The Rip: Chapter 3
Added 2021-11-19 03:48:36 +0000 UTCCommissioned by Areat
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Jesus it's like watching someone check off Maslow's hierarchy of needs in real time
Kayla Hackseed
2021-12-02 03:59:13 +0000 UTCGah! Finally finished it! Sorry, that took me a while. But it was worth it. Long chapters means plenty of time to develop scenes, and I enjoyed it a lot. The embarrassing levels of sweetness from her parents is probably what I like the most. It's an accumulation of little gestures that really show the love between these three. ❤️
Pelo Dee
2021-11-28 22:34:40 +0000 UTCFeels to me like the universes are blending :P
2021-11-20 19:17:34 +0000 UTCGreat trip through time to happier days
2021-11-20 02:29:27 +0000 UTCAgreed that you do the ominous foreshadowing so well. This is fast becoming one of my favorites, and I'm excited to see where it goes!
2021-11-19 22:30:11 +0000 UTCI do love this story!
2021-11-19 21:25:44 +0000 UTC"Super easy, barely an inconvenience": someone is a "Pitch Meeting" fan. :-) Also: Peter and Wendy! And I LOVE this line: "If Wendy melted any more on the inside, a diaper would have absorbed her. " Proofreading notes: you used "taught" instead of "taut" (twice), "Diddy" instead of "ditty," and "hosted" instead of "hoisted," "break" instead of "brake," "layed" instead of "lay," "unphased" instead of "unfazed," "laid" instead of "lain," "tiled" instead of "tilted"
2021-11-19 19:44:21 +0000 UTCI love the little hints of the future to come. Can’t wait to see where it goes
2021-11-19 19:31:51 +0000 UTCWhat an awesome part, can not wait for the next part
2021-11-19 19:16:29 +0000 UTCSteadily well written! I can't wait for the next part. :]
Areat
2021-11-19 04:36:13 +0000 UTC
