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Terry, No :(......



Wednesday update this week since today is the first! This will probably be the last clean page for... quite some time probably (though with my style of writing, who knows!) Thanks for the support :D

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Comments

I live for this kind of humor, especially in sexy situations!

AC

You're definitely doing good so far! The pacing here has felt really good. Keep doing what you're doing and it'll come out great. c:

Volpethrope

Hmm! Yes, I can definitely see your points with the other comics. I am trying to work through the scenes a bit slower with this one so hopefully I will improve on that a bit! Pacing is definitely a hard thing to wrangle at first. I really appreciate such thoughtful feedback :D

AC

I love this kind of humour, even when it kills the moment, that's the funny thing as well XD

Guumonster

I think with the first two, you were just getting used to how to pace it properly. So far, this one feels like it's flowing comfortably. My only real issue with T43 was the sudden transitions between poses at a few points, so there wasn't much time to enjoy any individual one of them. Basically, they felt less like scenes and more like static images. They were sexy and fun to look at, but I'd have liked them to have gotten more focus individually. As long as this doesn't jump around much and you take appropriate time to develop all the actions with a sense of actual progression, it'll be awesome. And focusing on more story around the sex is a great idea, one that I fully support. These characters are all really interesting, so building them and their setting up more would be wonderful to see.

Volpethrope

The End! What a twist that was.

AC

Thank you :3 I really would like to start leaning towards more story-driven adult work now that I am a little more comfortable with actually making comics (T43 was my first one and completely made on a whim before i even knew it was something I liked to do!) Of course there will be a lot of adult rated goodness in this one but I would love to get a better handle on telling an actual short-story with sexy elements a bit secondary.

AC

Pounce that fuzzball n give him a good tickle for that evilness

Shadow Drake

Terry yes!

CharTheLizard

I have zero issues with drawing this one out more than T43 or Excalibur. I loved both of those, but T43 switched around a little too quickly and Excalibur had a lot of repeated visual content. Take all the time you need for Terry to give his... descriptions. :D

Volpethrope

The RP just got gassy~

N

Oh my gods... *is dying laughing* Goddammit, Terry!

Gwen The Goblin

Moment ruined, comic over.

Nicoya


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