How often would you like to see Maiya POV chapters? Note that Vir is the protagonist and he will always be the primary focus.
That won't change, but as for how often Maiya shows up, I'm open to shifting that slightly based on your feedback.
Please drop a comment if you have thoughts or suggestions!
NOTE: For those of you who choose not to read this chapter, please at least check out the map at the end. It's my finest city map to date, and has a LOT of detail if you zoom in. This is a Maiya pov chapter. We'll be back to Vir next chapter.
The capital city of the Kin’jal Empire defied Maiya’s expectations. She thought Sonam would be a majestic place, filled with beautiful archi...
2023-03-01 17:36:22 +0000 UTC View Post
“How much?” Vir asked, eyeing a rudimentary map of the city inked on parchment. He was back at the same paunchy merchant whom he’d sold his daggers to, but this time, he looked to buy.
“For you? I will sell it cheap. Five silvers.”
“You want five silvers for this cheap thing!?” Vir couldn’t possibly afford that. Maybe if he sold Mina’s elaborate outfit...
2023-02-28 17:54:34 +0000 UTC View Post
“Friend, I am happy to talk, but I run a business. Are you here to chat, or to buy? Time is money, as they say.”
Did Riyan send me here knowing the princess would be arriving soon? Knowing the man, it was a distinct possibility.
As much as Vir wanted all the details regarding the princess’ procession, he was here to sell an orb, after all. The bu...
2023-02-27 17:51:24 +0000 UTC View Post
As much as Vir wanted to head straight to the Mercenaries’ Brotherhood building, traffic had other plans. He thought Saran was crowded. Saran wasn’t crowded—it was quaint.
Daha was downright packed, making it nearly impossible to move anywhere atop Bumpy.
“Whoa there, boy,” Vir said as Bumpy shivered. “I know it’s scary, but I need you to be brave for me, ...
2023-02-26 17:33:11 +0000 UTC View PostLink to the map of the Known World below. The Full map (which this isn't) took me ~100 hrs to make. The city maps avg ~20 hrs. Every major city will have a city map :-)
https://www.patreon.com/posts/78269388
“Of course I know of them!” Vir retorted. Who hadn’t heard of the flying palaces o...
2023-02-25 17:27:30 +0000 UTC View PostNOTE: I'm reducing the amt Vir gains from his Saran trip to 1 silver & 40 coppers. Now, he leaves behind 40 coppers for Maiya, taking the silver. I'm also changing it such that the Life orb Tanya leaves behind in the Godshollow is cracked, and thus is worthless. I felt this would create a more satisfying rags->riches progression vs having him start out loaded. Apologies for the confusion, & drop a comment if you have strong thoughts about this!
The night passed without Vir having gained much sleep. He lay awake, wondering about Maiya, her beaded bracelet clutched in his hand. His upcoming birthday present, most likely. It was simple, yet beautiful. Typical Maiya. To think she’d put all this effort into crafting this for him—it was special in a way that only Maiya could be.
Which was why he couldn’t possibly fathom why ...
2023-02-23 17:43:32 +0000 UTC View Post
“I’m sorry, I don’t think I heard properly. You want me to assassinate… a princess?” Vir asked as he clutched the chair’s armrests. His knuckles had turned white.
“I will not lie to you, Vir. This will not be a simple task. It will require everything you have learned, and then some.”
There was only one thought running through Vir’s mind: I...
2023-02-22 17:33:49 +0000 UTC View Post
“Pack your things,” Tanya commanded, addressing Maiya, who stood in her bedroom. “We travel for Sonam, the capital city of the Kin’jal Empire.”
“What?” Maiya asked, incredulous. “Now!?”
“Yes, now. I have already seen to our supplies. Come now, quickly pack your things and let us be off.”
Maiya’s breath caught. She rapidly sorted through the...
