Q&A/Critisms/Suggestions Part 2
Added 2024-11-18 03:24:31 +0000 UTCWith the second arc offically coming to a close, I thought it was better to hold off rather than simply doing it after Ricky killed Dracula.
First, when I did this Q&A it was mostly to direct respond to the critism of Ricky's character since for a good stint back then, those were the type of comments I got.
So I thought I would do this Q&A to let you, the readers, feel more heard since simply replying to your question on a random chapter might go overlooked to others who were curious about the same question.
But now I'm just going to do it annually after ever arc cause why not. But before you just hog wild I'd like to ask you how you have enjoyed the progression from the end of the first arc to the ending of this arc.
Was the character devolpment everything you hoped for?
Was there some things you think should've been more addressed in his personity and attitude?
Or if you think I missed completly and should be implented?
I also want to ask about some of the side characters that have devolped alongside Ricky.
Who is your favorite?
Who is your least favorite?
Which Character do you just deserves more time within the spolight?
Which character do you think just needs to back up cause they are always there?
Then mirroing the Q&A from last time, which of these subjects just needs more improvement:
Story
Smut
System
Others
And if you anything else you wanna say then don't be afraid to just say it bluntly cause I think its important for a author to really be constructive of critism.
Comments
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Jacob Weiss
2024-11-24 19:13:04 +0000 UTCi talk too much but basically take my ideas please
Unknown
2024-11-22 01:30:07 +0000 UTCthx man i personally just love when protagonists can summon/create things that are strong enough to fight and help them through things (probably cuz of pokemon tbh). speaking of summoning/creating things, when is Ricky gonna use the golem core thing? he should probably put it through the slop upgrader (thats a better name) so that it could idk use biological material as well instead of just like rocks and stones and stuff just thought of this but the golem could kinda be like a cancer that forms a strong layer of metal or some other material as a inner shell protecting the core while the biological material it would merge with are just temporary external layers (could give temporary boosts depending on what you’re using obviously) that the golem core eventually consumes and turns into energy in order to strengthen the core and therefore strengthen the inner shells metals. (the stronger the core gets the stronger the type of material it would need to be a semi permanent shell around it, however in a pinch the golem could technically form a purely biological shell but it’d be much weaker as it is unable to handle the cores strengthening without literally exploding plus it would eventually get consumed bringing you back you where you started)
Unknown
2024-11-22 01:29:50 +0000 UTCthanks for the suuport and the feedback, I really do apperciate your comments. I won't spoil the story but this next arc has a big focus on him molding into a leader and growing into that role. For how long I'm planning on making this, I don't really have some sort of chapter limit. I have a good idea of what the next arcs are going to be but I'm not going to do things like drag them out or shorten them, I want the story to play out and if it takes 500 chapters then fine, and if it takes liek 2000 chaps then thats alright as well. For the immortality, that will be mentioned later in the story.
Your Mom
2024-11-22 01:13:06 +0000 UTCthanks man. I know that a lot of people really don't like reading Ricky for these traits but I like writing him like this since sometimes when I read stories, I just can't relate to the mc. I like to read about characters who just aren't perfect in every way and have actual flaws but at the same time, you cannot but help but laugh or really get attached to those flaws and I'm glad you feel the same.
Your Mom
2024-11-22 01:09:23 +0000 UTCyeah thanks man, I think want's really important in harem stories like these are to not make a female character just someone who is in a relationship with Ricky. I really do want to show that they are their own person with desire, wants, and needs that don't rely with Ricky but mix with him. And with the children, I do want to have those interactions but I'm trying to make sure it doens't take control of the story. It will mostly be like little snip bits where they intertact.
Your Mom
2024-11-22 01:07:54 +0000 UTCyeah I totally understand as when I was first creating the story, I didn't really pay attention to that side of the story but rather the plot in general. I did notice it earlier within the story but it took me a while to really find out what I wanted for Ricky but I will start putting little snips and summaries to really measure how powerful he is.
Your Mom
2024-11-22 01:05:04 +0000 UTCthank you for the support and for your words. Like you said I want to structure these relationships around Ricky but what I really want is for each one to feel unquie and I hope I show that as the story progresses. And you're right about the next part of the story including this arc since it really signifies how Ricky will define himself not only within the family,, within the mutant community, but to himself and I'll really put that into focus as well.
Your Mom
2024-11-22 01:03:26 +0000 UTCYeah I won't lie, the archtype is my biggest struggle in terms of writing in general cause I really focused on story rather than a set path for his power in the beginging and I only saw it a little while back. I am trying to work it out and what I think would be best for Ricky. I have been actively watching the powers given to him and trying to form the path I want for him but I am still new to this sort of stuff, but I have been acutally putting a lot of thought into what it is I think would be best for him. I do apperciate the insight and will try my best to not make him confusing.
