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With Miguel and now Tenma, I feel like I'm getting some decent practice at writing characters who don't speak perfect English. I resisted the urge to write them with "cuh-razy aksenstz" and instead tried to work it in through subtle things like screwing up American idioms and using less contractions than one normally would. Hopefully it's coming across well enough.

Speaking of dialog, is it clear that Elianna is replying in panel two? I found myself in one of those nightmare scenarios where the character on the right simply had to speak first, and I didn't want an obnoxious word balloon  tail stretching all over the panel to reach Elianna. Let me know what you think if you would. 

Meanwhile this whole chapter is about to wrap next week. In an effort to keep the narrative more focused, I'm toying with the idea of having a "star" of every chapter. Meaning while I may check in on others as well, there's one character that I keep coming back to. Elianna was the star of this chapter, and I think it went pretty well. As of now my plan for the next chapter is to star Casey and Abbey.   :)


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BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Can't wait

Jariah Synn

XD

Reinbach

Good to hear! :)

Reinbach

Cool! :)

Reinbach

Nice! :)

Reinbach

Right on! :)

Reinbach

Stay tuned! :)

Reinbach

In my head, neither of them are "correct." They represent two halves of my own stance on anime. On one hand, I'm a longtime fan, on the other, I think a lot of it is really lazy and derivative. Derek and Elianna are meant to showcase both sides of that argument cranked up to 11.

Reinbach

Good question! ;D

Reinbach

Glad to hear you find her sympathetic so far! :)

Reinbach

It's just a matter of time! :)

Reinbach

Interesting! I may start playing with colored bubbles in the future.

Reinbach

;D

Reinbach

I don't think so! :D

Reinbach

Am I a bad person for wanting Eli to fall, and embrace the sexual depravity around her?

Vylon Delta

Nooo how dare you stop the corruption of this maiden into the true daughter of her perverted mother and father! Damn you you... Absolutely beautifully chested Japanese... Maid.....

Roy Crowned

*maid uniform

frank barry

The dialogue was clear to me. Marvel often will change the color of the bubble for specific characters or use Viking font for Asgardians. Elianna could have had anime uniform at the beginning and end of her text and Tenma could have had a main uniform, but what you did was fine. I've even seen the text bubble pointer go vertical then horizontal to indicate it was coming from a person off-page. Looking forward to Casey & Abbey <3 ;)

frank barry

Word balloon is fine where it is. Lots of artist do the same with it. When Elianna getting the Big Bone???

Jariah Synn

As weird as it sounds I'm hoping Elianna never has sex and she stays on her stop fucking at school train till I the credits roll. Because dangit I love watching her -try-.

Jon

Another sweet moment with Elianna- it seems like you're using her to get the most out of the emotion known as "FEELZ" (to use the scientific term). Now I'm wondering how someone as clever as Tenma ended up having to take a job like THIS, and how she likes various aspects of it, lol.

ScuzzBucket

Also, the interesting thing about her conflict with Derek about anime is on one hand, Derek is being a judgemental ass about something he clearly hasn’t taken the time to familiarize himself with and towards the people who like it, but on the other, Elly is a spoiled brat who won’t leave other people’s opinions alone and deems people as evil because they don’t like something she likes. Neither side is in the right here.

Lord Washington

Okay, I see her side, except, really? The difference between being evil and good is liking anime or not?

Lord Washington

Wow, I actually feel bad for Elianna here. Not sure what your next phase of her story will be, and I never thought I'd say this, but I hope it goes well. Maybe she'll finally get laid and figure out just how rediculous all of this sex hate has been...

Slaughterbug

I honestly love this bit, It's nice to see Elianna open up and actually communicating with someone instead of trying to keep people from cumming all over the ceiling fans at school. and makes me more and more excited to seeing should Elianna ever get in bed with someone.

Taylored Printers

I agree the balloon is done perfectly. Now my question is just how badly does Tenma want to lean over and totally make out with Elianna? I know I sure do. ;D

Bob Fink

Looks fine to me 🙂

TotesNotThea

Panel 2 is fine, how you've positioned the word balloon is sort of the standard for doing that

Lord of Nightmares

It's gonna be some shit when she gets gang fucked

Matthew Cronin


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