2023-02-21 17:53:08 +0000 UTC View PostWelcome to the penultimate chapter of arc 2! Note: Maiya's lines/thoughts have been updated to be less whiney in the prev chapter :-)
The moment had finally arrived. The first and final full power duel that Vir and Maiya would ever have. Their first official duel, at least. The moment Maiya had gained a sliver of proficiency in magic, she’d challenged Vir to a fight. And sh...
2023-02-20 17:22:30 +0000 UTC View PostNOTE: My patreon url has been updated to https://patreon.com/vowronprime. If you've got the fic bookmarked, please be sure to update!
The days turned to weeks, which soon blurred together as a month passed, then two. Six months had now passed since Rudvik had died in the Godshollow.
To Vir, it felt just lik...
2023-02-19 17:59:43 +0000 UTC View Post
Hours later, the rain still hadn’t abated. Maiya lay in Vir’s arms the whole time, face pale and eyes unfocused. They’d both shed every tear they had long ago, leaving them dried up and empty on the inside.
“I think…” Maiya said, breaking the long silence. She spoke with a cold, hard voice that shocked Vir. “I think I finally get what you said before. About no...
2023-02-18 17:31:40 +0000 UTC View PostDouble chapter release today to celebrate #1 on RS and 3k follows!
Got a few edit announcements before we begin. Apologies in advance for the length!
#1: This is the largest retroactive change I've made. In ch 1 after Vir's run in with the cultist, his tattoo pulses with power and he gains voices in his head. Far louder than the one's he's always had. Over the course of arc 1, he experiments with this & learns it's related to magic & is trying to tell him something about...
2023-02-18 17:30:30 +0000 UTC View PostHi everyone,
I'm changing my patreon url from the current randomly generated one to: patreon.com/vowronprime (easier to remember & find)
I don't think the old url redirects to the new one, so I wanted to make this announcement to give everyone advance notice to update your bookmarks, etc.
I'll make the change tomorrow. Thanks!
EDIT:
Also note that I've switched patreon billing from '1st of the month' to 'monthly on the date you subscribe'. This avoids any do...
“Vir? Have you seen my hair tie?” Maiya said, furiously searching every nook and cranny in the bedroom. I think I left it somewh—Challing Ash! Vir!”
Maiya jumped, bonking Vir on his head. “Don’t scare me like that!”
Blond-haired, blue-eyed Vir looked the spitting image of a nobleman’s son. His hair fell all the way to his shoulders,...
2023-02-17 17:20:45 +0000 UTC View Post
NOTE: Some dialogue's been added to the prev chapter where Vir & Maiya discuss the ramifications of the hunters who'd been after Vir. This happens before her training scene, when they're at their spot under the tree, near the beginning of the chapter.
“If you want me at my best, we need to fight outside,” Vir said, staring down Riyan in the training dome.
The moment of t...
2023-02-16 17:35:26 +0000 UTC View Post
“She possesses not a shred of talent!” Tanya’s frustrated voice came muffled through the kitchen door, but was clear enough for Vir’s ears.
“Don’t all mejai take months to sense prana?” Riyan replied calmly. “Give her more time.”
“Easy for you to say, training a prodigy like Vir. Even so, her progress is slower than most mejai.”
Prodigy. Now ...
2023-02-15 17:14:30 +0000 UTC View PostHey all,
I've done a few more edits to clean up the Saran trip. Been getting consistent feedback that this is a weak spot of the story so far. In this edit, I've shortened the chapters where Vir & Maiya meet the urchins and interact with Bakura. Vir no longer gives money to Barid to steal food for him - Vir and Maiya just do it themselves (they did this anyway in ch 36, so that shortened 35 a bit.)
Also, Vir now comes up with the idea to steal Bumpy disguised as stablehands ri...
2023-02-15 00:11:46 +0000 UTC View PostNOTE: Shorter chapter today, since I edited some stuff out of this one into a subsequent chapter. So that one will be extra long :-P
Vir took a seat on the rocky ground of the cave. Close enough to the entrance that some light trickled through, but not enough that it affected his Prana Vision. Dark places had better prana contrast.
