093 - Jane
Added 2020-07-04 22:06:26 +0000 UTCWith her damp hair wrapped in a towel and anoth
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All fixed! Thanks!
Arcs
2020-07-06 16:16:32 +0000 UTC'could have a more than one' -> 'could have more than one'
Corwin Amber
2020-07-06 08:43:36 +0000 UTC'back the owl’s nest' -> 'back of the owl’s nest'
Corwin Amber
2020-07-06 08:40:17 +0000 UTC'tried combing them' combing -> combining
Corwin Amber
2020-07-06 08:05:09 +0000 UTC'understand her what she' -> 'understand what she'
Corwin Amber
2020-07-06 07:58:07 +0000 UTC' all you ideas' you -> your
Corwin Amber
2020-07-06 07:53:09 +0000 UTCTo be honest I think it's clear that a lot more of her problem comes from being so diametrically opposed to her father in her instincte and wary of his disapproval. We even see that in this update when she's thinking about some dominating class and worries it would make her a tyrant.
Drake_Azathoth
2020-07-05 14:26:48 +0000 UTCI love the Jane chapters! I feel sorry for her that she struggles with creation of her own spells/health skills. I feels like she's just too grounded in reality to make that leap. I'm pretty excited to read about how she might combine the various bodies into a prismatic skill. I wonder if other hidden body skills exist?
Monomatopoeia
2020-07-05 09:33:45 +0000 UTCI can kind of understand not wanting to introduce guns. The only thing that would make them deadly is being able to fire lead. If the bullets were copper or something magically inclined then personal wards would work, but lead ignores all of that. On the other hand lead bullets could be shade killers. It would be a trade-off.
Chris
2020-07-05 08:48:39 +0000 UTCDragon Body, formed from dragon essence. ... I could add that in there to make it a bit clearer
Arcs
2020-07-05 00:28:09 +0000 UTCWhich is the “body she would never touch again”? Is that the unicorn? Because of dragon essence?
Swordofmytriumph
2020-07-05 00:26:32 +0000 UTCNice to see Jane making purr-gress toward finding her special class! Eric is clearly in his best class.
Conrad Wong
2020-07-05 00:09:09 +0000 UTCSeems odd she wouldn't consult her father about prismatic stuff considering how well his prismatic spell went.
Findell
2020-07-05 00:00:05 +0000 UTCShe's not just handing it out like Erick did, though, to anyone who asked. And the Headmaster *is* one of the good guys. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
Arcs
2020-07-04 23:58:59 +0000 UTCAfter seeing the trouble her dad caused by spreading information, and given that she's the more pragmatic of the two, I think it's weird that she'd transcribe all of Earth's magic lore for a dragon who runs a magic school.
Gardor
2020-07-04 23:47:43 +0000 UTCfixed! you are correct. whoops!
Arcs
2020-07-04 23:22:29 +0000 UTCI think that when you wrote 'impassionately' here "Oteril gazed back, impassionately. The massive sword at the angel’s back had never moved." That you meant to use the word 'dispassionately'. Impassioned is a bit like inflammable; while it might seem like a negative, it is not. Really great to have another look into Jane's life on Veird!
Niraada
2020-07-04 23:20:41 +0000 UTC
