Dragon knight question, Important

I will wait to see what the poll on royal road does, but I suspect this is all a failed experiment.

like a said, the story doesnt feel like sex is repetitive and boring. Because you write a story that focus on emotions (love), the sex scene we had felt good and nice. I dont mind more of it and if you did them right like the one before, i thin the majority will enjoy it. btw i have a big trust in what you will decide, because this story is a proof that youre a good author

Sam4005

I can post a 10k chapter that builds on what you read but I doub't it would change your mind.

and maybe this whole thing is a good exercise in polarity. Some of my readers want the sexier stuff and some of htem don't I thin the only safe route is to continue as I am and not tamper.

just fast-read DKP NC-1 Lilly's Secret Need, i dont like it at all, lily felt a little like a slut, idk its doesnt feel right. For me, in a relation you need to talk, lily felt little too no hesitation too. I felt bad reading it.

Sam4005

i know its fucking long to read, sorry lol

Sam4005

When I started reading story and novel, I wanted sex in my story like a teen discovering the possibilities of internet. Now that I have read so much stuff I skip or fast read most of sex. There is a limit of what you can say in a sex scene. 99% of sex scene in story does not matter or do not advance anything, and the good scene matter because they conclude an emotional moment. I’ve stop reading story that add too much sex because sex is so repetitive to read it become terribly boring and they are too much in a story. Maybe its me, because I know people love sex chapter, but I find it boring most of the time. Still, I like a good sex scene when it is at the right place and not too long. I mean sex is simple, it meant to be felt. What got me into Dragon Knight Prophecy is the emotions and the challenge they endure. I do not care for sex at all, even if it can enhance the story. So, my opinion for your story (my vote) is a mix of option. You are good at making us feels emotion for the characters so you can add more sex, I know you will make it feel right, but pls don’t focus too much on it because the story just become a "porn story", and DKP just become another boring story that just sex. The people that read DKP, anyway me personally, are there for the journeys. Sex can add a nice thing to this journey, but it cannot become the journeys itself. For the direction of the sex my opinion differs from the 2 option you gave. Most people dislike NTR (I’ve answer what it is before), including me. Lot of readers wont like lily going wild with other people than the main characters. Some people will love it but ill probably stop reading if like you said, wrote thousand of words of lily going wild with sex per chapter with other people. I am not even sure I will read the sex parts all the time if its with Gersius. But, in terms of story and characters development, it makes sense for lily to want to discover and understand what she feels. But pls keep it a "small", I don’t know, maybe she can try with one priestess or other characters 2-3 times and discovers that’s not like with Gersius or Thayle. I dint read the DKP NC-1 Lilly's Secret Need chapter but if like you said in your video its all chapters I couldn’t stand it. I’m here for the emotion between the main characters and trying with other people some time in her journeys to discovery can spice the journeys and make the "beauty/purity" of the relation even stronger, but otherwise ill prefer spending my time reading other things. Its like the harem parts of yours story, its good because you put the times and the characters love each other and you can make us feel it. The principal reason for it is the soul link parts. But lily going to have sex with other more time than just to discovers does not make sense at all, I think. If I could be soul linked like they are with someone, I would never want to be with someone else, its too magical and even I am jealous of something like this. Anyways its my opinion, you do what you feel right for your story. Because if you do not like it anymore, we wont too. A story whose author lost the passion is felt by its readers.

Sam4005

I am going to release a non edited chapter of this for people to read here. It will be FILLED with errors but I want people to get the basis of it.

Well, she is screwing someone else because Gersius doesn't fuck her how she likes and she is married. And both Thayle and Gersius seem possessive. And they haven't talked in any way about sharing other than maybe adding another wife in the future (mostly Thayle). Referring to NC1 story.

WhiteRabbit

Hmm, that isn't what I am shooting for.

from urban dictionary. its explain NTR simply : Japanese acronym for Netorare, used to define a genre of Eroge (Hentai Game), meaning "Cuckold". In short, the main protagonist's loved one(s) are taken or seduced away from him and the heroine might be willing or unwilling. This is to cause an emotion of deep jealousy on the reader.

Sam4005

Netorare, basically cuckolding. Generally involves both cheating and, in many cases degrading the original partner being cheated on.

WhiteRabbit

Hard to say, that kind of thing is risky. I know several people that read "harem genre" type stories do not like any type of cheating etc. At this point I would think that Lilly would generally realize that humans at least would view sex outside of the established relationship poorly? It really depends on how it resolves. For example, Herald of Shalia 4 has a betrayal arc that pissed off some people. I personally thought it made sense with the character generally, and was heavily foreshadowed enough that it wasn't that big a deal. Readers disagreed heavily on discussions about the book.

WhiteRabbit

Also what is NTR? I am not familar with that term.

I have to admit I am VERY nervous about tampering with the story like this. I kept putting that up and then chickening out and pulling it. Where the story goes is a compromise between the characters. Lilly actually turns out to make a huge positive change and the other two recognize that she needs to be allowed to grow. Gersius isn't happy about it at first, but Thayle helps him see the wisdom in it and keeps his mind busy. Lilly's story actually has a strong developing fiendship, an exploration of what love really is, and Lilly coming to understand what men and women want from each other. All things she has no idea of as a dragon.

I tried to post a response earlier to the post, but you kept pulling it so I figured I would wait to comment. I would be fine with 2 or 3, although I am unsure about where the arc in 3 is going. The snippet you posted was pretty hot, but I am unsure how well it works with Thayle and Gersius being pretty possessive. Sounds kind of NTRish? Given how inspired you felt while writing it, I really want to read it now. Doesn't necessarily mean that it makes sense in terms of the current narrative though. Hard to say without seeing it. Going from a fluffy romance heavy script to Lilly on her knees to relieve the stress of the recruits is probably a bridge too far lol. Especially over a short period.

WhiteRabbit