He sent blood to his eyes, activating ...
2023-02-14 17:18:32 +0000 UTC View Post
Vir opened his eyes to soaring trees and a lush meadow bisected by a babbling brook. The sounds of trickling water and the chirping of birds painted an idyllic picture, but the deception didn’t fool him. The Godshollow was dangerous for all humans at all hours.
He gingerly sat up to find his arms and legs covered in well-dressed bandages. His wounds were mostly gone, alle...
2023-02-13 17:47:45 +0000 UTC View PostWhat are your thoughts on romance? Note: I can't promise I'll make changes based on the results of this poll, but if there's a clear trend, I may consider doing so. I understand this can be a divisive topic.
2023-02-12 17:47:21 +0000 UTC View Post
“Who’re you? Hiranyan knights?” Vir asked. If he wanted to survive this, he needed to come up with a plan, fast. And right now, he had nothing. He had to stall them.
“Knights, eh? What would you do if I said I was?” The poleax wielder said, scratching an itch under his brigandine. Both soldiers wore full brigs that covered their chest, arms, and thighs. T...
2023-02-12 17:30:22 +0000 UTC View Post
Vir threw himself into a roll, barely avoiding the massive spider’s bladed limb as it impaled the dirt. Green liquid oozed out, sizzling. The putrid stench made Vir gag.
Poison!? Not just a limb then. A stinger.
Vir Leaped to gain some distance, but the spider pursued relentlessly, clacking and screaming, enraged over having missed its prey.
...
2023-02-11 17:13:48 +0000 UTC View PostHey everyone! Hope you've been enjoying the story thus far. As my patrons, your feedback means a great deal to me, and while this is a planned series, I'm always open to shifting things a bit if it makes you all happier :-)
On that note, I wanted to get your feedback on what your favorite elements of the story have been, and what you'd like to see more of in the future/more emphasis on.
Some elements that come to mind: progression(magic, physical combat, or just insights in...
2023-02-10 18:57:59 +0000 UTC View Post
Rudvik stepped forward. “I will not allow it.”
The knight appraised Rudvik with a bemused expression. “You!? Don’t embarrass yourself, lumberjack. What combat training have you had? Have you ever taken the life of another man? Will you behead me with that ungainly tree ax of yours?”
“Ye damn well know I’ll do whate’er it takes!” his father shouted.
... 2023-02-10 17:41:29 +0000 UTC View PostNOTE: Sorry for the random release times. I'm trying to release on patreon at the same time I do on RR, and that's been random to pull in crowds from across the globe. We'll settle on a fixed release time after this first month.
Inhale, exhale. Inhale, exhale. That was what Maiya’s life had become these days—a monotonous series of breathing exercises that had yi...
Vir dove to avoid the enormous log about to smash into him, but it was just too little too late. He found his footing and immediately jumped into the air, and sailed high above the ram, effortlessly bypassing the obstacle, albeit probably not in the way Riyan had planned.
He landed on the other side, his knee shuddering from the impact of falling ten paces down.
H...
2023-02-08 21:16:16 +0000 UTC View Post
The key lay in the concept of prana equilibrium. Prana wanted to stay at the same density everywhere. That was why his body leaked prana—because his body had a surplus and his surroundings were empty, or nearly empty.
So then, what would happen if he created a pocket completely empty of prana, within his own body? It stood to reason that whatever meager amount of ‘black...
2023-02-07 18:22:56 +0000 UTC View PostHi everyone,
Just wanted to appraise you of some edits re: Vir and Maiya's behavior during the saran trip(chaps 33-36). Here's a summary of the changes (Be warned of spoilers if you haven't read through these chapters yet)
1. Vir and Maiya are both now far less forgiving of the urchins, especially initially, once they discover the urchins had a hand in setting them up. Maiya punches Alda in the gut when she finds out, causing the urchin to double over.
She then steals back ...
2023-02-07 01:47:25 +0000 UTC View Post