Content Sneak Peek
Added 2024-05-14 23:16:59 +0000 UTCThis next scene contains a spoiler, but it's a great example of the scene I'm writing between the MC and the nephew (from the Dependent challenge).
The MC is taking the nephew out into the middle of the woods for some survival training. As they make their way into a grassy meadow, the MC pitches the idea to lure a zombie there, so the nephew can practice killing the infected.
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The acrid smoke has scarcely begun wafting over the meadow when a lone, shambling figure emerges from the treeline—clearly drawn by the unmistakable beacon. As it lurches closer, the sickly afternoon light reveals its cadaverous features in disturbing detail. A female, by the looks of her wirery frame, perhaps in her mid-thirties. Greasy dark hair hanging in lank ropes around a face frozen in a final twisted grin. And clinging to what remains of her torso is a tattered, faded Hello Kitty t-shirt, the bright logo now rendered macabre against the undead horror's ruined flesh.
You tense immediately at the sight, half-raising your weapon. But it's ${dep_name}'s muffled gasp of shock that fully snares your attention. His face has drained of all color, the young boy staring in horror at the approaching infected as it relentlessly closes the distance.
"Oh my gosh…" he whispers. "That…that looks just like…"
"Your mother."
As you stare at her, you…
Comments
The last two options are both great. The first I can see if you're trying to shape your Nephew into a tool hardened for the singular purpose of survival
Wayne
2024-05-16 17:09:28 +0000 UTCI was trying to convey that it's not really his mother. It just looks like her. I will make sure that part is more clear.
Jim Dattilo
2024-05-15 18:48:15 +0000 UTCWill we get any explanation of how she got there? Wasn't she out of town or something?
Spencer from Earth
2024-05-15 12:50:02 +0000 UTC