Chapters 105, 106, 107 - The End of the Iron Tangle
Added 2020-10-21 13:21:45 +0000 UTCChapter 105
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Great arc again. I loved the Iron Tangle floor design. Very creative and detailed with a lot of forethought. I especially enjoyed the late reveal of Krakaren political cartoon analogy. I'm excited to see what's in store for #5.
nyt
2020-10-24 17:58:37 +0000 UTCI caught when you messed up Ellen and Imani. Unless she can somehow be with Carl and leading the people back at the station.
arnumart
2020-10-23 00:05:19 +0000 UTCHa. None of you caught me accidentally calling her LITTLE BO BEEP and not the proper LITTLE BO PEEP.
Matt D
2020-10-22 23:57:12 +0000 UTCYeah, I noticed that. I'm pretty sure it wasn't doing that before, but something changed. When I paste from Word to Patreon, it sucks away that space. Weird. Sorry about that.
Matt D
2020-10-22 23:54:13 +0000 UTCOH FUCK THAT ENDING WAS AMAZING
Daisy Sultan
2020-10-22 23:46:07 +0000 UTCOn web and email editions I got some weird typesetting issues with superscript numbers (21st , etc)
Gavin
2020-10-22 04:55:49 +0000 UTCI'm more worried about Zev than anything. I do hope that if this new person is trying to pull off bullshit Carl gives them the middle finger.
Lethos Storms
2020-10-22 04:00:26 +0000 UTCI'm willing to bet that the AI decided that the fight was a draw or didn't count, hence the lack of end credits. Probably won't show up on the summary show either.
Lessthan
2020-10-22 01:48:55 +0000 UTCQuestion how could Imani have held the line and start a fight with the goat? I think it is Elle who is suppose to tell them to calm down than get insulted by the goat.
arnumart
2020-10-22 01:22:40 +0000 UTCThat was amazing!
Deepak Kamlesh
2020-10-22 00:41:38 +0000 UTCOk first Carl personal history is depressing. Really that must have been the worst birthday. Second I wonder if Donut can convince someone on the 5th floor they are a precious item. She has a very high charisma. Third I regret him not seeing what loot he got for wining the death match, for killing a lot of enemies, from the fan box (duct tape I bet) , and from being the most badass human. Fourth the goats are hilarious and I want to see more of them. Five what special skill did he get for hitting 41. So many questions and I both love and hate how this story makes me want more.
arnumart
2020-10-21 23:06:20 +0000 UTCWhoops. Thanks for the catch!
Matt D
2020-10-21 22:45:52 +0000 UTCI love this story. Carl is one of my favorite characters in anything right now. Lots of authors write about their characters iron will and fire of rebellion but I can feel Carl's
Joe ?
2020-10-21 21:41:53 +0000 UTCCould they have killed the god by finishing off the mantaur and throwing him into a portal before he could finish the city boss? You can't leave a boss battle, its one of the core rules, so what happens when a god-level summoning enforced by the system clashes with the boss-rule? Cataclysmic explosion? Rulebreaking god is killed despite being invulnerable?
Rene Christensen
2020-10-21 20:46:21 +0000 UTCAlso had me in tears with Carl's introspection there. I'm gonna leave patreon for a couple months to focus on studies but I'll be back sir. Thanks!
MatrixM
2020-10-21 18:34:43 +0000 UTCFuck me, that was good, that was brilliant, you're a great writer.
MatrixM
2020-10-21 18:34:02 +0000 UTCHah what a roller coaster... or should I say train coaster! Dad joke alert
Deinos
2020-10-21 17:05:11 +0000 UTCFuck.
Adam Barnes
2020-10-21 16:31:52 +0000 UTCWhy? I thought it was uplifting. Tizquick and Brandy took control of their own destinies and escaped from a continuous cycle of torture and abuse. The Maestro was humiliated. Everyone we care about survived. What's not to like?
David K. Storrs
2020-10-21 15:42:26 +0000 UTCO_O epic
zalex
2020-10-21 15:31:05 +0000 UTCGodspeed, you bombalicious bastard
Saltysaurus Nom
2020-10-21 15:14:43 +0000 UTCOK CARL OK👏👏👏 break them all
Ethan Norton
2020-10-21 14:57:25 +0000 UTCI approve this message.
Adam Roundfield
2020-10-21 14:53:10 +0000 UTCWell that wasn't depressing at all.
Alexander Dupree
2020-10-21 14:25:18 +0000 UTC>“Okay,” I said. I have a few more explosive satchels to place at the back of the train, and then you’ll be ready to go. “Goodbye, Brandy. Goodbye Tizquick.” The quotes here don't work correctly. Either the middle part should be in quotes or it should be re-worded and tense changed (I place a few final explosive satchels at the back of the train, and then they're ready to go) >"Donut, Katia, and I are going to jump on and then head toward the train station" Should be Train Yard?
Zachary T Pruckowski
2020-10-21 14:17:59 +0000 UTCJesus, that was a roller-coaster.
Lessthan
2020-10-21 13:55:03 +0000 UTCHoly Chapter Dump Batman! Great stuff, as always!
Alex LeBlanc
2020-10-21 13:24:24 +0000 UTC