Your Mom
2024-11-22 01:00:13 +0000 UTCThank you so much your support and words, it means a lot that you enjoy my writing and I hope that I continue to meet your expectations.
Your Mom
2024-11-22 00:55:31 +0000 UTCI'll consider that power it does seem like a unique idea that deserves some consideration
Your Mom
2024-11-22 00:54:29 +0000 UTCokay real talk tho what’s the logistics of him getting the ten shadows? it’d be like legendary right? so he could push it through the slop machine right? you can create 10 new beasts (roughly) like the original 10 for Ricky to eventually have to conquer and have as allies. Maho turns into doomsday? (not literally but like he has a adapt by death power basically making him a unstoppable force given enough death) Nue turns into a elderitch thunder pheonix ( idek here ) Snake turns into that one world snake called Ouroboros? Uh the tiger could like. idk. have claws that could cut through concepts?idk i’m just spitballing but like you could do so much with that one ability bru pls
Unknown
2024-11-19 23:51:22 +0000 UTCI want to preface this review by saying this review by saying it's doubtful that it will help to improve your writing. I’m just appreciating you man. Was the character development everything you hoped for? Yes, and more. Ricky started off as someone who frustrated and frankly annoyed me, and what kept me going in the first few chapters was the excellent writing quality that is so rarely found on Webnovel. But then he changed. It wasn’t an immediate process, but gradual, and excellently done. The changes weren’t arbitrary as well, there were reasons for them that were vividly laid out. Grief and defeats, leading to acceptance and growth. I think it was, and is, brilliant. Was there some things you think should've been more addressed in his personality and attitude? Honestly, no. He started out as someone who was so unlikable, that even I who enjoys reading characters of a similar vein, found him distasteful. Yet I think he's grown wonderfully and on track, especially if you’re looking for this story to have several hundred chapters. Or if you think I missed completely and should be implemented? N/A bro. To me all is good :) I also want to ask about some of the side characters that have developed alongside Ricky. Who is your favorite? Honestly, I’m loving Alexander the most. I love history, and usually seeing historical characters in fiction annoys me, since the way they're presented by the author never seems to align with how I’d imagine they would be. But goddam I love your Alexander. The way you apply his 2 1/2 millennia old thinking to the modern world, and make it so bloody funny, but also allowing for him to posses the depth and insightfullness that the GOAT of history would have, is brilliant. Well done mate. Who is your least favorite? I don’t have anyone I particularly dislike, but from Ricky’s main ‘squad’ I’d have to say Barko. Not for anything done poorly, it's just that I don’t feel he’s been as fleshed out as the others, and so I find it harder to connect with him. But personally I don’t feel he’s that significant so this is a non issue really. I could be wrong but, well, c’est la vie. Which Character do you just deserves more time within the spolight? I actually don’t think I have anything for this. I love the direction the story’s going in, and the primary focus on Ricky receives no complaints from me. Maybe a few of his women from early in the story, or maybe Agatha, but I reckon there’ll be more on both those fronts soon, with Ricky going back to NY Which character do you think just needs to back up cause they are always there? Eh, ditto to the last paragraph. Like I said at the beginning, this review probably isn’t gonna help to improve the story, since its pretty much wholly positive. I like who the focus is on now, and unless it gets to the point where its like20% Ricky and then just 80% on others, I don’t think I’ll have any complaints. That about wraps it up. And I know I went on a bit, but man you got some good stuff here. Wait nah I do have a complaint . More, please.
Kiranx5
2024-11-18 18:53:47 +0000 UTCThis is without a doubt the most soundly structured fic I’ve read in years and the foundations for this can lead to a long story with a lot of substance if you allow it to and don’t get distracted. My biggest problem with this story is how random it is. There doesn’t seem to be any set path for Ricky. Maybe the void stuff you’re bringing in is his path you’ve set for him but that’s also very broad. None of his void abilities have any set similarities other than having eery names and a murky aura attached to them. He has no set archetype and seems to be gaining powers and throwing them together randomly. I feel this will become confusing for you and lead to a wackily overpowered character in the future. Overpowered is fine but it just needs to make sense in my opinion. You can’t have a character with every single power a necromancer can have while also having that character being a master of chopsticks or something it’s just very random. But other than that I love the story and I can’t wait to see how it progresses. Also can’t wait to see how you handle the whole business and mafia aspect now that he’s been set up to take a leadership position upon his return.
