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Sam Good Morning by Reno Coffee

Chapter 113 Update

I went ahead and redid a lot of this chapter, but not all of it. Mostly the Duke's dialogue. Added some foreshadowing, removed all references to the 2 month time limit.

One day when I'm actually doing deep edits, the rest of this chapter will be touched up I'm sure but for now I'm just focused on getting all the fixes out of the way as fast as possible.

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“Okay, now that sounds alright, fo’ sure, fo’ sure. A pimp can fully admit.” Says the pimp who has the unenviable...

Chapter 80 Rewrite

What changed: a lot. 

Old ver 

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We had a short break before the second half of the team meeting. Tensions were high, so Opalina took the time to make everyone some of her favorite herbal tea, which we all welcomed gratefully. The taste was superb, the smell sobering.

Once I had taken my last sip and cleared my throat, I ret...

Update

Chapter 80 rewrite will go live tonight, sorry for delay. This one took longer for whatever reason.

Also for $5 patrons there’s a new Bonus chapter coming up, it’s currently 1500 words and will have Sam and Meri doing a very unique threesome with the GM! I expect the final word to be at 3000 - 4000

Chapter 79 Rewrite

I don't feel like writing a huge changelog for this one, but as to what changed, a lot? It all follows the same structure, but everything is rewritten and rephrased. Lot of the jokes have been altered to work better, added some new ones, added more foreshadowing to Opal's dialogue, those are the main ones.

Went from a 3,000 word chapter to 3 chapters totalling 5,100 words.

2021-06-12 08:01:33 +0000 UTC View Post

79 Rewrite coming soon, update blog

I'm progressing smoothly with the rewrites. Just taking a while so I apologize for getting it all done back to back like this. 79 was originally 3,000 words and right now I'm at 3,500 and there will still probably be another 2,000 to go. Might be done tonight, we'll see. I want to be done, but there's still so much work to be done. I need to rewrite 80 and 81 after this and then I'll finally be done.

I'll still have to do minor edits to other chapters to fix the canon things, but I'll n...

Revamp? Refresh? Edit? Chapter 91 - Mew Shall Not Pass

I wanted to get something smaller done after finishing the Fleetfoot chapters. This went a little deeper than I meant it to, but basically I was editing out a mention of the 2 months time limit and fixing canon, but ended up fixing all the grammer, making it sound better and adding about 700 new words.

I read the conflict of the chapter over again and thought it was weird how GM basically just shrugged off omitting the dispute. Since he's not always supposed to be the 'good' guy, I made...

Chapter 77 Fleetfoot Rewrite

Didn't get this done last night because of how long it is. One 2200 word chapter is now 3 chapters at 5700 words. As I mentioned, this one changes... well, pretty much the entire thing. I shall now break down why.

-At the time, I kept on raising the stakes for no damn reason. While Fleetfoot was in my plans for a while, their introduction was really at odds with the plans I had for the character. A few people mentioned it was very lazy of me to introduce a super powerful character that ...

Schedule Update

Going to pause new chapters for a few days so I can finish rewriting the Fleetfoot encounter and the team meeting chapters. With those done, I will have fully finished fixing the only part of the story that bugs me to that extent.

It should only take me 2-3 more days, but for my own mental sake I just want to get it done with here and now. It's bugging me way too much knowing I'm getting tons of new readers every day and there's just this massive black spot that I keep having to tell th...

Chapter 210 - Spoiled Rotten

The rest of the flight to Dawnstead went by fast. I still don’t like flying, but after participating in an all-out air battle, it’s safe to say I’ve experienced the worst of it. Conversation dries up. Both of us want to focus on our thoughts until we can properly sit down, so we don’t put much pressure on filling the silence beyond a scarce comment here or there.

After another ten minutes of soaring over the many forests, farmlands, and hamlets of Arrark, I see the capital city ...

Chapter 209 - The Oldest Game

This one took a little bit of extra time since it wasn't in the outline, therefore I didn't plan out what sort of spells would be used and I had to carefully consider how much of the extent of Opal's strength would be shown. 

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Opalina stares down the enemy, her wand ready for action at a moment’s notice. “Do you know what they call a duel between Mages, Dear?”

“I don’t think this is the time for-”

“If you go back far enough, it used to be known as...

Give Me Your Lewd Bonus Chapter Suggestions

I'm looking to do more bonus chapters in the future because I should really beef up the Patreon's amount of exclusive content, and I thought I'd publicly let you guys suggest things. Keep in mind that in no way means I'm going to do any these and I'm looking for prompts that interests me, and I won't do anything that doesn't fit the characters.

