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Scene Rewrites!!

This is something I swore I would never do when starting out (I have a firm belief that if you spend to much time redoing old stuff, you'll never get time to make new stuff) but since Chapter 10 is probably gonna be a lot of peoples' first time playing through ALL of Evoria, I rewrote some older scenes to better fit current characterizations/my writing style now! Here's a rundown of what changed:

Renee-Naomi Post Slime Scenes

Made Renee less dramatic about the idea of being eaten. Originally, this was supposed to be a setup for Naomi's stomach being super powerful, but I found more organic ways to mention that later in the game. Also put a little more emphasis on the "Naomi rescued Renee just because she likes her" aspect of it!

Thieves' Guild Intro

Changed Sasha from the group's silvertongue to just the leader. Fun fact, Sasha was actually meant to take part in a boss battle with Dexter at the end of Chapter 2, but that ended up being cut. She still has equipment and special skills on the status menu, though!

Naomi-Renee Conflict: Chapter 2 End

Made the scene as a whole less melodramatic. Also gave Renee a little more reason to want to steal from the town center- so that they can have money to keep moving while on the run from the Modernites. Naomi is now less upset about the "stealing" aspect, and is more upset that Renee is willing to leave behind all the people still in Easthaven.

Chapter 3 Ending Crow's Nest Scene

The scene is now focused on Renee and Naomi becoming a true hero "belly sister" duo rather than having a fixation on "finding stability." (I still don't quite remember what that was supposed to be about haha)

Chapter 4 Inn Renee Morning Scene

Renee no longer immediately discounts Naomi talking about Eve, and instead is just like "Let's focus on the task at hand for now."

Naomi Friendship Post-Lilith Belly

Lilith is friendly to Naomi, but still stays a little closed-off to better fit her continued characterization. Naomi is also a little less focused on "What it means to be an adult" (Once again, I have no idea what three-years-ago FP was thinking)

Naomi Blank Digestion Chapter 6

Back when I was writing this scene, I let the vore brain take over and had Naomi fantasize about gaining weight to wear a bikini. That's pretty out of character, so those lines have been removed. Naomi likes eating a lot (and the idea of eating people) because she likes feeling full and she kinda likes being big and squishy, she's not really as sexual with it.

There's a few other scenes with rewrites, but those are mainly smaller tweaks, like slightly changed-up wordings and things. Hopefully all these changes make the game a lot more smooth and enjoyable as a whole!!

-F.P.

Scene Rewrites!! Scene Rewrites!!

Comments

Am honestly a little indifferent to the changes to make the dialogue better match the personalities of the current characters. On one hand, makes the characters better characterized as they do what their personalities suggest. On the other hand, I like those imperfections. Both to show how the writing has improved over the story. Another reason is can also show character development. How a character changes over the course of the story.

Gold

smaller rewrites for more character consistency could never be something I dislike.

Hojo05


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