Chapter 1920
Added 2021-11-20 22:46:38 +0000 UTCComments
two guards' were frozen --> two guards were frozen the guards' in the poker game --> the guards in the poker game his skin begins to sizzle --> began bearing small portion --> bearing a small portion "keeping himself focused was a bit fraught" - fraught with danger? can't just use 'fraught' by itself or did you mean to use another word there?
dood
2022-02-24 07:29:05 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter.
Joshua Little
2021-11-21 23:16:23 +0000 UTC"To let the shape he scrubbed away " should be "To let the shape *be* scrubbed away"
Nicholas F
2021-11-21 14:04:04 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter
nethernight11
2021-11-20 23:31:35 +0000 UTCI kind of want to see a chapter where randidly is sleeping and someone sneaks up to attack him and their attacks do nothing to him.
Nathan Emerson
2021-11-20 23:01:22 +0000 UTCPlease check the tenses, you have a bunch of sentences in present tense mixed in with the usual past tense.
WickedlyDesigned
2021-11-20 23:00:19 +0000 UTCCorrections
PuDDleS4263
2021-11-20 22:50:17 +0000 UTC
