a sense of a disconnect. You as the reader are meant to be ever so slightly more on guard than your MC, so it's reassuring to hear that you still have that nagging suspicion despite the intensity/spice of the moment. 🔥 Mal is supposed to leave you guessing; they're a puzzle piece that doesn't cleanly fit, but maybe both you and the MC can make a place for them. 🧩 (The reason why I say both is because their route is delicate yet rewarding; you'll need to consider your choices while roleplaying your MC.)
Aelsa Trevelyan
2023-02-15 16:37:05 +0000 UTCIt's what W-mancers deserve considering all that's to come! 💋 (I know you were hoping for some glimpses of insight into them, so it's awesome to hear that you enjoyed their writing. I'm sure you've looked up what a Christmas rose can mean. It's something to ponder. 🔎)
Aelsa Trevelyan
2023-02-15 16:04:36 +0000 UTCThey were rather deliberate when they asked the MC about having received a valentine, so hmm indeed. 👀 I'm happy that this made you have many feelings, especially that their subtle creepiness seeped into the intensity of the moment. I was hoping to strike that balance! 💞
Aelsa Trevelyan
2023-02-15 15:58:17 +0000 UTCI've read this hours ago but needed to properly sort my thoughts before commenting. It's so beautifully written, the almost methodical way Mal seems to be handling the MC is always something I find so interesting and having them actually kiss in here took me by quite the surprise. It happened so matter of factly (for me) that I couldn't help thinking something still seems... off, but also it's Mal and I'm taking whatever is being offered so this was an amazing read! 🥰
Noah
2023-02-15 02:38:16 +0000 UTCI AM SCREAMING. A PROPER KISS. 🙌
noisrevni
2023-02-14 17:24:19 +0000 UTCThis absolutely has me feeling some kind of way! I love the subtle creepiness of W! And do I spy them worrying that you won't stay in the end? Or maybe that you won't choose them? Hmmm...
Molly
2023-02-14 14:46:00 +0000 UTC