Blankiooo
2024-11-18 18:04:12 +0000 UTCBueno, no se que mas te puedo decir que gracias por esta maravillosa historia, como te mencione capitulos atras es importante en este punto de la historia enfocarse en las relaciones de ricky y cómo sus decisiones cambiarán para siempre el destino de la familia luciano, pasamos de un protagonista literalmente "ROTO" tanto físico como mental que no valoraba nada ni a nadie porque su vida fue una mierda literal a un padre y esposo que no se rinde antes la misma oscuridad y no agacha la cabeza ante a aquellos problemas o entre encrucijadas del mismo destino que puedan afectar a su estilo de vida y a su familia, eso ya de porsi es un cambio enorme, el desarrollo que le has dado a ricky es de primer nivel, ahora el siguiente paso sería convertir todo ese desarrollo y plasmarlo en sus acciones porque se convertirá en la cabeza de toda la mafia en nueva york, los poderes de ricky están en sus estándares correctos me explico, a pesar de que la historia es un fanfic de marvel combinado con John wick, faltan muchos para explotar esto al máximo nivel, yo lo veo a ricky siendo lo que magneto debió ser para los mutantes y ahora con sus poderes del mismo abismo abisal pues como no hay villano de rango planeta que pueda derrotarlo fácilmente, hasta creo que si el mismo apocalips se enfrentará a ricky tendría muchos problemas para derrotarlo, los smugs están muy bien siempre trata de ser creativo y a la vez romántico con sus esposas y amantes (si es que no llega a casarse con todas) merecen sentirse amadas y únicas para ricky eso forjaría una unión entre todas ellas importante en el futuro, mas no puede decir, solo estoy expectante por el futuro de ricky y de toda su familia, saludos y que sigan los exitos hermano.
NallukTV
2024-11-18 10:33:07 +0000 UTCMaybe the only thing that really bothers me is Ricky's varied abilities, so much information is difficult to retain and visualize with so many varied and unclear abilities, in fact every time the status appears I prefer to ignore it unless I know it's something really important, I think the system's abilities leave me with an unclear path to power, yes, he's very strong, but it's confusing to try to measure his power.
yonsy
2024-11-18 04:20:50 +0000 UTCI think you've handled pretty well how much relevance you give to the secondary characters, at least I haven't felt any problem in that area, as for the subject of Ricky's women, being 1920-30, I really don't remember most of the women would not have a primary role in Ricky's life, and it would add a lot of baggage being Ricky someone who does not hold back every time he finds a beautiful woman, the other type of women are independent and strong women like Agatha, Raven or Rachael, the most normal thing would be for this type of characters to come and go as they want, even if Ricky wanted to it wouldn't be easy to keep them by his side constantly, what I like most about chapters r-18 is how each woman feels unique and special, how they react and behave with clear differences adding freshness, finally adding my personal opinion I feel that I could become very interested in Ricky's interactions with childless, potentially quite funny, especially with peculiar characters like Constantine who constantly leaves people speechless.
yonsy
2024-11-18 04:18:11 +0000 UTCthe most satisfying part of Ricky's character from my point of view is the fact that he's a character that I can feel contempt, sympathy and envy for, feeling all that in a character makes you appreciate the changes that Ricky is going through, Ricky's despicable attitude and lack of consideration for others, I've met many people of this type, in fact I've met an old man who engenders most of Ricky's qualities, even the part of not even knowing how many unacknowledged children he has, my god, that man stole a new car from his own brother for about 5 years hahahahaha.
yonsy
2024-11-18 04:11:18 +0000 UTCAt least from my point of view the character development was great, Ricky shows the experience of someone who has lived on the streets, in bars and clubs for a long time, the self-destructive attitude, the impulsive decisions and the lack of consideration of Ricky for his talents and his contempt for himself, to be honest there are not a few men who lead this type of cancerous life.
yonsy
2024-11-18 04:07:04 +0000 UTCholy yap nevermind about coming back later lol. i didn’t expect to type this much
Unknown
2024-11-18 03:55:01 +0000 UTCi’m probably gonna come back to give a better response after i read the previous two chapters but i just want to say real quick that this story and its progression so far has been perfect. there was a lot of smut at the beginning and i kinda got bored of it but as things got serious the smut toned down with the story which came at literally the perfect time and now that shits getting back to how it should be and we have a much more competent ricky the smuts gonna come back a bunch (i can already see it now). but all in all Rickys progression from that irredeemable little bug to a redeemable much bigger bug was amazing to see. i know that he still has a ways to go before he’s truly a better man but i honestly believe as a character him as he is now has already grown on me to good point. his headstrong and confident personality that can somehow cut through the thickest of skins is amazing to read. the power creep is definitely creeping cuz as he is now (and probably for the next arc or two) he definitely shouldn’t find himself with any trouble in the fighting department but i have a sneaking suspicion we’re about to move a bit away from fighting at least in the physical sense. (the stand might be foreshadowing?!?!?) though i’m still gonna love to read when he has to show the people around him how much he’s grown over the past 3 years. speaking of years… how long are you planning on making this? the way this is progressing it’s looking like it’s gonna be one of those 500-1000 chapter fics and if you do i might have to marry you. no homo. but like. i would love for this to be one of those really long fics. ricky already passed immortality right? so it shouldn’t be a problem for him to live a couple hundred years for our entertainment right?
Unknown
2024-11-18 03:54:26 +0000 UTC
