Locked in Chastity v0.06
Added 2024-02-25 14:20:36 +0000 UTC
HEYAAAAAAAAAAA!!! here's the update!!!
changelog:
-Two new CG's
-A few new sprites
-Grammar fixes
-I forgot the specific amount of dialogue was added but...it's just as big as last time and a bit moreπ
Have fun!!
Its now back to regular drawing timeeeeee
Comments
Howdy, loved the start of this VN and can't wait to read what comes next. Though I have a couple suggestions on the current product and for the future direction. To begin with you've probably already heard it but the complete lack of sound is less than ideal. BGM, sexual sound effects, and voice (Including moan and panting loops) add atmosphere which dramatically enhances the quality of scenes. Be that upbeat music that relaxes the player and communicates the MC's present mood, to intense panting, and the sounds of skin smacking skin that lets the player and MC know what's occurring long before they see anything. That isn't to say that everything needs sound as silence communicates just as well a scream of pain, but ideally you should use every tool you can to build atmosphere and eros. Next, its important to remember that NTR stories are ultimately about tension and build up as much as they are about the sexual acts themselves. Ideally, you should focus on hints and the chase for the first third of the story. The goal is to make the viewer look forward to future content as this will enhance the quality of future scenes and allow you to make a more explosive and dramatic scene. Lastly, I've always considered the penis reveal, deflowering, creampie, and falling scenes to be the major H-scenes in NTR and you shouldn't waste them. For example the penis reveal could have been better used if you took your time with it. I liked how you handled it till the point that the heroine walked into the bathroom, but then I was disappointed at the wasted potential. Ideally, I would rewrite that part in order to better pace the heroine's development by not allowing her to see the penis so early. My suggestion is to focus on how the heroine becomes self-conscious and perverted from her lewd and primal desires. Have Kim start off imagining it like you had her do but then move on to having her looking at his bulge more closely (You can add a CG here) where Kim could realize she has never looked or noticed bulges in any man's pants but that William's bulge is massive. This would slowly show her evolving mental state and her new growing perversion. You could tie Kim's new 'curiosity' back to Jamie with minor comments on his penis from her or about how she never really noticed how big he was until recently. This will help evenly build sexual corruption and tension. You could then move on to having her ask Alex about it or even looking up a large penis (Where she could find one that is large but not as big as the Bull so as to save a surprise for later.) Lastly, it could all end with an explosive reveal when she walks into the school shower room and hears something perverted and foreign. She keeps quiet and enters the showers to silently peek but slips on some liquid and falls on her butt face to face with 'That'! Naturally the above is just a suggestion, and even if you don't see the need to make any changes like I've suggested I hope you take some of the concepts and ideas for future content and games. I look forward to what you create and have purchased a year's subscription already because I know you'll do great!
Austin Pugh
2024-03-05 04:21:08 +0000 UTCUwahhhhhhhhhhhhhh I just woke up and Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuu!!!!!!π£πππ₯°π₯°
Gelato Princess
2024-02-26 01:38:51 +0000 UTCHey there. As a fellow artist and Hentai Game Dev (I mostly do RPGmaker games), I want to congratulate you on your first game. There aren't a lot of hardcore NTR games out there. Really looking forward to what you will do in the future when it comes to game as this is a great start I think. Hopefully we'll more more NTR games from you in the future with other subjects like maybe more mommy dommes, findom etc ;).
Tonkatsu-chan
2024-02-25 19:50:51 +0000 UTC