Even if you aren't at the tier where you can read bonus chapters, I'll let you read it for free if I choose your idea!

Characters are limi...

Bonus Chapter #3 - Peri's Punishment

(Future Kom here. Releasing this bonus chapter to make up for all the lack of actual new chapters. Enjoy.)

I needed a break from working on Ch 209 (mostly done) so I started a little something and ended up with this. I actually mentioned I had an idea for a Peri bonus chapter a long, long time ago but also said I couldn't do it until she had her first time in the story. That's happened, and so I finally got to tell this cute and comedic little bonus.

I need to do more bonus chapt...

Chapter 208 - Broom Battle in the Clouds

The first volley of magic missiles miss us by a long shot thanks to my evasive swerving, but already the henchmages are preparing a follow-up attack. Opal, her long and curly brunette hair flowing majestically in the wind, doesn’t seem all that impressed. “How dull...” She says, turning up her chin. “You don’t mind if I have a little fun, Dear, do you?”

“Opal, I would VERY much like to finish this up as fast as-”

“Of course you don’t,” The stacked witch smirk...

New Chapter 76 Rewrite

Because ch 207 was already mostly done, I wanted to move forward with getting more of the necessary rewrites done. This one was so easy I could knock it out in under a day.

What changed? Contradictingly, a lot and very little. Almost the entire chapter is 'the same' in terms of what happens, but the tone is drastically different to match the new version of GM's meeting with Luxy. It's still emotional, but rather than full on depressive I think it gives a really deep look into GM's psych...

Chapter 207 - Don't You Dare Close Your Eyes

To those of you who read the outline, surprise. Sometimes stuff changes from the outline because I have a much better idea lol.

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I follow after the Doctor as she leads me further away from the building, presumably so that we have plenty of room for take-off. “Just to be clear, you haven’t ever ridden a broom while I wasn’t looking, have you, Dear?” She asks with great concern.

“No, never. I’m sure I’ll be fine, though..” How hard could sitting on a broom f...

Luxy Rewrites Part 3

This is the last part of the conversation with Luxy to be rewritten. It's basically a redo of this chapter, only now it's twice as long and will be split in two.

This is a lot less drastic of a re-write than the first two parts, just improving it all over the place and still saying relatively the same information albeit much more detailed and with more personality bet...

Chapter 206 - Don't Have Too Much Fun

Before I forget, I tell Opal to wait in the other room for me as I grab a little something for Meri. On top of one of my office’s multiple bookshelves lies a small wooden chest out of view to anyone who doesn’t know to look for it. Inside lies the three choose your own adventure magic novels, which I told my beloved Shield Maiden all about. They’re pretty valuable, so I keep them out of sight. Each tome would take months to finish every possible route and outcome. For the time being, I ...

Chapter 205 - Opening Pandora's Box? Jar?

Now that she’s ready to unload whatever mental baggage is weighing on her conscience, I step toward Nikita and sit leaning against the arm of the sofa on the opposite side of her. While giving her my best and most reassuring smile, I do what I can to make the Grekkan feel comfortable. “Just get whatever you have to off of your chest, Nikita. Everyone in the Guild knows you’ve been acting cagey ever since we had that meeting where I talked about my intention to one day defeat the current...

195 Update

When I was about to upload this chapter to Scribblehub yesterday, I noticed I only had it at around 1400 words. I must've rushed it out back when writing it, and I felt the need to polish it up significantly. Give it a re-read, I improved a lot of the text and added another 600 so words on top of just making it sound better. I wanted the capstone to the sexy times to be as cute and sweet as can be, so I made sure to make it real special.

Chapter 204 - One Feisty Doctor

Now alone in my office with only Opal and Nikita for company, I find that the witch holds nothing back. “You smell like you’ve been having sex all morning,” Opal asserts her dominance by strutting ahead of me and sitting on my desk. She adjusts her glasses and crosses her long legs, an amused smile on her face.

“That’s because I’ve been having sex all morning,” I confirm cheekily and approach the desk, Nikita making herself at home on the sofa behind me. “I wanted to mak...

Dawnstead Arc Outline (HUGE SPOILERS)

I changed my mind and am letting all patrons read it, but if you read it you DAMN well better leave me feedback lol. I'll get back to work on actual writing tomorrow.