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Added 2023-05-19 23:56:23 +0000 UTCMade it! Thanks for waiting, everyone. This may not look like a very technical page that I failed to release on time, (though I did seriously struggle to get Parker's hug/tackle looking even remotely right.) but it really was the dialog that got me stuck and cost me time. It seemed like no matter how I wrote it, it came off to me that Halver was bullying Lydia here, which was not my intent at all. I wanted him to be more like he's simply frustrated to see someone dear to him keep making themself miserable, and has been bottling up his emotions on the matter until now.
Let me know if it came across as intended if you would! In the meantime I hope you've liked this scene, just a couple pages now until the end of the whole chapter!
Comments
Well he does have a halo! XD
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:16:32 +0000 UTCGood to know, thank you!
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:16:18 +0000 UTCNoted! :)
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:16:01 +0000 UTCThank you!
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:15:51 +0000 UTCGreat! :D
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:15:46 +0000 UTCXD
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:15:26 +0000 UTCGlad to hear because there's more hugs on the way! XD
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:15:22 +0000 UTCGreat! That was the hope here.
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:15:04 +0000 UTCNice! XD
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:14:43 +0000 UTCAnd she didn't even realize she was doing it! XD
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:14:34 +0000 UTCOh I do, for sure, but I have to get the bones of the dialog laid out first and that was what I really struggled with here.
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:14:13 +0000 UTCThanks! That was the aim! :)
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:13:19 +0000 UTCGlad you think so!
Reinbach
2023-05-22 23:13:03 +0000 UTCHe needs his crown :)
NKL
2023-05-22 17:55:36 +0000 UTCCame across perfectly.
eF..cz
2023-05-22 11:02:37 +0000 UTCParker is one of the hottest girls because of her personality.
nick
2023-05-20 13:54:59 +0000 UTCDude, you NAILED Halver’s message. Concerned, frustrated friend vibes all the way. And that little trailing tear in Parker’s eye? *Chef’s kiss*
Mark Hunter
2023-05-20 13:03:26 +0000 UTCMan im loving this both crawlers and more lydia content Hopefully we'll melt through her icy exterior
Chaddicus thundercock
2023-05-20 08:40:41 +0000 UTCLydia needs to get her head out of her ass.
Jariah Synn
2023-05-20 05:18:12 +0000 UTCI felt like it came across. And Lydia getting a big hug from one of her friends when she could use it was nice.
SpectralTime
2023-05-20 02:14:11 +0000 UTCHe's not bullying her, he's just not sugarcoating stuff anymore. Telling someone "people don't hate you" isn't bullying, even if you tell them in a dickish way.
Squid Hills
2023-05-20 00:41:54 +0000 UTCDidn't come off as bullying to me, more like someone who is so frustrated that he's basically metaphorically firing a shotgun into the air and yelling "ALL RIGHT YOU PRIMITIVE SCREWHEADS, LISTEN UP!"
Mark W
2023-05-20 00:14:45 +0000 UTCInteresting that he's changed back into his butler suit. I guess that means Lydia is taking him seriously again?
Slaughterbug
2023-05-20 00:08:28 +0000 UTCI like this guy, and this page did it. Maybe you need a couple test readers for feedback?
MAR
2023-05-20 00:03:07 +0000 UTCHe doesn't come off as a bully in my eyes, just frank. Lydia needs someone who's willing to tell her the truth and not back down, and I feel like Halver is stepping into the role very well after Isaac served that purpose for a short time.
HungryOuroboros
2023-05-20 00:01:28 +0000 UTCParker once again proves why she's best girl
TheHelixFossil
2023-05-19 23:58:26 +0000 UTC
