Looking for feedback and using this post to get it
Added 2025-10-22 20:26:27 +0000 UTCHey everybody, I’ll let you know that I read the comments you leave and make a note of them
Sometimes I have the opportunity to reply and sometimes I don’t just depend on life, but I want you to know that I appreciate all the comments you make regarding the stories
So for the time loop, let’s talk about it for a second. Let’s make this post the one that we converse in for a while. I’ll try and see if I can find a way to sticky it and I’ll comment on the post that you make. Let’s list the things that you find the most. Immersion breaking.
Obviously, the last chapter with Francis, not being happy with Stenson when Francis realized he was being played more than he had thought wasn’t given enough leading up to
I’ll take a look at that and try to see if I can’t find a better way to make it work the way I wanted to
The part with the King‘s wife and potential manipulation is Story stuff for down the road so it’s supposed to be kind of the way it is, but I’ll take a look at that again
Anything else you guys want to discuss or talk about or share with me please do it here and I will gladly go back-and-forth with you guys to make sure I’m getting the best story out to everybody
Thank you again for Enjoying the story enough to want to see it written better and tell me about it
Comments
So I could spoil some, but I'll try not to. Part of it is this: Stenson doesn't time loop so all he gets is from Francis. Francis tells what he thinks he needs to everytime (but there will be moments he does/doesn't). That influences Stenson in different paths. The main thread stays the same, the road there... But we'll be traveling to other kingdoms :)
Shawn Wilson
2025-10-24 21:10:05 +0000 UTCI don't actually mind, Francis has not been always the brightest so it makes sense that it took a while for him to realise. Stenson has a point telling him to see how people changes to his power and how they react. I'd expect still more growth from Francis and be more logical and rational, but he's already changing and making mistakes it's part of that process
Diodato Adinolfi
2025-10-24 13:51:27 +0000 UTCI'm more wondering when Francis will realize he doesn't have to stay in the Kingdom and could find more information from the other Kingdoms. As for Stenson, it did seem kinda a abrupt, as his manipulations don't feel negative intent. More attempts at positive influence? Stenson has to understand by now that Francis is going to go beyond him eventually. So why make an enemy?
Daniel
2025-10-23 15:48:33 +0000 UTC
